Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live

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As the [Article Error]technology and economy developing[Grammartical Error], food is more convenient than past to be obtained.[Passive Voice] We can use applications on our smart phones[Spelling Error] to order takeout or make fast foods such as instant noodles. And we can reserve the remain in the refrigerators. All of [Verbose]these change our living style greatly[Problematic Adverb], but there is[Article Error] hidden danger which would threaten our health and the environment. In my opinion, the defeats it bringing(Hard-to-understand) are more than the virtues, and the change does not actually [Problematic/unnecessary adverb]improve our living quality.

With the development of logistics, it is a trend that people especially young people are accustomed [Passive Voice] to ordering takeout. Though compared with cooking by ourselves, it is much convenient, but it has bad [Article Error]effect on our physical health. For the ingredients they used would not as good as ours. And takeout food usually has sanitary[Article Error]problem. Besides, taking the remain in fridge [Article Error]as a meal which has more bacteria and less nutrition is not a good idea. Both of them would lead to an unhealthy diet.

Admittedly, the access we obtain food may cause a series of environmental problems seriously[Problematic Adverb]. For the plastics would pollute the soil and the ocean for a long time. The packing bag of snacks drifted into ocean [Article Error]may be eaten by[Passive Voice] marine animals and then accumulate in their stomachs which would threaten their lives and decrease the biodiversity. [Verbose, Hard-to-read sentence] The report can be seen[Passive Voice] frequently that many animals died of eating plastic products mistakenly[Problematic Adverb] and then starving to death.

To sum up, although it seems like we have more choices in hand, our living quality is hardly improved. The convenience we enjoyed has been sacrificing our physical health and harmonious environment.

Score: 70.8

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In the modern world With the society developing, it is more convenient to prepare food. We can use applications on our smartphones to order takeout, or make fast foods such as instant noodles. And we can reserve the remains in the refrigerators. These ways have largely changed our living style, but there are also hidden dangers we usually ignore that could ignored  would threaten our health and the environment. In my opinion, the defects are more than the virtues, and the change does not improve our living quality.

First of all, it is a trend that people especially young people are used to ordering takeout. Though compared with cooking by ourselves, it is more much convenient, but it has some bad effects on our physical health because/since. For the ingredients they used would not be as good as ours. And takeout food usually has a sanitation problem. Besides, eating taking the remains in the fridge as a meal which has more bacteria and less nutrition is not a good idea. Both of them would lead to an unhealthy diet.

Admittedly, the way we package access we obtain food may cause a series of environmental problems because . For the plastics would pollute the soil and the ocean for a long time. The packing bag of snacks that drifted into the ocean may be eaten by marine animals and then accumulate in their stomachs. This would threaten their lives and decrease the biodiversity. We have frequently seen the reports that many animals died from of eating plastic products by mistake and then starving to death.

To sum up, although it seems like we have more choices in hand, our living quality has is hardly improved. The convenience we enjoyed has been sacrificing our physical health and harmonious environment.