Nowadays it is easier for people to maintain good health than it was in the past

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  • Elva
    University: 中国药科大学
    Nationality: 中国
    February 7, 2020 at 3:01 am

    Nowadays it is easier for people to maintain good health than it was in the past.

    Recently, there is always a controversial issue that compared with past, nowadays people can retain health easier. From my perspective, I disagree with the following statements.

    To begin with, nowadays people are facing more severe environmental problems which result in some incurable diseases like lung cancer than these in the past. As it known to us all, the rapid development of industrialization has triggered the emergence of significant amounts of pollutants around city centers. The toxic gases like sulfur dioxide released from factories are the chief culprit of the air pollution. It is not hard to imagine that the more pollutants like PM2.5 rotating in the air, the more risks of suffering disease for people. A recent survey conducted by a prestigious university shows that the amount of people who have lung cancer has increased abruptly and This type of cancer alone kills more people each year than any other illness. However, there are no any effective medications or vaccines to address the illness. Obviously, once people fall into this disease, they may be bothered by it until they die. Therefore, nowadays such incurable diseases indeed severely threat people’s health.

    More importantly, in the few years, due to the fast pace of modern life in metropolis, it is harder for people to keep healthy. In the contemporary world , intensive competitions and overwhelming workload cause harms to people from all ages. For example, some white-collar during their office hours have to eat fast food like hamburgers with high calories and low nutrition in order to buy time. Besides, a report shows that people who did not achieve adequate success or even suffered failures after enduring long-time high pressure from their study or work, ultimately may not face criticisms and thus will die by suicide. The reason underlying the above health problem is nothing but suffering high pressure of life . Undoubtedly, nowadays,   people have to deal with many challenges especially maintaining health in the tough life.

    All in all, as the reasons mentioned above, I firmly believe that in the contemporary world, it is harder for people to keep healthy.

    February 13, 2020 at 5:47 am

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    Elva
    University: 中国药科大学
    Nationality: 中国
    February 19, 2020 at 10:08 am

    Recently, there is always a controversial issue that today, people are able to stay healthy easier than before. From my point of view, I disagree with the following statements.

    To begin with, nowadays people are facing severe environment problems which results in the occurrence of incurable diseases like lung cancer. As known to all, the rapid development industrialization has triggered the emergence of significant amount of pollutants around the city centers. The toxic gases like sulfur dioxide releases from plants are the chief culprit of pollution. Undoubtedly, the more pollutants like PM2.5 rotating in the air, the more risks of suffering disease for people. A recent survey shows that the number of people with lung cancer has increased abruptly. The type of cancer alone kills more people each year than any other illness. However, there are no effective medications and vaccine enable to address this diseases thoroughly. Once people fall in to this disease, they may be tortured until they die. Therefore, nowadays, such incurable diseases indeed severely threaten people’s health.

    More importantly, due to the past pace of modern life in metropolis like Beijing, it is harder for people to keep healthy than before. In the contemporary world, fierce competition and overwhelming workload cause harms to people from all ages. For example, some white -collar during their office hours have to eat fast food in order to buy time. Besides, according to a research, people who did not achieve adequate success or even suffer failure after enduring long time high pressure from their work or study, ultimately, may not face criticisms and thus will die by suicide. What leads to the above mentioned healthy problem is noting but enduring too much pressure of life. Undoubtedly, nowadays, no matter youngster or adults have to deal with many challenges, especially maintaining a good health in the competitive world.

    All in all, as the reasons mentioned above, I firmly believe that in the contemporary world, it is harder for people to keep healthy.

    February 20, 2020 at 10:27 pm

    Score: 57.6

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