Parents are the best teachers or not
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April 26, 2019 at 2:22 pm
TOPIC: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Looking back on our life track, we would find that there are countless people left a mark on us. And throughout our life, especially when we are child, we have the closest relationship and communication with our parents. Because of this, I firmly agree that parents are the best teachers to us.
There is no doubt that teachers in the school do have a critical impact on us, for they teach us science and professional knowledge, however, their guidance usually limited in classes. In the opposite, parents are the teachers of our life. They usually stay with us, thus we can learn from them not only by what they said but also by what they did. And in my opinion, it is the most effective and natural way to learn. For instance, the animals in the nature such as elephants and lions accumulate experiences to improve their viability by imitating their parents’ behavior. And the same situation naturally happened even when we were too young to know what is learning. Still, it is common to see that a person from a harmony family is more possible to be friendly and good-tempered.
What’s more, parents are the very few people who treat us totally sincerely in the world. We can trust them without suspecting their intention, however, we usually have to think about other’s purpose when he/she raises advice to us. Admittedly, for they have been watching our whole growing track, they must know us better than other one. Combining with their rich experience, their suggests would be more practical to accept in many situations.
Taking all these into consideration, many people may give us some guidance in different situations, and in this way, they can be our teachers, but our parents must be the best one, no matter considering the time span or the quality of teaching.
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April 26, 2019 at 8:44 pmScore: 67.1
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- Reduce the number of sentences exceeding 20 words.
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Problems Highlight
Looking back on our life track, we would find that there are countless people left [Grammatical Error]a mark on us. And throughout our life, especially when we are child [Grammatical Error], we have the closest relationship and communication with our parents. Because of this, I firmly [Problematic Adverb]agree that parents are the best teachers to us.
There is no doubt that teachers in the school do have a critical impact on us, for they teach us science and professional knowledge, [Punctuation Error]however, their guidance usually limited in classes. [Wordy Sentence] In the opposite, parents are the teachers of our life. They usually stay with us, [Punctuation Error]thus we can learn from them not only by what they said but also by what they did. And in my opinion, it is the most effective and natural way to learn. For instance, the animals in the nature [Grammatical Error] such as elephants and lions accumulate experiences to improve their viability by imitating their parents’ behavior. [Wordy Sentence]And the same situation naturally [Problematic Adverb] happened even when we were too young to know what is learning. Still, it is common to see that a person from a harmony family is more possible [More… Than…]to be friendly and good-tempered.
What’s more, parents are the very few people who treat us totally [Problematic Adverb]sincerely[Problematic Adverb] in the world. We can trust them without suspecting their intention, [Punctuation Error]however, we usually have to think about other’s purpose when he/she raises advice to us. Admittedly, for they have been watching our whole growing track, they must know us better than other {Wrong Word] one. Combining with their rich experience, their suggests would be more practical to accept in many situations. [Grammatical Error]
Taking all these into consideration, many people may give us some guidance in different situations, and in this way, they can be our teachers, but our parents must be the best one, no matter considering the time span [Spelling Error]or the quality of teaching. [Wordy Sentence]
April 29, 2019 at 11:52 amModified Version:
Looking back on our life track, we would find that there are countless people leave a mark on us. And throughout our life, especially when we are children, we have the closest relationship and communication with our parents. Because of this, I firmly believe that parents are the best teachers to us.
There is no doubt that teachers in the school do have a critical impact on us, for they teach us science and professional knowledge, but their guidance usually limited in classes. However, parents are the teachers of our life. They usually stay with us, so we can learn from them not only by what they said but also by what they did. And in my opinion, it is the most effective and natural way to learn. For instance, the animals such as elephants and lions improve their viability by imitating their parents’ behavior, and the same situation happened when we were very young. Still, it is common to see that a person from a harmony family is more possible to be friendly and good-tempered than others.
What’s more, parents are the very few people who treat us fully honestly in the world. We can trust them without suspecting their intention, but we usually have to think about other’s purpose when he/she raises advice to us. Admittedly, for they have been watching our whole growing track, they must know us better than others. Combined with their rich experience, their suggests would be more practical to accept in many situations.
Taking all these into consideration, many people may give us some guidance in different situations. Though all of them can be our teachers, our parents must be the best one.
April 29, 2019 at 9:53 pmScore: 71.3 (good job!)
Suggestions for Improvement
- Shorten sentences exceeding 20 words;
- Reduce grammatical errors.
Rewrite and resubmit your essay.
Problems Highlight
Looking back on our life track, we would find that there are countless people leave a mark on us. [Remove There…Be/Grammatical Error] And throughout our life, especially when we are children, we have the closest relationship and communication with our parents.[Verbose &Grammatical Error] Because of this, I firmly believe that parents are the best teachers to [Grammatical Error]us.
There is no doubt that teachers in the school do have a critical impact on us, for they teach us science and professional knowledge, but their guidance usually limited in classes[Verbose]. However, parents are the teachers of our life. They usually stay with us, so we can learn from them not only by what they said but also by what they did. And in my opinion, it is the most effective and natural way to learn. For instance, the animals [Grammatical Error] such as elephants and lions improve their viability by imitating their parents’ behavior, and the same situation happened when we were very young. [Verbose]Still, it is common to see that a person from a harmony family is more possible to be friendly and good-tempered than others.
What’s more, parents are the very few people who treat us fully [Problematic/unnecessary adverb ] honestly in the world. We can trust them without suspecting their intention, but we usually have to think about other’s purpose when he/she raises advice to us. Admittedly, for they have been watching our whole growing track, they must know us better than others. Combined with their rich experience, their suggests would be more practical to accept in many situations.
Taking all these into consideration, many people may give us some guidance in different situations. Though all of them can be our teachers, our parents must be the best one.
April 30, 2019 at 1:20 pmModified Version 2:
Looking back on our life track, we would find that countless people leave a mark on us. When we are children, we have the closest relationship with our parents. In this situation, parents are the people who give us most guidance in life, and I firmly believe that parents are the best teachers of us.
There is no doubt that teachers in the school do have a critical impact on us, for they teach us science and professional knowledge. But their guidance usually limited in classes. However, parents are the teachers of our life. For they usually stay with us, so we can learn from them not only by what they said but also by what they did. And in my opinion, it is the most effective and natural way to learn. For instance, the animal such as elephants and lions improve their viability by imitating their parents’ behavior, and the same situation happened when we were very young. Still, a person from a harmony family is more possible to be friendly and good-tempered.
What’s more, parents are the very few people who treat us honestly in the world. We can trust them without suspecting their intention, but we usually have to think about other’s purpose when he/she raises advice to us. Admittedly, for they have been watching our whole growing track, they must know us better than others. Combined with their rich experience, their suggests would be more practical to accept in many situations.
Taking all these into consideration, many people may give us some guidance in different situations. Though all of them can be our teachers, our parents must be the best one.
May 1, 2019 at 2:05 amScore: 73.9
Good job! I will get back to you shortly.
Best,
Lin Qiu
May 1, 2019 at 1:18 pmHi, here is your final edited essay.
https://writersforme.com/sherry-toefl-essay-20190501/
Best wishes,
Lin Qiu
