Parents should teach children how to be good members

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  • April 26, 2019 at 8:28 pm


    University: SYSU

    Nationality: China

    April 26, 2019 at 3:06 am

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    Topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

    Some people believe that children should learn how to be good citizens at school. But others think that it would be better for them to learn it from their parents. [1] I am in favour of the second opinion.

    A child’s education is incomplete if it only includes learning knowledge and skills. It should also focus on the formation of personality and the nurturing of ethics. But generally, schools are places to teach students how to make a living. And it is impossible for any teacher to take responsibility for every student’s personality formation since teachers are always outnumbered by their students.

    So parents should see to it that their kids can get a suitable family education. There are two main reasons why parents should teach children how to be qualified members of society rather than teachers. Firstly, according to a considerable number of research results, people’s personalities can be much more malleable when they are at a tender age than in any other periods. Compared to teachers, children at that young age usually spend more time with their parents. Therefore, it is a good time for parents to teach their children right from wrong and help them to form proper moral conviction.

    Secondly, children tend to imitate their parents unconsciously. So kids would be able to grow up healthier if their parents set good examples to them. For instance, those children who grow up in loving families can always achieve better performance in many respects than other children. Therefore, they can surely make great contributions to the society.

    To summarize, to help the young generation to become better members of the society, family and school education are both vital. But parents’ education is more indispensable.

    comments: Excellent work! There are VERY few grammar/usage issues and your response is directly related to the question. [1] But it’s definitely not a good idea to restate the question word for word at the beginning. It is okay to ‘paraphrase’, i.e., to use different words that mean almost the same thing, but that isn’t necessary either.