Some people believe that professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers make greater contributions to society, so they should be paid more than those in sport and entertainment industry. 

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  • Xushanshan
    University: South China Agricultural University
    Nationality: China
    December 17, 2021 at 4:32 pm

    Some people believe that professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers make greater contributions to society, so they should be paid more than those in sport and entertainment industry. 

    It is hard to deny that  many athletes fight for the pride of their country in the Olympic games and massive numbers of stars earn large sums for the movie industry .Such a fact leads impressionable people to generate the opinion that they deserve higher payment than ordinary workers as they become the symbols of a national industry and the image of top companies. However,such a statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies ,and it should be examined meticulously. As far as social stability,productivity and fairness are concerned, I strongly hold that occupational employees should be paid more than others who work in sport and recreation fields.

    First and foremost, teachers play a pivotal role in cultivating talents for society and ensuring stability of a country.

    To be more specific history teachers render students to learn experiences from past events such as wars and revolutions ; students know the process of development of a society,build the world view. Through teachers’ guidance in laws curriculum they know how to distinguish right from wrong and establish a perception of values, behave in a socially-acceptable way. Moreover, all of this knowledge is the bedrock of being an elite. They can constantly make profits for  their own country in the corporate world. If we do not pay attention to ignore  people who work in the education industry, part of people without basic literacy and law consciousness, they may rob or steal for their livelihood. Therefore,educators notably contribute to the stability of society .On the other hand,  for athletes and stars, No matter how much they did do for the economy, they always need a teacher to guide them from an early age so that to avoid managing to make a fortune by devious means.

    Additionally, the fact that mostlymainly primarily only the doctor can help to cure challenging severe tough and new diseases effectively especially during the pandemic indicates that social productivity and efficiency would not have been assured if we do not have doctors.

     

     

    December 18, 2021 at 5:54 pm

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    Xushanshan
    University: South China Agricultural University
    Nationality: China
    December 20, 2021 at 11:12 am

    First and foremost, teachers are capable of cultivating talents of healthy personality. For example, history teachers render students to learn life experience from pass events such as was and revolutions and students get to understand the process of development of society. Through teachers’ guidance in law curriculum, students are capable of distinguishing right from wrong, avoiding doing something illegal and behaving in a socially-acceptable way. All of this is the bedrock of being elites. If we do not pay more to teachers, they will lose their motivations to train students to be a better and upright person. As a result, students may not be able to provide leadership in the corporate world for national companies and make fortunes and act for the welfare of their own countries.

    On the other hand, some celebrities who working in the entertainment,lacking of legal awareness, like FAN Bingbing and Zheng Shuang, were accused of tax evasion. They need to be educated from an early age, before and during their working process so as to avoid earning money in a devious mean.      Therefore, teachers play a pivotal role in providing high-qualified experts for the society and facilitating the stability of society.

    December 20, 2021 at 7:04 pm

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