Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay.

Partial Revision (please fix similar errors, revise whole essay, and resubmit) (wordy, many places to simplify)

In the media a variety of events are not likely to influence our daily life. Some people choose to ignore the news, however, I believe that it is necessary to gain a general understanding of these events.

First of all, some news may draw our attention to potential issues. Many events just have not had an impact on our life  yet, but they will in the future. For example, a tornado is spreading in southern Asia right now making countries like Vietnam suffer a lot. It will likely move north to China and bring disaster for us. By paying attention to this news, we are capable of preparing for the upcoming extreme weather and reducing its loss..

Further, it is essential to acquire a grasp of news for social contact. To be more specific, workmates and classmates always talk about news during the break. If we fail to catch up with the latest trends, we may have difficulties in maintaining bonds with them. Thus, we need to know about all kinds of events occurring around the world rather than the limited ones affecting us.

Last but not least, caring about all types of events around the world can help us cultivate a sense of responsibility. Nowadays, the megatrend is tending to increase globalization and break down the boundaries between countries and territories. It is significantly hard to identify an event that has no impact on our daily life. Only when we notice all the news around the world, can we refer to ourselves as responsible people paying attention to the future and the destiny of human beings.

In conclusion, accepting information limited to those affecting our daily life is far from enough.

A variety of events are presented in the media, most of which are not likely to influence our daily lives. Some people choose to ignore this news/information, However. I reject this notion and instead believe that it’s necessary for us to gain/have/acquire/attain a general understanding of these events. go through and

First of all, some of this news may arouse our attention to potential issues.  A large number of events just have not/may not have had an impact on our lives yet, but they will in the future. For example, a tornado is spreading in southern Asia right now making countries like Vietnam suffer a lot. It will likely move north to China and bring disaster for us. By paying attention to this news, we are capable of preparing for the upcoming extreme weather and reducing its effect/impact loss.

Furthermore, it’s essential to acquire a grasp of news for social contact. To be more specific, workmates and classmates always talk about updating information during the break. If we fail to catch up with the latest trends and don’t update our information sources, we may have difficulties in maintaining bonds/relationships/contact with them. Thus, it’s essential for us to know about all kinds of events occurring around the world rather than the limited ones affecting us.

Last but not least, caring about all types of events around the world can help us [to] cultivate a sense of responsibility. Nowadays, the megatrend is tending to increase globalization and break down the boundaries between countries and territories. It’s significantly harder to identify an event that has no impact on our daily lives. Only when we notice all the news around the world, can we refer to ourselves as responsible people paying attention to the future and the destiny of human beings.

In conclusion, only accepting information limited to those what/that which affects affecting our daily lives is far from/not nearly enough.