Several possible causes of the Little Ice Age

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  • Zach D
    University: Wuhan University
    Nationality: China
    March 3, 2021 at 4:24 pm

    Several possible causes of the Little Ice Age

    As record, there has been a long period of time, which lasted for about 1350 years, that the Earth suffers an unusually harsh cold days where glaciers grew larger in many areas, and scientists called it the Little Ice Age. However, the consequence of its formation still remains unknown, here are just some hypothesis which might be a little outdated.

    First, it supposes the cold winters may have been caused by the Gulf Stream during glaciers melted after weird warm weather which producted much cold freshwater to cool the temperature down. Then there comes doubts that the Gulf Stream only affect Europe and North America which means it can’t explain the global chill while the Northern Hemisphere is indeed cold.

    Second, a theory about vocanic eruption was promoted, which suggest the clouds of dust and sulfer induced by volcanals induce the Little Ice Age. Without any proof like the change of snow’s color to imply there was enough dust to hide the sunlight, this hypothesis was also overthrew.

    Third, the reading part mentioned the decrease of humanpopulation which accelerate trees’ growth leading to stronger photosynsis which could cut down the greenhouse effect by consume carbondioxide. But it can’t stand still, either. Because experts find that there is no enough time for plants to grow such large scale and reduce greenhouse gas, and as the increase of human population follow behind, the area of plants would become smaller rapidly. So the final conjecture is negated.

    March 3, 2021 at 5:01 pm

    Score: ungraded

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    1. About 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
    2. Lots of grammatical/spelling errors.

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    Zach D
    University: Wuhan University
    Nationality: China
    March 4, 2021 at 1:52 pm

    As record of the Little Ice Age, there has been a long period of time that the Earth suffers unusually harsh cold days. Here, the professor says current research data unlies the conjucture about how the Little Ice Age forms.

    Firstly, it supposes the cold winters may have been caused by the Gulf Stream after weird warm weather . Warm air renders graciers melted and produces cold freshwater to cool the Earth down. But the professor casts doubt that the Gulf Stream only affect Europe and North America, which means it can’t explain the global chill.

    Secondly, another theory about volcanic eruption was promoted, which suggested the clouds of dust and sulfer induced by volcanoes cause the Little Ice Age. However, if there was enough clouds to affect the temperature, people would discover some visual symptom like the color changing in snow. Without any relative report,  the professor overthrows the hypothesis again.

    Thirdly, the reading part mentions the decrease of human population which accelerates trees’ growth. With more trees growing, plants consumed a deluge of carbon dioxide. But it can’t be the reason, either. Because experts find that there is no enough time for plants to grow so fast to reduce such amount of greenhouse gas. What’s more, with the increase of human population following behind, the area of plants would become smaller rapidly. So the final explanation is negated.

    March 4, 2021 at 3:17 pm

    (As record of) [unclear  ] the Little Ice Age, there (has been)[grammatical error  ] a long period of time that [during which  ] the Earth suffers [grammatical error  ] [ from ] unusually harsh cold days. Here, the professor says [ /states that ] current research data (unlies the conjucture about)[ unclear ] how the Little Ice Age forms.

    Firstly, it[unclear pronoun  ] supposes the cold winters (may have been)[ grammatical error ] caused by the Gulf Stream after[ as a result of/resulted from ] weird warm weather . Warm air renders graciers [spelling error  ] melted and produces cold freshwater to cool the Earth down. But the professor casts doubt [ preposition error ] that the Gulf Stream only affect[grammatical error  ] Europe and North America, which means it can’t[/fails to  ] explain[ /elucidate ] the global chill.

    Secondly, another [ Another ] theory about volcanic eruption was promoted, which suggested[tense error  ] the clouds of dust and sulfer[ spelling error ] induced by volcanoes cause[/be conducive to the onset of ] the Little Ice Age. However, if there was [ grammatical error/subjunctive ] enough clouds to affect the temperature, people would discover some visual symptom[ word form error ] like the color changing in snow. Without any relative report,  the professor overthrows the[ his ] hypothesis again.

    Thirdly, the reading part mentions the decrease of human population which accelerates trees’ growth[ wordy/unclear ] . With more trees growing, plants consumed a deluge of carbon dioxide. But it[ /this ] can[ tense error ] ’t be the reason, either. Because[because  ] experts find that there is no[ wrong word ] enough time for plants to grow so fast [ as ] to reduce such [gargantuan  ] amount of greenhouse gas. What’s more, with the increase of human population following behind, the area of plants would become smaller [ diminish ] rapidly. So the final explanation is negated[ unclear ] .

    Zach D
    University: Wuhan University
    Nationality: China
    March 8, 2021 at 3:35 pm

    There a long period of time during the Earth suffers from unusually harsh days is named the Little Ice Age. With the research of the Little Ice Age, three presumptions regarding to the formation of these cold days were raised. However, the professor disproved all of them with telling evidence.

    Firstly, one of the reason that the cold winters formed is caused by weird warm weather from the Gulf Stream . Warm air renders glaciers melted and produces cold freshwater to cool the Earth down. But the professor casts doubt on the range where the Gulf Stream could affect. In fact, the Gulf Stream can only impact on European or North American climate, which means it can’t explain the global chill.

    Another theory about volcanic eruption suggested the clouds of dust and sulphur induced by volcanoes are conducive to the beginning of the Little Ice Age. However, if there were enough clouds to affect the temperature, people would discover some visual symptoms like color changing in snow. Without any relative report,  the professor overthrows the hypothesis again.

    Thirdly, the reading part mentions the decrease of human population leading to accelerates trees’ growth. And with more trees growing, plants consumed a deluge of carbon dioxide. But this couldn’t be the reason, either. Because experts find that there is not enough time for plants to grow so fast as to reduce such immense amount of greenhouse gas. What’s more, with the increase of human population , the area of plants would vanish rapidly. So there are adequate facts to negate this assumption.

    March 8, 2021 at 10:14 pm

    Score: ungraded

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    1. Lots of grammatical errors.
    2. Rewrite underlined sentences.

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    Zach D
    University: Wuhan University
    Nationality: China
    March 15, 2021 at 5:08 pm

    Once Earth suffers from unusually harsh days which are named the Little Ice Age. With the research of the Little Ice Age, three presumptions regarding the formation of these cold days were raised. However, the professor disproved all of them with telling evidence.

    Firstly, one of the reasons that long-term weird warm weather caused the cold winters through the Gulf Stream . Warm air renders glaciers melted and produces cold fresh water to cool the Earth down. But the professor casts doubt on the range where the Gulf Stream could affect. The Gulf Stream can only impact on European or North American climate, which means it can’t explain the global chill.

    Another theory about volcanic eruption suggested the clouds of dust and sulfur induced by volcanoes are conducive to the beginning of the Little Ice Age. However, if there were enough clouds to affect the temperature, people would discover some visual symptoms like color changing in snow. Without any relative report,  the professor overthrows the hypothesis again.

    Thirdly, the reading part mentions the decrease of human population accelerates trees’ growth. And with more trees growing, plants consumed a deluge of carbon dioxide. But this couldn’t be the reason, either. Experts find that there is not enough time for plants to grow so fast as to reduce such an immense amount of greenhouse gas. What’s more, with steep rise in human polulations , the area of plants would vanish rapidly. So there are adequate facts to negate this assumption.

    March 17, 2021 at 7:36 pm

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