Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

  • LZCHING
    University: 中大南方
    Nationality: China
    March 2, 2020 at 3:48 am

    Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

    I take the view that not only history but also other subjects are necessary for us to learn.Nowadays,students should be absorbed in all kinds of knowledge and form the basis of the future life.Although science and technology are the new trend toward social,history is the good method to reflect the problem.

    History is like our root,if we have a bad connection with it we cannot have adequate nutrition.The biggest events happened in the past have a deep influence one country.In addition,people should be learned it well so that they cannot make the same mistake.Meanwhile,history can give us a hand to aid us complete the future plan or achieve some aims.Sometime,it looks like out of touch with the present but once we reject it,regardless of whether nationality or nations both cannot get good development.

    On the other hand,science and technology play a important role from beginning to end.For us,the fundamental development depends on them,by means of them we can exhibition our advantage.At present,national functioning and social development both want the support by them.It is a right decision for students to study those two subjects,when their roots become strong and add up some extra supplementary will promote our growth.

    To sum up,history,science and technology have a intimate connection,we cannot ignore one of them or we may suffer a sharp loss.History often assigned to an obscure role,we hardly see it work.In spite of,I sometime cannot have a positive to it because of boring but the things it respond which are the ancients pay for their life to improve.We may respect to them.

     

    March 3, 2020 at 4:28 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. 100% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    LZCHING
    University: 中大南方
    Nationality: China
    March 3, 2020 at 5:41 am

    I take the view that not only history but also other subjects are necessary for us to learn. Nowadays,students should be absorbed in all kinds of knowledge and form the basis of life. Although science and technology are the new trend toward social, history is the incredible method to reflect the problem.

    History is like our root if we have a imperfect connection with it, we cannot have adequate nutrition.The greatest events happened in the past have a profound influence one country.In addition, people should be learned it well so that they cannot make the same mistake.Meanwhile, history can give us a hand to aid us complete the future plan or achieve some aims. Sometime, it looks like out of touch with the present but once we reject it, regardless of whether nationality or nations both cannot attain good development.

    On the other hand, science and technology play a significant role from beginning to end. For us, the fundamental development depends on them and by means of  them we can exhibition our advantage. At present, national functioning and social development both want support by them. It is a right decision for students to study those two subjects, when their roots become strong and add up some extra supplementary will promote their growth.

    To sum up, history, science and technology have a intimate connection, we cannot ignore one of them or we may suffer a sharp loss. History often assigned to an obscure role, we hardly see it work. In spite of, I sometime cannot have a positive attitude to it because of boring, but those experience like management a country was ancients payed for their life to proven. We may respect to them.

    March 3, 2020 at 9:31 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. More than 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    LZCHING
    University: 中大南方
    Nationality: China
    March 5, 2020 at 8:15 am

    I take the view that not only history but also other subjects are necessary for us to learn. Nowadays,students should be absorbed in all kinds of knowledge and form the basis of life. Science and technology are the new trend at present. However, history is the incredible subject to reflect the problem.

    History is like our root which means if we have a imperfect connection with it, we cannot have adequate nutrition. The greatest events happened in the past can have a profound influence one country. In addition, people should be learned it well so that they cannot make the same mistake.Meanwhile, history can give us a hand to aid us complete the future plan or achieve some aims. Sometime, it looks like out of touch with the present but once we reject it, regardless of whether nationality or nations both cannot attain good development.

    On the other hand, science and technology play a significant role from beginning to end. For country, they depend on the development of one country. For us, they can expand our horizon as well as develop our strengths. At present, national functioning and social development both want support by them. It is a wise decision for students to study science and technology, when their roots become stronger with extra supplementary that will promote their growth.

    To sum up, history, science and technology have a intimate connection, we cannot ignore one of them otherwise we may suffer a sharp loss. History often assigned to an obscure role, we hardly see it work. In spite of, I cannot have a positive attitude to it because of depressing, but those experience like management a country was ancients payed for their life to proven. We may respect them.

    March 10, 2020 at 1:45 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    LZCHING
    University: 中大南方
    Nationality: China
    March 10, 2020 at 5:15 am

    I take the view that not only history but also other subjects are necessary for us to learn. Nowadays, students should be absorbed in all kinds of knowledge and form the basis of life. Science and technology are the new and original aspects at present. However, history is one of the major subjects to reflect the problem.

    History is like our root, which means if we have a unstable connection with it, we cannot have adequate nutrition. The vital events which happened in the past can have a profound effect on one country. Besides, people should keep in mind the bitter experience so that they can avoid making similar mistake. Meanwhile, history can give us a hand to aid us achieve some aims. Probably, it seems out of touch with the present at the same time we reject it or we may not attain a expectation development.

    On the other hand, science and technology play a significant role from beginning to end. For countries, which are the significant sign toward the nations. For us, they can expand our horizon as well as develop our strengths. At present, national functioning and social development both want support by them. It is a wise decision for students to study science and technology as a result of their roots become stronger with extra supplementary that will promote their growth.

    In general, three of them have a intimate connection, we cannot ignore anyone otherwise we may suffer a sharp loss. History often assigned to an obscure role which we hardly see it work. In spite of, I cannot have a positive attitude to it because of depressing. Moreover, those experience like management a country was ancients paid for their life to proven. We may respect them.

    March 17, 2020 at 2:30 am

    Score: 71.3

    Issues:

    1. More than 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    LZCHING
    University: 中大南方
    Nationality: China
    March 17, 2020 at 8:24 am

    I take the view that not only history but also other subjects are necessary for us to learn. Nowadays, students should be absorbed in all kinds of knowledge and form the basis of life. Science and technology are the new and original aspects at present. However, history is one of the significant subjects to reflect the problem.

    History is like our root. If we have an unstable connection with it that we cannot have adequate nutrition. The essential events which happened in the past can have a profound effect on one country. Besides, people should keep in mind the bitter experience so that they can avoid making similarly mistake. Meanwhile, history can give aid to us to achieve some aims. Probably, it seems out of touch with the present. Once we reject it that we may not reach an expectation development.

    Furthermore, science and technology play a significant role from beginning to end. As for countries, which are the earthshaking sign toward the nations. For us, they can expand our horizon as well as develop our strengths. At present, state operation and social development both want to get their support. It is a wise decision for students to study science and technology. That’s because their roots becoming stronger with extra supplementary which will promote their growth.

    In general, three of them have an intimate connection that we cannot ignore anyone. If we cannot do that our country may develop incompletely. History often assigned to an obscure role which we hardly see it work. Although I cannot have a positive attitude to it because of depressing. Moreover, the experience of governing a country was ancients paid for their life to proven. We may respect them.

    March 21, 2020 at 11:52 pm

    Score: ungraded

    I take the view [ wordy] that not only history but also other subjects are necessary for us to learn. [ logically disconnected from the prior sentence]Nowadays, students should be absorbed in all kinds of knowledge and form the basis of life[unclear ]. Science and technology are the new and original aspects at present[unclear ]. However, history is one of the significant subjects to reflect the problem[ unclear- what problem?].

    History is like our root[this makes no sense in English ]. If we have an unstable connection with it that we cannot have adequate nutrition[make no sense ]. The essential events which happened in the past can have a profound effect on one country. Besides, people should keep in mind the bitter experience[ unclear] so that they can avoid making similarly [word form error ]mistake. Meanwhile, history can give aid to[ wordy] us to achieve some aims[ unclear]. Probably, it[unclear pronoun ] seems out of touch with the present. Once we reject it[unclear pronoun ] that we may not reach an expectation [ grammatical error]development.

    Furthermore, science and technology play a significant role from beginning to end[logical incompleteness ]. As for countries, which are the earthshaking sign toward the nations[ unclear]. For us, they[unclear pronoun ] can expand our horizon[ word form error] as well as develop our strengths. At present, state operation and social development both want to get their support[ unclear]. [disconnected from the prior sentence ]It is a wise decision for students to study science and technology. [ choppy sentence]That’s because their roots becoming stronger with extra supplementary which will promote their growth[grammatical error/unclear ].

    In general, three of them[ unclear pronoun] have an intimate connection that we cannot ignore anyone[grammatical error  ]. If we cannot do that our country may develop incompletely[grammatical error ]. History often assigned to an obscure role which we hardly see it work[unclear ]. Although I cannot have a positive attitude to it because of depressing[unclear ]. Moreover, the experience of governing a country was ancients paid for their life to proven[unclear ]. We may respect them[unclear pronoun].