Some people think teaching children of different abilities together benefits all of them, but others think intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 110 words.

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It is widely discussed that whether children should be taught altogether regardless of their talents or interests or should be separated. We have no reason to divide the way so separately that it seems no other way. In my opinion, the teaching method should vary on different stages of study. (Rewrite your introduction, the first two sentences do not add anything to your essay. Use the last sentence and start answering why it is your opinion that teaching methods should vary)

First, when students with a different level of intellectual development are grouped together, they all benefit from a cooperative study method. With the assist assitance from advanced students, less advanced students can gain may have a better understanding of certain tasks and concepts. One simple way is to set up a study group combined with two different learning stage students. In addition, this may also lighten some the burden of the teacher. On the other hand, if we do so, some gifted students may fail to reach their full potential. if they are presented with a lack of challenges and opportunities, they are less likely to achieve higher goals.

Yet, researchers have found that the current teaching methods are normal way of educating is more likely to limit the achievement of talented students. Thus, some argue we should be present the view of teaching students separately. It is obvious that this method pattern will ignore some less advanced students. On the contrary, with a some special environment, advanced students may fully develop their potential and intelligence. It is unfair for the less advanced students.

In conclusion, the discussion of which method of education is the better one does not appear to have a clear result. (It is better to pick a side and argue for it) But, in my opinion, we should try a mixed medium approach that can expand the advanced students’ potential and improve the lower-achieving students’ grades less ones’ grade. Not until does the mainstream education starts with this method will we achieve the best resultsto do so, the best way will come out.