Some people think that children should obey the rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Other people think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems themselves in adulthood. Discuss both views and state your own views.
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December 27, 2019 at 1:51 pm
Some people think that children should obey the rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Other people think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems themselves in adulthood. Discuss both views and state your own views.
The standard of raising a successful child is always one of the most discussed issues for all parents and teachers. Some people maintain that children should be taught to follow moral ethics and social norms strictly, while others propose that obeying rules can only hinder the youngsters’ management ability.
A society composed of well-educated people who are accustomed to following rules will be fulfilled with cooperation, harmonious and kindness. Knowing the importance of maintaining the order of ones’ life and society, the youngsters will not easily break laws, hurt others, even commit crimes, meaning the society will be better managed by these well-trained citizens. In contrast, children exposed to chaos and a community without orders may lose their directions and be confused about the standards of goodness and badness.
However, too much emphasis laid on obeying rules may destroy children’s management ability and innovations. it is unbelievable for the educational specialists that teachers require children to do whatever they asked, due to thinking ability and practical skills are necessary and vital in ones’ childhood. In addition, following instructions only may limit children’s time on the taken subject, ignoring their potential to create something new. for example, children who are faced with the stress of examinations are forbidden to take part in extracurricular activities, they probably miss the opportunity to enrich their lives.
In my opinion, parents and teachers should give children some space to let them develop themselves without too many strict doctrines, listen to their opinions and give appropriate and suitable suggestions. In the process of transforming from children to adults, mild and moderate advice is more likely to be accepted and helpful to develop living skills.
December 30, 2019 at 2:44 amScore: 37.3
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- Passive voice: more than half of the sentences contain passive voice. Use their active counterparts.
- Consecutive sentences: This essay contains 3 consecutive sentences starting with the same word. Change them.
- About 80% of the sentences contain more than 20 words; shorten or split them.
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December 31, 2019 at 7:55 amPeople hold different views over a controversial topic that whether following rules will benefit the youngsters in the future. While obeying orders might be helpful in many perspectives, I deem that leaving some space for children to decide independently should be given more priority.
Some people argue that obeying rules is beneficial for children in many aspects. It is vital for children to form the habit of following rules as when everyone in society knows the importance of obeying rules, resulting in the decrease of crime. In addition, completing tasks and negotiating with colleagues accordingly is the basic requirement of being a good employee in the near future. Finally, people need norms to guide and direct their behaviour and promote the understanding of each other’s actions.
However, children’s ability of independent thinking might be affected by the excessive regulation from parents. Children who only focus on what they had been taught and value what they had been told probably will lose their competence of creating new ideas because they will be conscientiously obeyed the rules of the school or home. For example, my parents forced me to take part in many extra curriculum that I don’t like during high school, which distracted my attention to activities I like Gradually, without their own consideration about the future, they might miss the opportunity to fulfill their potentials in the fields like art and music.
In my view, children have the right to make decisions on their own and choose what they want to do for the benefit of individual growth, even though obeying rules may have many advantages in one’s life.
December 31, 2019 at 4:04 pmScore: 49.6
Issues:
- About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. You need to cut the number to 15%-.
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January 2, 2020 at 3:09 pmPeople hold different views about whether they should obey every rule taught by their parents and teachers. While following rules can be useful, I deem that giving more space for children to make decisions is essential.
On the one hand, obeying rules can cultivate children’s character well. To be good citizens, children should know the importance of maintaining orders, which may protect the safety of society. For example, children with disciplines are inclined to behave by law in the future, increasing the harmonious of the community. Furthermore, complying with instructions is also mean to show respect to others. Once children are willing to listen to the suggestions from the elder, they may know the consideration they have. This helps foster the relationship with teachers and parents.
On the other hand, it may have some drawbacks. Constructing an open environment will be better for improving children’s critical thinking ability. When children are accustomed to subjecting to others’ opinions, they might lose their views and standpoint. For instance, limited to requirements on compulsory subjects, they may ignore their potential in the field like art, music, and computer. In addition, children are less motivated to do things and meet expectations that are suggested by others. Only when people decide independently will they feel responsible for their partners and programs.
In conclusion, parents and teachers can give suggestions about children’s decisions, but I reckon that encouraging them to make decisions on their own is indispensable for growth. Excessive control may be too stressful to grow their personality.
January 2, 2020 at 9:49 pmScore: 57.3
People hold different views about whether they should obey every rule taught by their parents and teachers. While following rules can be useful [ vague adjective], I deem that giving more space for [ incorrect proposition word ] children to make decisions is essential. [vague adjective ]
On the one hand, obeying rules can cultivate children’s character
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In conclusion, parents and teachers can give suggestions about children’s decisions, but I reckon that encouraging them [ unclear pronoun]to make decisions on their own is indispensable for growth. Excessive control may be too stressful to grow their [ unclear pronoun ] personality.
