Some people think that the important role of university professors is to do research, others think the main role of them is to educate students.

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Suggestions for Improvement

1. Shorten your essay to 320 words;
2. Convert passive-voice sentences into their active counterparts;
3. limit each paragraph to 85 words;
4. Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words.

Problems Highlight

University professors are invaluable assets for a country due to their contribution[Grammatical Error] to the development of society in a variety of aspects. [Long, hard-to-read sentence]Some people argue that the most important role that professors play should be teaching instead of doing research, thereby imparting more information to posterity; in my point of view, however, it is a misunderstanding [Wrong choice of word]. [Long, hard-to-read sentence]To professors, instructing students and carrying out research should be equally valued.

Research is vital, [Punctuation error]not only to professors themselves but also to the nation. From the professors’ perspective, profound and successful research can be conducive to their reputation and status in the scientific community. [Long, hard-to-read sentence]It is commonly seen [Verbose/passive]that a professor who is capable of presenting amazing outcomes of research constantly [Unnecessary Adverb]can have a voice in his field; without incredible research results, however, rarely can a professor be respected and admired[passive voice], no matter how dedicated he is in [Wrong preposition] teaching.[Long, hard-to-read sentence]. In addition, research is indispensable for university elites because the development of a whole nation is depending on it. To be more specific, most of the [Verbose] advanced technology is originated [passive voice]from universities’ labs, and people are expecting some innovative ideas from well-known economics professors to help them survive the economic downturn.[Long, hard-to-read sentence] If professors all devoted themselves to instructing students without any time left for research, then it would be predictable that the prosperity of a nation will be slowed[passive voice] down.[Long, hard-to-read sentence]

That being said, teaching cannot be ignored [passive voice]either, especially for professors in the universities[Repetition]. This is because qualified teaching is what they are expected [passive voice]of. Students flood into this specific university and the major just to follow the professors who they admire. [Bad writing]Thus, if a professor is so obsessed with research that he completely ignores the students, then students will be disappointed [passive voice]and the reputation of the professor will be negatively influenced. [Long, hard-to-read sentence]In fact, a professor who can spend more time on teaching is capable of communicating better with students, which is a double blessing: the professor enjoys a better reputation, and students who become high-achievers due to receiving a better education can be the professor’s inspiration too. [Long, hard-to-read sentence]. On a broader scale, a better education offered by university professors can also contribute to the prosperity of a country. This is because the students, who are the future of a nation, can be armed [passive voice]with a more sophisticated understanding of the world and a broadened knowledge base. [Long, hard-to-read sentence]Without adequate and profound training received in the university, young people may not be able to find their directions in their lives.[Long, hard-to-read sentence]

To conclude, great power comes with great responsibilities. Therefore, as a vital part of a nation, professors should not only be proficient in their academic field but also spend time on instructing students.[Long, hard-to-read sentence]

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