Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Topics Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

  • Eurekarrr
    University: SWUPL
    Nationality: China
    February 8, 2020 at 11:04 am

    Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

    Currently, it has become an upward tendency for cooperative assignments to popularize, which has inevitably aroused a heated discussion on their effectiveness among the public. Personally speaking, I suppose that collaboration between students on study tasks can considerably enhance their work productivity and quality.

    Firstly, when students work together, they tend to finish their task faster and more productively. This is partly because group members can divide the target project into several parts and then take on roles which are suitable for their abilities. In this way, students can work on their own part of work at the same time. Obviously, it is conducive to reducing unnecessary waste of time. Meanwhile, when working in a group, other students function as a helpful supervisor. To be more specific, students will be more concentrated on their work in that they don’t want to be condemned by their partners. As a result, efficiency of their work will skyrocket.

    Secondly, in terms of decision making, working together contributes to reducing mistakes. A case in point is that I worked on a research project pertaining to development of architecture in China last year. But most of us didn’t major in this subject area so we almost made a huge and irreparable error in our decision making. Fortunately, one of my partners corrected our fault in time, whose father is a talented architect. Thank to her and her father’s assistance, we could finally win an award. It reveals that working with diverse students in a group helps students make a more sensible and reasonable resolution and decrease the odds of making mistakes.

    However, there is no denying the fact that studying in a group may lead to distraction. But then again, the disadvantages of group study pale in comparison to advantages. As long as students effectively monitor each other’s work progress, working together could be a better choice.

    In a nutshell, teamwork on a project is extremely beneficial to students’ work effectiveness and efficiency. Only doing so, can we expect to cultivate an army of both competent and versatile students in the near future.

    February 13, 2020 at 5:01 am

    Score: 57

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    1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.

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    Eurekarrr
    University: SWUPL
    Nationality: China
    February 14, 2020 at 4:24 pm

    Currently, the wide popularity of cooperative assignments has aroused a heated discussion. There are many divergent views on their effectiveness. Personally speaking, I suppose that collaboration between students can enhance their work productivity and quality.

    Firstly, when students work together, they tend to finish their tasks in a more productive manner. Because group members can divide the target project into several parts and then take on suitable roles. In this way, students can work on their tasks simultaneously. It is conducive to reducing unnecessary waste of time. Meanwhile, other students can function as a helpful supervisor. To be more specific, students will be more concentrated on their work in that they don’t want to be condemned by their partners. As a result, the efficiency of their work will skyrocket.

    Secondly, in terms of decision making, working together contributes to reducing mistakes. A case in point is that I worked on a research project about developments of architecture in China last year. But most of us didn’t major in this subject area. So we almost made a serious error in our decision making. Fortunately, one of my partners corrected our fault in time, whose father is a talented architect. Thanks to her and her father’s aid, we could finally win an award. It reveals that working with diverse students helps students make a more sensible resolution and decrease the odds of mistakes.

    However, there is no denying the fact that studying in a group may lead to distraction. But then again, the disadvantages of group study pale in comparison to advantages. As long as students effectively monitor each other’s work progress, working together could be a better choice.
    In a nutshell, teamwork is beneficial to students’ work effectiveness and efficiency. Only doing so, can we expect to cultivate an army of both competent and versatile students for the future.

    • This reply was modified 3 days, 21 hours ago by Lin QiuLin Qiu.
    February 17, 2020 at 1:58 pm

    Score: 60.3

    Currently, the wide[wrong word  ] popularity of cooperative assignments has aroused a heated discussion[factual error  ]. There are many divergent views on their [ unclear pronoun ]effectiveness. Personally speaking[ redundant ], I suppose that collaboration between students can enhance their work productivity and quality.

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    Secondly, in terms of decision making[ word form error ], working together contributes to reducing[ word form error ] mistakes. A case in point is that I worked on a research project about developments [word form error  ]of architecture in China last year. [ punctuation error with coordinating word ]But most of us didn’t [ Use of NOT ]major in this subject area. [ punctuation error concerning coordinating word ]So we almost made a serious error in our decision making[ word form error ]. Fortunately, one of my partners corrected our fault in time, whose[word dislocation  ] father is a talented architect. Thanks to her and her father’s aid, we could [ redundant ]finally win an award. It[ unclear pronoun ] reveals that working with diverse[ wrong word ] students helps [ absolute writing ]students make [wrong word  ]a more sensible resolution and decrease the odds of mistakes.

    However, there is no denying the fact that studying in a group may lead to distraction[ wordy ]. [ punctuation error concerning coordinating word ]But then again, the disadvantages of group study pale[uncommon word  ] in comparison to [ lack a modifier ]advantages. As long as students effectively monitor each other’s work progress, working together could be a better choice[ logical incompleteness ].

    In a nutshell[ Use literal word instead ], teamwork is beneficial [ Be verb – concrete verb ]to students’ work effectiveness and efficiency. Only doing so, can we expect to cultivate an army[  use literal word instead] of both competent and versatile students[ wrong word ] for the future.


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    1. Absolute Statement: Avoid using absolute statement.
    2. ARTICLE ERROR: errors concerning a, an, the. This is a prominent issue for Chinese students. Make sure to add/remove/change articles considering a specific context.
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