Students aged 13-18 are taught different subjects by different teachers while younger students are taught by only one teacher all day long. Some people suggest it would benefit young students to be taught by different teachers. Do you agree with this view? Why or why not?

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    lzk
    University: Beijing Institute of Technology
    Nationality: Chinese
    July 25, 2020 at 3:05 am

    Students aged 13-18 are taught different subjects by different teachers while younger students are taught by only one teacher all day long. Some people suggest it would benefit young students to be taught by different teachers. Do you agree with this view? Why or why not?

    Education, an essential part of people’s life, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion that whether young students aged under 13 should be taught by different teachers for different classes. In my opinion, it is not a good ideal.

    What should be prioritized is that young students can study better when cultivated by only one teacher rather than several teachers since they will be more concentrated on classes and willing to ask questions. Initially, children pay more attention to the teachers they are familiar with. In details, since children’s enthusiasm is limited, it is a challenge for them to listen carefully from someone who just stay there for 1 hour. In contrast, children will focus on the teacher stay with them all the time. Besides, students in such young age are more likely ask for help for the teacher they believe. If there are several teachers who just teach their individual part, it is hard for children to set up solid relationship with anyone, in which case, they would not to communicate with teachers when in trouble. However, it is the teacher who teaches all subjects that can make friends with children and aid to solve problems.

    What should be equally discussed is that undertaking all subjects of one group of children will be much easier for teacher than undertaking one subject for several groups of children. To begin with, for teachers taking care of students aged 10 or even younger, the biggest challenge is controlling all students instead of preparing for classes since the content of all subjects is so simple. The teacher will more enjoy charging only one group. In details, The more teachers go alone with the children, the more they understand the children, which helps them keep the disciplines of the class and deal with any emergency situation. On the contrary, how can the teacher control several groups of children at the same time with less time?

    All in all, choosing one teacher to teach all subjects is better than separating subjects to different teachers whether for children or teachers.

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    July 27, 2020 at 8:21 pm

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    TruckersForMe Participant
    lzk
    University: Beijing Institute of Technology
    Nationality: Chinese
    July 28, 2020 at 3:20 pm

    Education, an essential part of people’s lives, triggers a heated discussion. Whether young students aged under 13 should be taught by different teachers for different classes. In my opinion, it is not a good ideal. One teacher, undertaking all classes, benefits both students and teachers.

    What should be prioritized is that young students can study better when cultivated by only one teacher rather than several teachers. Initially, children pay more attention to the teachers who they are familiar with. In detail, since children’s enthusiasm is limited, it is a challenge for them to listen from someone who just stays there for 1 hour. In contrast, children will focus on the teacher staying with them all the time. Besides, students at such a young age are more likely to ask for help from the teachers they believe. If there are several teachers, it is hard for children to build a reliable relationship with anyone. They would not communicate with teachers when in trouble. However, it is the teacher teaching all subjects that can make friends with children and solve problems for them.

    The other important aspect is that undertaking all subjects of one group of children will be much easier for teachers. For teachers taking care of students, 10 years old or even younger, what is the biggest challenge? It is controlling all students instead of preparing for classes since the content of all subjects is so simple. The teachers will more enjoy teaching only one group. That renders them stay with children longer. In detail, the longer teachers get alone with the children, the more they understand the children. It helps them maintain the disciplines of the class and deal with any emergency. On the contrary, how can the teachers take care of several groups of children at the same time with less time?

    All in all, it is better that one teacher teaches all subjects whether for children or teachers.

    TruckersForMe Participant
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    July 30, 2020 at 4:10 am

    Education, an essential part of people’s lives, triggers a heated discussion. Whether young students aged under 13 should be taught by different teachers for different classes (incomplete sentence, add more information here). In my opinion, it (unclear pronoun) is not a good ideal. One teacher, undertaking all classes, benefits both students and teachers (because… include more information here to strengthen your argument).

    What should be prioritized is that young students can study better when cultivated by only one teacher rather than several teachers (reorder sentence – “Young students can study better when led by one teacher, therefore it should be prioritized”). Initially, children pay more attention to teachers they know and can trust the teachers who they are familiar with. In detail, Since children’s enthusiasm is limited, it is a challenge for them to listen from to someone who just stays stands there for 1 an hour. In contrast, children will focus on the a teacher staying with who stays with them all the time. Besides, students at such a young age are more likely to ask for help from the teachers they believe. If there are several teachers, it is hard for children to build a reliable relationship with anyone. They would will not communicate with teachers when in trouble. However, it is the a teacher teaching all subjects that can make friends with befriend children and solve problems for them.

    The other Another important aspect benefit is a teacher’s job is made easier if they have the same students for all subjects that undertaking all subjects of one group of children will be much easier for teachers. For teachers taking care of students, 10 years old or even younger, (remove commas) what is the biggest challenge? It is controlling all students instead of classroom control not preparing for classes since because the content of all subjects is so simple. The teachers will more enjoy enjoy teaching only one group more because it allows them to get to know one group of students very well. That renders them stay with children longer. In detail, The longer teachers get one-one-one time with students alone with the children, the more they understand the children. It helps them maintain the disciplines (singular) of the class and deal with any emergency. On the contrary, how can the teachers take care of several groups of children at the same time with less one-on-one time?

    All in all, it is better that for one teacher to teaches all subjects whether both for children or and teachers.