Students do not respect teachers as much as they did in the past.

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  • Zhenglr
    University: China Agricultural University
    Nationality: China
    November 7, 2019 at 1:57 am

    TOEFL Writing Topic: Students do not respect teachers as much as they did in the past.

    Showing respect to teachers is a virtue of traditional chinese custom, it reflects students’ appreciation of teachers’ work. Some individuals argue that students do not respect teachers as much as they did in the past, while others hold the opposite point. Considering that nowadays, students could show their regard for teachers in their way, I think the latter view is more reasonable.

    For various students, each of them has his way of expressing respect to teachers. As primary school students, they show respect to their teachers from the heart without many flashy words. Their parents are always busy with their business so that hardly their kids can be taken careof by them, and these kids are left in the school to be nursed by teachers there. In the class, teachers introduce them lots of fantasy stories which could help expand their horizons and open their minds. Also, educators can help students to grasp many fundamental words as weel as some fundamental knowledge, which wiil be useful in their later study life. During daily life, the kids should listen to teachers’ instructions to eat a healthy diet and to go to sleep on time. All these things could help kids shape good eating and sleep habits, which could be crucial in their lifetime. Thus, not only the teacher should help them with schoolwork but also assist them in daily life. Though these students are at a young age, they understand who care about them and view their teachers as actual parents. Their sunny and innocent smile always brings teachers warmth. They will also portray their teachers silently and then give to their teachers as a gift in the Teachers’ Day. The pupils would also write the little things that happened between them and teachers to preserve the precious moments.

    For high school students, they will present their respect to teachers with remarkable improvement of scores. Since they are under enormous pressure of exams at this stage, all they want is a high mark. Their teachers would do their best to assist them to achieve their goal, like patiently answering any questions in detail, carefully correcting their assignments handed on even till midnight, giving them a study aid to make a study plan face to face and, so on. With such assistance, it’s their increased grades that would be the best respect for their teachers since students convert their teachers’ all effort into a visible outcome, which makes their teachers relieved.

    Also, college students would show their respect to teachers with their significant progress in days later. College students are facing heavy stress and forced to make a plan forthe future. It’s inevitable for them to get lost at this point. So their instructors could not only provide them with constructive suggestions and practical ideas to find their goal but also help them put their ideas into shape and gain a deep understanding of what they want to engage. Plus, a glowing letter of recommendation would also be a great favor from teachers. And these students should always have their assistance in mind, keep going forward in order make the great achievements which will justify their teachers’ effort. That would be the best proof for their kind-hearted teachers’ aid and also the highest honor for their teachers.

    In a nutshell, students now have many different ways to express respect for teachers and theyrespect teachers as much as they did in the past, they will always be grateful for their teachers.

     

    November 14, 2019 at 2:47 am

    Score: Ungraded

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    1. Your essay is lengthy and wordy. You need to restrict your essay to 320 words;
    2. You need to restrict each paragraph to 90 words;
    3. You also need to shorten/split most sentences exceeding 20 words.

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