Students should arrive at school early in the morning.
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June 3, 2021 at 2:40 pm
Students should arrive at school early in the morning.
When it comes to the topic of whether students should arrive at school early in the morning, opinions vary from person to person. Some people claim that starting classes late is better，because it can guarantee enough sleep. However, from my point of view, I prefer students to be early risers.
To begin with, one hour in the morning is worth two in the evening. Morning is supposed to be the most productive time during a whole day, and also the right time to recite and study relatively more complicated knowledge, making us accomplish as much as twice with only half effort.
Secondly, early to school can make you have a good mood to start a new day. In the morning, everything is filled with life and vigor. If you get up early enough, you can totally take your time having breakfast, dressing up appropriately and enjoy all the scenery on the way to school, even the sunset. The traffic is also smoother this time, which would be a huge relief to a person gearing up to work and study.
Last but not least, as the saying goes, “It is the early bird that catches the worm.” I believe we all agree that it would take a lot of efforts to get up early in the morning especially during the cold winter, but as far as I am concerned, it’s also a good opportunity to cultivate students with treasurable characters, which is hard but will do so much good to them and lighten their life. With the persistence and endeavor they have formed by coming to school early everyday, they can overcome much more difficulties later in the future.
In conclusion, I insist that students should arrive at school early in the morning, which is not only beneficial for their health and study, but also of crucial importance to their character development.
June 4, 2021 at 3:03 amWhen it comes to the topic of whether students should arrive at school early in the morning, opinions vary from person to person. Some people claim that starting classes late is better，because it can guarantee enough sleep. However, from my point of view, I prefer students to be early risers.[Use your own words to write. ]To begin with, one hour in the morning is worth two in the evening. Morning is supposed to be the most productive time during a whole day, and also the right time to recite and study relatively more complicated knowledge, making us accomplish as much as twice with only half effort.
Secondly, early to school can make you have a good mood to start a new day. In the morning, everything is filled with life and vigor. If you get up early enough, you can totally take your time having breakfast, dressing up appropriately and enjoy all the scenery on the way to school, even the sunset. The traffic is also smoother this time, which would be a huge relief to a person gearing up to work and study.
Last but not least, as the saying goes, “It is the early bird that catches the worm.” I believe we all agree that it would take a lot of efforts to get up early in the morning especially during the cold winter, but as far as I am concerned, it’s also a good opportunity to cultivate students with treasurable characters, which is hard but will do so much good to them and lighten their life. With the persistence and endeavor they have formed by coming to school early everyday, they can overcome much more difficulties later in the future.
In conclusion, I insist that students should arrive at school early in the morning, which is not only beneficial for their health and study, but also of crucial importance to their character development.
June 4, 2021 at 3:06 amIssues:
- About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
- About 20% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
- Lots of grammatical errors.
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June 4, 2021 at 3:36 pmEarly to school or late to school? This is a question. People who get used to staying up late in the night may prefer the latter, while others hold the opposite. As for me, I prefer students reaching school early in the morning.
To begin with, early to school can make students study better. As is common sense, an hour in the morning is worth two in the evening. People are more capable of learning when it is morning than when it is not. Take myself as an example, I can recite 100 English words in the morning, but I cannot even read an English word in other time. Therefore, if students do not get to school early, then they will probably complete half but with twice efforts. It is a waste of time to do so.
Secondly, early to school can make students start a new day with a good mood. If you get up early enough, you can take your time having breakfast, dressing up appropriately, and enjoy all the beautiful scenery on the way to school. The traffic is also smoother, which would be a huge relief to a person gearing up to work and study. Everything is full of life and vigor. On the contrary, late risers start their days by jumping out of bed, rushing off to school and skipping breakfast. It is impossible for them to sense the joy of the morning.
Last but not least, “It is the early bird that catches the worm.” Indeed, getting up early costs students much effort, especially during cold winters, but it also highlights the importance of diligence and persistence. In this way, students could perfect their personality cultivations. Only with these treasurable qualities can they have a brighter future.
In conclusion, I insist that students should arrive at school early in the morning. It is not only beneficial for their study and spirit, but also of crucial importance to their character development.
June 7, 2021 at 10:39 amEarly to school or late to school? This is a question. (delete, this is unnecessary) People who get used to staying up late in the night (redundant) may prefer the latter, while others hold the opposite (rephrase). As for me, I prefer students reaching school early in the morning. (why? provide some short explanation as to why going to school earlier is better in your introduction)
To begin with, early to school (going to school early) can (use more definitive language, instead you can just say something like “students who go to school earlier are more effective learners.”) make students study better. As is common sense, (delete) an hour in the morning is worth two in the evening (rephrase). People are more capable of learning when it is morning than when it is not (delete, unnecessary add more supporting information instead). Take myself as an example (simplify), I can recite 100 English words in the morning, but I cannot even read an English word in (preposition error) other time. Therefore, if students do not get to school early, then they will probably complete half but with twice efforts (unclear, rewrite). It is a waste of time to do so (delete).
Secondly, early to school (missing a verb) can make students start a new day with (preposition error) a good mood. If you get up early enough, you can take your time having breakfast, dressing up appropriately, and enjoying all the beautiful scenery on the way to school. The (delete) traffic is also smoother, which would be a huge relief to a person gearing up to work and study. Everything is full of life and vigor (delete or incorporate into another sentence). On the contrary, late risers start their days by jumping out of bed, rushing off to school, and skipping breakfast. It is impossible for them to sense the joy of the morning.
Last but not least, “It is (delete) the early bird that (delete) catches the worm.” Indeed, getting up early costs students much effort (simplify), especially during cold winters, but it also highlights the importance of diligence and persistence. In this way, students could (delete) perfect their personality cultivations (word choice error). Only with these treasurable (word choice error) qualities can they have a brighter future.
In conclusion, I insist that students should arrive at school early in the morning. It is not only beneficial for their study and spirit, but also of crucial importance to their character development.
June 8, 2021 at 6:04 pmPeople who get used to staying up night may prefer going to school late, while others reckon the opposite. As for me, I prefer students reaching school early in the morning due to high efficiency, spirit state and personality training.
To begin with, students who go to school earlier are more effective learners. An hour in the morning is worth double at other time. People are more capable of learning when it is morning. As for me, I can recite 100 English words in the morning, but I cannot even read an English word at other time. Therefore, if students cannot get to school early, then they are likely to get half the result with twice the effort.
Secondly, going to school early can make students start a new day in a good mood. If you get up early enough, you can take your time having breakfast, dressing up appropriately, and enjoying all the beautiful scenery on the way to school. Traffic is also smoother, which would be a huge relief to a person gearing up to work and study. On the contrary, late risers start their days by jumping out of bed, rushing off to school and skipping breakfast. It is impossible for them to sense the joy of the morning.
Last but not least, “Early bird catches the worm.” Indeed, getting up early cost much efforts especially during cold winters, but it also highlights the importance of diligence and persistence. In this way, students perfect their personality trainings. Only with these precious qualities can they have a brighter future.
In conclusion, I insist that students should arrive at school early in the morning. It is not only beneficial for their study and spirit, but also of crucial importance to their character development.
June 9, 2021 at 11:13 amFinal Revision:
People who get (are) used to staying up night (late) may prefer going to school later, while others reckon the opposite (this can be improved/simplified). As for me, (unnecessary) I prefer students reaching (would prefer that students go to) school early in the morning due to (word choice error, choose words and sentence structure that ties these two parts of the sentence together) high efficiency, spirit state (word choice error) and personality training.
To begin with, students who go to school earlier are more effective learners. An hour in the morning is worth double at other time. People are more capable of learning when it is morning (this sentence is better than the previous which can be removed, but add information here as well). As for me (For example), I can recite 100 English words in the morning, but I cannot even read an English word at other times (this seems too anecdotal, instead try to use evidence that is broader). Therefore, if students cannot get to school early, then they are likely to get half the result with twice the effort.
Secondly, going to school early can make students start a new day in a good mood. If you get up early enough, you can take your time having breakfast, dressing up appropriately, and enjoying all the beautiful scenery on the way to school. Traffic is also smoother, which would be a huge relief to a person gearing up to work and study. On the contrary, late risers start their days by jumping out of bed, rushing off to school, and skipping breakfast. It is impossible for them to sense the joy of (enjoy) the morning. (this is a great paragraph)
Last but not least, “The early bird catches the worm.” Indeed, getting up early cost much efforts (takes much effort) especially during cold winters, but it also highlights the importance of diligence and persistence. In this way, students perfect their personality trainings (training). Only with these precious qualities can they have a brighter future.
In conclusion, I insist that students should arrive at school early in the morning. It is not only beneficial for their study and spirit, but also of crucial importance to their character development. (you end very strong, overall focus on make your writing clear and simplifying redundant/unnecessary sentences. The second half is strong because you discuss general trends that support your argument)
