Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. 

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. 

  • AnnieLiao
    University: NJFU
    Nationality: China
    June 21, 2020 at 5:31 am

    Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. 

    People have conflicting views as to the responsibility of the teachers is to focus on the content of teaching or to educate students how to perform upright conducts and know the difference between right and wrong.Although I accept that teachers should teach pupils the knowledge of  textbooks,I strongly hold that the ability of recognition is equally essential throughout teaching .

    On the one hand,the teachers can prepare the students for better developments in life and career through the transmission of  knowledge in academic subjects like math and languages and so on.For example,without the literacy and calculating ability taught by teachers,pupils will find it extremely hard to adapt in the massive information world .Furthermore,the purpose of pupils educated in school is to form the basis of future jobs which always require them gain decent qualifications.

    However,if the students only learn how to do well in academic performance from teaching,that the students study intensively and know the subjects inside out will certainly help them get through the threshold of basic knowledge in the short term,they can get into trouble in the long run.This is because the time spent much in school makes them have less access to the modern society which is luring.When stepping into the modern world after graduation,they may imitate social ill youth to make drugs in the face of high income while lacking the knowledge of law and good citizen conducts.In addition,even if the students are not crimes in high IQ,without the capability of distinguishing the right from the wrong ,it is easy to be used by criminals to commit crimes like photographing the military bases in their own countries and revealing states secrets,which not only make them arrested for a security crime but also put their own countries at risk in danger.

    In conclusion,teachers have the obligation not only to deliver the content of textbooks but also to help foster in the young develope independent thinking of recognizing.

     

    June 23, 2020 at 3:46 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. 100% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 50% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
    4. Numerous grammatical/logical problems.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

     

    AnnieLiao
    University: NJFU
    Nationality: China
    June 24, 2020 at 7:30 am

    People have different views as to whether the teachers should only take the responsibility of paying attention to the teaching content or teach students how to be a qualified citizen who behaves appropriately and knows how to distinguish right from wrong. I strongly believe that teaching students textbook knowledge and the ability to distinguish right from wrong and do upright conducts are equally important in the whole teaching process.

    On the one hand, it is the basic duty of teachers to impart subject knowledge. Through the teaching of basic subject knowledge, such as mathematics, physics, chemistry and other subjects, students can have a preliminary understanding of the world.

    However, it is unrealistic for students to learn professional knowledge only from teachers, because students’ behavior will be influenced by teachers imperceptibly. For example, if the teacher respects the students and doesn’t verbalize them face to face when they make mistakes, the students will also know the importance of respecting others, that is, to keep their self-esteem, and they will know how to be humble when they are in conflict with their classmates.Certainly, some people may think that parents can also educate their children about these things, but children and teachers spend the longest time together, and if most of the extra-curricular time is devoted to learning subject knowledge by students.So pupils will have no extra energy to learn these aspects.

    In conclusion, teachers are obliged not only to provide the contents of textbooks, but also to help young people judge right and wrong and behave appropriately.

    June 24, 2020 at 3:25 pm

    Score: 40.9

    Issues:

    1. About 85% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

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