Some people think teaching children of different abilities together benefits all of them, but others think intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment. 

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  • Stark
    Nationality: China
    November 5, 2020 at 2:48 am

    Some people think teaching children of different abilities together benefits all of them, but others think intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment. 

    It is widely discussed that whether children should be taught altogether regardless of their talents or interests or should be separated considered of some of children may get some special gifts. There is no reason we should divide the way so separately that it seems there is no other way. In my opinion, the teach style should depend on students, as a saying goes,’ teaching students indivisually.’

    One of the reasons those who believe that teaching all kinds of students together will benefits all of them is that the way of group teaching which encourage students to cooperate with each other shows that establishing a study group mixed with advanced students and less one has a good influence on both of them. Furthermore, teachers will also reduce some of burden of teaching less advanced students and focus on their own teaching target.

    As for another kind of teaching style, it is obviously that this moudel will ignore some less advanced students. However, with some special environment created for advanced students will greatly improve their gifts and reach their potential. This idea was brought out due to a research that shows the normal way of educating is more likely limiting some talented students achivement.

    In conclusion, the discussion of which method of education is the better one seems no end. But, in my opinion, we should try a medium approach which can both expand the advanced students’ potential and improve the less ones’ grade. When mainstream education starts to do so, the best way of education will come out sooner or later.

    November 20, 2020 at 10:09 pm

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