The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.

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  • icepear
    University: USTC
    Nationality: China
    February 6, 2020 at 11:20 am

    The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.

    There is a public discussion nowadays about whether the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people for a long time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends. People’s views vary from one to another. From my perspective, the ability to sustain friendships is more significant.

    Undoubtedly, the ability to make new friends easily can bing us different kinds of friends which can make our life more colorful and full of happiness. However, we have to stress on one point, that is, if we have the ability to make new friends and ignore the importance of the ability to maintain friendships, we will lose the new friends easily too, which leads to the reality that none of our friends can really understand our unspeakable sadness. On the contrary, having been friends over a long time, each of us gets good understanding of each other. Not exaggeratedly, even through a simple facial expression, we can get the meaning from each other swiftly. Since we know each other very well, when we have some difficulties which are hard to say out or hard to understand, our friends who have got along with us for long will always support us, encourage us and belive us.

    Furthermore, it’s more likely to know a man truly and comprehensively after getting on with him for a long period of time. When we make a new friend, he might conceal some shortcomings and pretend to be perfect in front of us. As a result, we can never know what kind of the new friend really is as well as what exactly our new friend is thinking. However, as an old friend, we know each other’s weakness, like and dislike. So the communication can be really relaxing and interesting because we can deliberately avoid the embarrassing topics and change to the topic we are both interested in.

     

    February 6, 2020 at 11:03 pm

    Score: 64.8

    Issues:

    1. More than 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. One paragraph contains more than 150 words. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    icepear
    University: USTC
    Nationality: China
    February 7, 2020 at 1:24 pm

    There is a public discussion nowadays about whether the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people for a long time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends. From my perspective, the ability to sustain friendships is more significant.

    Undoubtedly, the ability to make new friends can bring us different kinds of friends. Our life can be more colorful and full of happiness. Just imagine that wherever we go, we can always find several companies go with us; whoever we meet, we can chat for a while. We are unlikely to be alone because we have plenty of friends, new friends.

    However, if we lay too much stress on the ability to make new friends and ignore the importance to maintain friendships, it’s easy to lose them too. Without deep friends, no one can understand our unspeakable sadness. On the contrary, having got on well for a long time, we can get a good understanding of each other. Not exaggeratedly, even though a simple facial expression, we can get the meaning from each other swiftly. When we have some difficulties which are hard to say out or understand, our old friends will always support and believe us.

    Furthermore, it’s more likely to know a man truly and comprehensively after getting on with him for long. When we make a new friend, he might conceal some shortcomings and pretend to be perfect in front of us. As a result, we can never know what kind of friend is as well as what exactly our new friend is thinking. However, as an old friend, we know each other’s weakness, like and dislike. So communication can be relaxing and enjoyable because we can deliberately avoid the unpleasant topics and change to the theme we are both interested in.

    • This reply was modified 1 week, 6 days ago by icepearicepear.
    February 13, 2020 at 5:18 am

    Score: 72.3

    Issues:

    1. Nearly 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.

    I will get back to you shortly.

    icepear
    University: USTC
    Nationality: China
    February 13, 2020 at 2:25 pm

    There is a public discussion nowadays about friendships. Some people think the ability to maintain friendships for a long time is more important for happiness. Nevertheless, others consider the ability to make many new friends more necessary. From my perspective, the ability to sustain friendships is more significant.

    Undoubtedly, the ability to make new friends can bring us different kinds of friends. Our life can be more colorful and full of happiness. Just imagine that wherever we go, we can always find several companies go with us; whoever we meet, we can chat for a while. We are unlikely to be alone because we have plenty of friends, new friends.

    However, if we ignore the importance to maintain friendships, it’s easy to lose new friends too. Without deep friends, no one can understand our unspeakable sadness. On the contrary, having got on well for a long time, we can get a good understanding of each other. Not exaggeratedly, even though a simple facial expression, we can get the meaning from each other swiftly. When we have some difficulties hard to say out or understand, our old friends will always support and believe us.

    Furthermore, it’s more likely to know a man truly and comprehensively after getting on with him for long. When we make a new friend, he might conceal some shortcomings and pretend to be perfect in front of us. As a result, we never know what kind of person he is as well as what exactly he is thinking. However, as an old friend, we know each other’s weakness, like and dislike. So communication can be relaxing and enjoyable. We can knowingly avoid the unpleasant topics and change to the theme we are both interested in.

    February 13, 2020 at 2:52 pm

    There is a public discussion nowadays about whether the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people for a long time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends (rephrase wording for the prompt). From (In) my perspective (opinion), the ability to sustain friendships is more significant (adjective error – “important” is better here).

    Undoubtedly, the ability to make new friends can bring us different kinds of friends (give more detail – what are different kinds of friends?). Our life can be more colorful and full of happiness (add more to this sentence – why?). Just imagine that wherever we go, we can always find several companies (companions) go with us; (change to comma) (and) whoever we meet, we can chat for a while. We are (verb tense error “It would be unlikely that we are alone”) unlikely to be alone because we have plenty of friends, (delete comma and add “and”) new friends.

    However, if we lay (put) too much stress on the ability to make new friends and ignore the importance to (of) maintain(ing) friendships, it’s (it is) easy to lose them (be more specific, “old friendships”) too. Without deep (adjective error) friends, no one can understand our unspeakable sadness. On the contrary, having got on well for a long time, we can get a good understanding of each other (rephrase/restructure sentence). Not exaggeratedly, (delete) even though a simple facial expression, we can get (convey) the (delete) meaning from (to) each other swiftly. When we have some (delete) difficulties (problems) which are hard to say out (loud) or understand, our old friends will always support and believe us.

    Furthermore, it’s (it is) more likely to know a man (person) truly and comprehensively after getting on with him (them) for long (a long time). When we make a new friend, he (they) might conceal some shortcomings and pretend to be perfect in front of us. As a result, we can (will) never know what kind of friend (they are) is as well as what exactly our new friend is thinking. However, as (with) an old friend, we know each other’s weakness, like and dislike (plural). So communication can be relaxing and enjoyable because we can deliberately avoid the (delete) unpleasant topics and change to the (a) theme we are both interested in.

    icepear
    University: USTC
    Nationality: China
    February 14, 2020 at 2:38 pm

    There is a public discussion nowadays about friendships. Some people think the ability to maintain friendships for a long time is more important for happiness. Nevertheless, others consider the ability to make many new friends more necessary. In my opinion, the ability to sustain friendships is more important.

    Undoubtedly, the ability to make new friends can bring us different kinds of friends. They have different personalities and stories. There are too many novel stories and attractive experiences from our new friends to share. Our life can be more colorful and full of happiness. Just imagine that wherever we go, we can always find several companions go with us, and whoever we meet, we can chat for a while. It would be unlikely that we are alone because we have plenty of friends.

    However, if we put too much stress on the ability to make new friends and ignore the importance of maintaining friendships, it is easy to lose old friendships too. Without intimate friends, no one can understand our unspeakable sadness. On the contrary, if we keep the relationship with our old friends, at least we won’t lose those who know us best. Even though a simple facial expression, we can convey meaning to each other swiftly. When we have problems which are hard to say loud or understand, our old friends will always support and believe us.

    Furthermore, it is more likely to know a person truly and comprehensively after getting on with them for a long time. When we make a new friend, they might conceal some shortcomings and pretend to be perfect in front of us. As a result, we will never know what kind of person they are as well as what exactly he is thinking. However, with an old friend, we know each other’s weaknesses, likes, and dislikes. So communication can be relaxing and enjoyable. We can knowingly avoid unpleasant topics and change to a theme we are both interested in.

    • This reply was modified 6 days, 21 hours ago by icepearicepear.
    February 17, 2020 at 8:50 pm

    Score: 72.9

    Issues:

    1. Nearly 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    icepear
    University: USTC
    Nationality: China
    February 18, 2020 at 10:51 am

    There is a public discussion nowadays about friendships. Some people think the ability to maintain friendships for a long time is more important for happiness. Nevertheless, others consider the ability to make many new friends more necessary. In my opinion, the ability to sustain friendships is more important.

    Undoubtedly, the ability to make new friends can bring us different kinds of friends. They have different personalities and stories. There are too many novel stories and engaging experiences from our new friends to share. Our life can be more colorful and full of happiness. Just imagine that wherever we go, we can always find several companions go with us, and whoever we meet, we can chat for a while. It would be unlikely that we are alone because we have plenty of friends.

    However, if we put too much stress on the ability to make new friends and ignore the importance of maintaining friendships, it is easy to lose old friendships. Without intimate friends, no one can understand our unspeakable sadness. On the contrary, if we keep the relationship with our old friends, at least we won’t lose those who know us best. Even though a simple facial expression, we can convey meaning to each other swiftly. When we have problems that are hard to understand, our old friends will always support and believe us.

    Furthermore, it is more likely to know a person comprehensively after getting on with them for a long time. When we make a new friend, they might conceal some shortcomings and pretend to be perfect in front of us. As a result, we will never know what kind of person they are as well as what exactly he is thinking. However, with an old friend, we know each other’s weaknesses, likes, and dislikes. So communication can be relaxing and enjoyable. We can knowingly avoid unpleasant topics and change to a theme we are both interested in.

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