Claim: the best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and the women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models. Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society’s highest ideals.

The claim assumes that the character of heroes in a society can represent the character of it [ unclear pronoun/a society ]because heroes show the hope of citizens. I partly agree with this view (for the following reasons.)[ summarize your reasons ]

The character of a society can indeed be known by heroes or its [unclear pronoun  ]role models.[ unnecessary passive sentence ] [As an illustration,  ]On the one hand, we can know the universal value of a society, such as three presidents in the United States [ embody/represent the values of the American society ]. Washington represents a society’s respect for the rights of individuals; Lincoln represents[repetiton  ] freedom and equality in American society; Roosevelt represents[repetition  ] a [the  ] society’s [collective  ] sense of justice and passion for work.[ punctuation error with coordinating conjunction ] And these [These  ]are exactly the different characters in[/during  ] different periods of [the  ]American society. [ Additionally, we ]We can [also learn the  ]know social values at different times by [examining  ]the heroes respected by [ the ]people then. For example, XXX was [is  ]regarded as a hero in[/during  ] the Anti-Japanese War, which reflects people’s patriotism[ among people ] at that time.

On the other hand, these [ Although many ]heroes can reflect society’s trends and intentions, but they could only reflect the ideal state of it[unclear pronoun  ]. In general, heroes are exaggerated by the media, and[ so ] their defects are usually overlooked. [punctuation error with coordinating conjunction  ]So the heroes are always [absolute statement  ]a little unrealistic and[ because they often] represent the[ an unattainable ] hope of the government. For example, xxx, a role model in China, is famous for his warm heart and selflessness. He was regarded as a model citizen and the masses[word form error  ] were encouraged to emulate his characters. Although xxx represents the hope[ /intention ] of the government to propaganda[ promote ] its moral ideal[ certain questionable ideologies ], it is unrealistic to require people to behave like xxx[him  ] in real life. Therefore, considering the society at that time as selflessness just based on the popularity of xxx is unjustified[unclear sentence  ]. Besides, many role models publicized by the government may only show the spirit of authority instead of the masses. In this case, although it seems that this kind of hero[ Although such ‘heroes’ became ] is famous among people, it may not [they often failed to accurately ]reflect the whole society’s view correctly.

Overall, it is[ avoid using ‘it is…’ ] one-sided to know a society just through the character of heroes in it[unclear pronoun  ], because it is difficult to mirror[ mirroring ] the whole[typical societal  ] character [remains/is difficult  ]of it. There are[ Avoid using ‘there be’ ] [In fact,  ]more reliable methods[, such as A and B, are available  ] to understand the character of a society, such as doing social fieldwork after classifying the population into different groups. For example, investigating the views of different classes of people towards a certain trait of heroes can help know thoroughly about the component of a society’s value[ unclear/hard to read ]. Also, researching a society cannot ignore the cultural and historical backgrounds of a nation. [punctuation error with coordinating conjunction  ]So it is necessary to study [ Studying ]the changes in cultural identity among people to help[ helps to ] know a society deeply[/comprehensively  ].