The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various particular categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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  • evina
    University: 北京联合大学
    Nationality: China
    January 15, 2021 at 3:49 am

    The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various particular categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

    The bar chart and the table illustrate the export value in different type of goods in 2015 and 2016 and how much the value has changed between two years.

    From the bar chart, it can be seen that the export earnings of petrolenm products is the highest in both 2015 and 2016. In 2015, the textiles that exported in 2015 contributed the least amount of export value. However, the export earning of textiles has gone up over 3o billion dollars in 2016 which is nearly equal to the value of agriculture products

    Overall, the table shows that the export earning have increased for most kinds of exported%. The export value of textiles oods except for gems and jewellery whose percentage change is has had the biggest change from 2015 to 2ol6, whereas that of agricultural goods has changed the least during these two years.
    To summarize therefore, both chart and table can show the export situativon in variety of goods duning 2ol5 and 2016. This country fucos more on petroleum and engineered product and concentrate less on agnicutural and clothing goods, which indicates that this country may be a industrial country.

     

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    January 15, 2021 at 8:49 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 65% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
    2. Extensive grammatical errors. 

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    evina
    University: 北京联合大学
    Nationality: China
    January 16, 2021 at 5:56 am

    The bar chart and the table illustrate the export value in different types ofgoods in 2015 and 2016 and how much the value has changed between two years.
    From the bar chart,  the export earning of petroleum products is the highest in both 2015 and 2016. In 2015,the teotiles that was exported in 2015 contributed the least amount of export value. However,
    the export earning of the textiles has gone up over 3o billion dollars in 2016 which is nearly equal to the value of agriculture products
    Overall, the table shows that the export earnings have increased for most kinds of exported goods. The export value of texties goods except for gems and jewelery whose percentage change is has had the largest change from 2015 to 20l6, whereas that of agriculturail goods has changed the least during these two years.
    To summarize therefore, both chart and table can show the export situation in variety of goods during 2ol5 and 2016. This country focus more on petroleum and engineered product and concentrate less on
    agricutural and clothing goods,which indicates that this country may be an industrial country.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    January 16, 2021 at 7:01 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
    2. Lots of grammatical/spacing errors. 

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.