The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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August 13, 2020 at 1:38 pm
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the proportions in typical meals on average of three different nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and added sugar) consumed in the USA, which could be unhealthy to us if we take in too much.
In terms of sodium and saturated fat, dinner accounts for the largest proportions of the two nutrients consumed, then lunch comes the second. In other word, the two meals are the main sources of sodium and saturated fat, taking up significant percentages of both of the two nutrients. By contrast, snacks contributed to 42% of added sugar, which is much higher than that taken in the other meals. Besides, one striking feature of the three charts is that the smallest percentage of each nutrient comes from breakfast, with 14%, 16% and 16% respectively.
Overall, in the USA, the majority of sodium and saturated fat are consumed at dinner and lunch, while snacks constitute a relatively substantial proportion of added sugar.
August 18, 2020 at 10:05 pmScore: ungraded
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August 19, 2020 at 4:55 amThe pie charts illustrate the proportions of three different nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and added sugar) consumed in the USA during four meals, which could be unhealthy for people if taken in too much.
In terms of sodium and saturated fat, dinner accounts for the most significant proportions of the two nutrients consumed, with 43% and 37% respectively. Then lunch comes the second, with both these two nutrients reaching nearly 30%. By contrast, snacks contribute to 42% of added sugar, which is much higher than that taken in the other meals. Besides, it is also noticeable that the smallest percentage of each nutrient comes from breakfast. The consumption of sodium, saturated fat or added sugar during breakfast is no more than 16%.
Overall, in the USA, dinner and lunch are the major sources of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks constitute a relatively substantial proportion of added sugar.
August 20, 2020 at 2:24 amScore: 62.8
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August 20, 2020 at 12:41 pmThe pie charts illustrate the proportions of three different kinds of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar) consumed in the USA during four meals, which could be unhealthy for people if taken in too much.
In terms of sodium and saturated fat, dinner accounts for the most significant proportions of the two nutrients consumed-with 43% and 37%, respectively. Then lunch comes second, with both of the two nutrients reaching nearly 30%. By contrast, snacks contribute to 42% of added sugar, which is much higher than that taken in the other meals. Besides, it is also noticeable that the smallest percentage of each nutrient comes from breakfast. The consumption of sodium, saturated fat, or added sugar during breakfast is no more than 16%.
Overall, in the USA, dinner, and lunch are the major sources of sodium and saturated fat. However, snacks constitute a relatively substantial proportion of added sugar.
August 20, 2020 at 12:49 pmThe pie charts illustrate the proportions of three different kinds of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar) consumed in the USA during four meals, which [ unclear pronoun ] could be unhealthy for people if taken in too much.
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Overall, in the USA, dinner, and lunch are the major sources of sodium and saturated fat. However, snacks constitute a relatively substantial proportion of added sugar.
