The charts below show the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan
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November 19, 2020 at 5:13 am
The charts below show the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The column chart compares a country’s export proceeds from five types of goods between 2015 and 2016, and the table gives information about how each export value changed over the same period.
It is clear to see that petroleum products and engineered goods are the most significant source for export revenues which far outstrip the other three exports. Besides, except for the value of exported gems and jewelers, the other four products all saw an increase in values during this time.
According to the bar chart, revenues earned from petroleum products remained the most from 2015 to 2016 with a slight rise in value from 61 billion dollars to 63, which doubled the number of agricultural products in both years. Engineered goods, gems, and jewelry provided second and third export earnings with 60 billion and 40 billion dollars each ear respectively. Textiles had the least contributions to export proceeds with the total amount of 27 billion in 2015, however, the figure of it saw an obvious rise and almost caught up with agricultural products to 32 billion after a year.
Looking at the table graph, 2016 witnessed a rise of between 0.81% to 15.25% rise in values of each category, with the exception of gems and jewelry, which declined by 5.18% than in the previous year. Among these increase figures, textiles saw the biggest rise in values of 15.24%, while agricultural products had a negligible increase of 0.18%. Additionally, changes in value have a positive correlation to its exported earning in each category.
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November 23, 2020 at 3:43 amThe column chart compares a country’s export proceeds from five types of goods between 2015 and 2016. Furthermore, the table gives information about how each export value changed over the same period.
Overall, petroleum products and engineered goods are the most significant source for export revenues, far outstripping the other three exports. All exported products saw an increase in values except gems and jewelers during this time.
According to the bar chart, revenues earned from petroleum products remained the most from 2015 to 2016. Meanwhile, this export also experienced a slight rise in values from 61 billion dollars to 63 which doubled the figure for agricultural products prices in both years. Engineered goods, gems and jewelry provided second and third export earnings with about 60 billion and 40 billion dollars respectively. Textiles had the least contributions to export proceeds with an amount of 27 billion in 2015. However, the figure of it saw an obvious rise and almost caught up with agricultural products to 32 billion after a year.
Looking at the table graph, 2016 witnessed a rise of between 0.81% to 15.25% rise in the values of most categories. Exclusively gems and jewelry declined by 5.18% than in the previous year. Among these increase figures, textiles saw the biggest rise of 15.24%, while agricultural products had a negligible increase of 0.18%. Additionally, changes in values have a positive correlation to its exported earning in each category.
The column chart compares a country’s export revenue
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