The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

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    University: Jilin University
    Nationality: China
    October 31, 2020 at 2:27 am

    The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

    The bar charts indicate what UK graduate and postgraduate students did apart from full-time job in 2008.

    According to the first graph, most graduates decided to study continually, the amount of that represented 29665. Meanwhile, 17735 undergraduates chose to do part-time work, which is over five times as much as that of voluntary job. Surprisingly, the figure for graduate students who remained unemployed was relative high, more than half of that of further study.

    The second graph shows the choices of postgraduate students when confronted with the same situation. Although the amount of postgraduate students is ten times less than that of undergraduates in total, the tendency seemed to be alike. The figure for further study ranked the first position, at 2725. However, the difference between the part-time work and the further study narrowed when compared with that happened on graduate students. The number of postgraduates doing voluntary work was the least, represented 345, among the four choices.

    Overall, the postgraduate and graduate students seemed to have the similar trend on deciding what to do excluding full-time work when left college in 2008.

    November 8, 2020 at 4:20 pm

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    1. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    2. Introduction is unclear
    3. Article errors
    4. Preposition errors

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