The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner. Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically.

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  • NewLand
    University: HUST
    Nationality: CHINA
    April 1, 2022 at 5:32 pm

    The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.

    • “Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.”
    • Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

    One Central Plaza store owner, in his letter to the editor, complained about skateboarding and proposed a ban on it there. He pointed out decline of the mall business and worsening environment, claiming that skateboarders have resulted in this calamity. While I sympathize with his frustration of maintaining a business, his argument is deeply flawed and several questions need to be adequately responded to determine further actions.

    First of all, we have to question the characterization of current trends. Is the number of shoppers really going down or is it the author’s conception from fewer costumers in his or her own shop? Is the described rise of skateboarding made from experienced unhappy encounters with skateboarders? The author reports that correlation between their annoying increasing number and declining sales is widely recognized among owners there. However, without objective studies of public opinion, we still can’t determine whether skateboarders have truly become so disturbing that deserves such restrictions. Perhaps some owners don’t agree with the author at all, who believes the area has become more attractive to more youngsters who come skateboarding together. Perhaps enmity between owners and those “unwelcomed visitors” are due to generation gap of the elders.

    In addition, we have to cast doubt on supposed relevance between disturbing “visitors” and worsening sales and environment maintenance. We need to take into account of local community. Maybe the vicinity has already suffered from economic hardship, fleeing investments, which causes previous customers to move away. As middle class leaves the area, the surrounding neighbourhood would be populated by low-income workers and even the homeless who idles all day round. Is the wandering impoverished people instead of skateboarders that leads to degeneration of the Plaza? If so,  the owner’s proposal for amelioration doesn’t hold water.

    The proposal neglects responsibility of other parties, such as shopkeepers and the Plaza management authorities.  One may speculate that the quality of shopping experience has worsened due to rude salesman or unpopular products on sale. The management authorities, whose actions are not mentioned, seem responsible for not keeping the Plaza from littering and arbitrary damages.   Admittedly, skateboarders are often pictured as carefree athletic juveniles, who are thought to be prone to wrongdoings like throwing rubbish, harassing ladies, mocking elders and breaking windows. But does such stereotype really fit the situation here? We need unbiased description of their behaviour to evaluate whether we should put prohibitions on them.

    What’s more it’s extremely obscure whether such prohibition would bring back a kempt and flourishing plaza, as the author has wished. What if the rise of skateboarders are just a tip of iceberg of issues, such as high rates of unemployment. With such problems lingering around, we can’t dream of returning the Plaza’s good old days by just banning some skateboarders.
    In brief. the owner’s proposal is somehow superficial with greater personal concern and insufficient reasoning. The city authorities should gather consensus and take attentive procedures rather than jumping into prohibitions with unwarranted cause.

    April 3, 2022 at 2:49 am
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    NewLand
    University: HUST
    Nationality: CHINA
    April 3, 2022 at 9:30 am

    One Central Plaza store owner, in his letter to the editor, proposed city’s ban on annoying skateboarding there. Pointing out evident business decline and worsening environment, the author deduced that skateboarders should be blamed. While I sympathize with his frustration, his argument is deeply flawed since several critical questions remain unanswered.

    First of all, we have to question the author’s description of current trends, which is fundamental to his argument. Are shoppers really diminishing, or is this a misconception from fewer customers the author served? As to the claim of rising skateboarding popularity, is it accurate or is it a prejudiced summary from experienced unhappy encounters with skateboarders? And how do the public perceive all this? Among shopkeepers, many seem to agree with the author, yet it’s dubious whether proposed prohibition would attain wide support when enforced. Perhaps proponents for skateboarders such as sportswear shop would act aggressively than middle-aged owners who just detest youngsters bustling.

    In addition, we shall cast doubt on causality between ‘’disturbing visitors” and deteriorating reality. Maybe the vicinity has already suffered from economic hardship, fleeing investments, which causes previous customers to move away. As middle class leaves the area, the surrounding neighbourhood is left with low-income workers and even the homeless. Is the wandering impoverished people instead of skateboarders that leads to degeneration of the Plaza? What if increasing vandalism is just the tip of the iceberg?  If so, the author’s ban seems frivolous.

    What’s more, the proposal neglects responsibility of other parties, such as shopkeepers and the Plaza management authorities. On one hand, it’s reasonable to assume that inherent failure to maintain regular service turn away customers and plaza tenants, discouraging shops to pursue consumer satisfaction. On the other hand, though skateboarders are often implicitly pictured as unruly athletic juveniles, prone to wrongdoings like harassing ladies and breaking windows, does such stereotype really fit the situation here? If not, it’s obviously useless to try reversing degradation by simply punishing scapegoats.

    In brief, the owner’s proposal is somehow superficial clouded with personal concern and biased reasoning. The city authorities should gather consensus and take attentive procedures to bring back a kempt and flourishing plaza rather than jumping into prohibitions with unwarranted cause.

     

    April 4, 2022 at 12:15 am
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    NewLand
    University: HUST
    Nationality: CHINA
    April 4, 2022 at 4:31 am

    One Central Plaza store owner, in his letter to the editor, proposed the city should ban on annoying skateboarding there. After complaining about evident business decline and worsening environment, the author deduced that skateboarders should be blamed. Though I sympathize with his frustration, his argument is deeply flawed since several critical questions remain unanswered.

    Firstly, we have to question the author’s description of current trends, which is fundamental to his argument. Are shoppers actually diminishing, or is this a misconception from fewer customers the author served? As to the claim of rising skateboarding popularity, is it accurate or is it a biased summary from experienced unhappy encounters with skateboarders? Moreover, how does the public perceive this problem? Numerous shopkeepers seem to agree with the author, yet it’s dubious whether the proposed prohibition would attain enough support when enforced. Perhaps proponents for skateboarders, such as sportswear shops, would act more aggressively than middle-aged owners who simply detest youngsters bustling.

    In addition, we shall cast doubt on causality between ‘’disturbing visitors” and deteriorating reality. Probably the vicinity has already suffered from economic hardship and fleeing investments, which causes previous customers to move away. As a result, the surrounding neighbourhood becomes filled with low-income workers and even the homeless. What if it’s the wandering impoverished people instead of skateboarders that leads to degeneration of the Plaza? What if increasing vandalism is just the tip of the iceberg?  If so, the author’s ban seems frivolous.

    What’s more, the proposal neglects discussion of other parties’ responsibilities, such as shopkeepers and the Plaza management authorities. On one hand, it’s reasonable to assume that inherent failure to maintain regular service turn away customers and plaza tenants, discouraging shops to pursue consumer satisfaction. On the other hand, though skateboarders are often implicitly pictured as unruly athletic juveniles, prone to wrongdoings like harassing ladies and breaking windows, does such a stereotype truly fit the situation here? If not, it’s undoubtedly futile to try reversing degradation by merely punishing scapegoats.

    In brief, the owner’s proposal is somehow superficial clouded with personal concern and biased reasoning. City authorities should gather consensus and take attentive procedures to bring back a kempt and flourishing plaza rather than jumping into prohibitions with unwarranted cause.

    April 12, 2022 at 7:30 pm

    One Central Plaza store owner, in his letter to the editor, proposed the city should ban on annoying skateboarding there. After complaining about [ the  ] evident business decline and worsening environment, the author deduced[ argued  ] that skateboarders should be blamed. Though I sympathize with his frustration, his argument is deeply flawed since several critical questions remain unanswered.

    Firstly, we have to question the author’s description of current trends, which is fundamental to his argument. Are shoppers actually diminishing, or is this a misconception[ resulted  ] from fewer customers the author served? As to the claim of rising skateboarding popularity, is it accurate or is it a biased summary [ derived  ] from experienced unhappy encounters with[  between xxx and ] skateboarders? Moreover, how does the public perceive this problem? Numerous shopkeepers seem to agree with the author, yet it’s dubious whether the proposed prohibition would attain enough support when enforced [ remains uncertain  ] . Perhaps proponents for skateboarders, such as sportswear shops, would act more aggressively than middle-aged owners who simply detest youngsters bustling.

    In addition, we shall cast doubt on causality between ‘’disturbing visitors” and deteriorating reality. Probably the vicinity has already suffered from economic hardship and fleeing investments, which causes previous customers to move away. As a result, the surrounding neighbourhood becomes [is   ] filled with low-income workers and even the homeless. What if it’s the wandering impoverished people instead of skateboarders that leads to [  the ] degeneration [ word choice issue  ] of the Plaza? What if increasing vandalism is just the tip of the iceberg?  If so, the author’s ban seems frivolous.

    What’s more, the proposal neglects discussion of other parties’ responsibilities, such as shopkeepers and the Plaza management authorities. On[  the ] one hand, it’s reasonable to assume that inherent failure to maintain regular service turn [ grammatical error  ] away customers and plaza tenants, discouraging shops to pursue consumer satisfaction. On the other hand, though skateboarders are often implicitly pictured as unruly athletic juveniles, prone to wrongdoings like harassing ladies and breaking windows, does such a stereotype truly fit the situation here?[ lengthy, unclear sentence  ] If not, it’s undoubtedly futile to try reversing degradation by merely punishing scapegoats.

    In brief, the owner’s proposal is somehow superficial[  word form error ] clouded with personal concern and biased reasoning. City authorities should gather consensus and take attentive procedures to bring back a kempt and flourishing plaza rather than jumping into prohibitions with unwarranted cause.

    April 12, 2022 at 7:43 pm

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