The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
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October 11, 2021 at 9:18 am
The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
In this augment, the author suggests that to reduce the accidents involving mopeds, the number of mopeds rented by rental companies must be limited. Although the neighboring island can be a good example, considering the different situations, to evaluate whether the predicted result can be achieved or not by implementing this recommendation, some questions need to be answered first.
The limitation on rental mopeds in the summer season might help reduce the number of mopeds driving on the road and thus control the accident rate during this period. However, the council still needs to know whether most of the accidents in a year occur in the summer season or not. If on the other seasons there are very fewer accidents happen, then limiting the number of rental mopeds could be helpful on attaining the predicted annual reduction, otherwise, the number of accidents in the whole year may only change a little.
Besides, the council also needs to know how many percentages of the rental mopeds are rented by the rental companies. Although the limitation can efficiently decrease the number of mopeds rented by companies, if there are only a small percentage of mopeds are given by the companies, the number of mopeds on a summer season will retain to a high level and the number of accidents thus can not be controlled. On the contrary, if only some companies can offer rental mopeds on Balmer Island, limits the number of mopeds rented by them can be useful for reducing the number of accidents, and thus the goal can be achieved.
Moreover, it is also questionable if the crowd caused by the huge number of mopeds is one of the main reasons for accidents. There might be some other reasons, such as incomplete transport facilities. Lack of transportation signal on the crossroad or the too many narrow roads can both increase the possibility of accidents. If the main reason for a high incidence of accidents is the lack of transport facilities, only limiting the number of rental mopeds will help a little in controlling the accident rate and thus the predicted 50 percent reduction is just an unreachable goal.
In conclusion, the limitation might be helpful in reduction in moped accidents. However, it is still unclear if the predicted result can be reached without answering the questions above.
October 11, 2021 at 10:04 amIn this augment (spelling error), the author suggests that to reduce the accidents involving mopeds, the number of mopeds rented by rental companies must be limited (switch the order of these two clauses). Although the neighboring island can be a good example, considering the different situations, to evaluate whether the predicted result can be achieved or not by implementing this recommendation, some questions need to be answered first (run-on sentence, simplify).
The limitation on rental mopeds in the summer season might help reduce the number of mopeds driving on the road and thus control the accident rate during this period. However, the council still needs to know whether most of the accidents in a year occur in the summer season or not. If on the other seasons there are very fewer accidents happen, then limiting the number of rental mopeds could be helpful on attaining the predicted annual reduction, otherwise, the number of accidents in the whole year may only change a little.
Besides, the council also needs to know how many percentages of the rental mopeds are rented by the rental companies. Although the limitation can efficiently decrease the number of mopeds rented by companies, if there are only a small percentage of mopeds are given by the companies, the number of mopeds on a summer season will retain to a high level and the number of accidents thus can not be controlled. On the contrary, if only some companies can offer rental mopeds on Balmer Island, limits the number of mopeds rented by them can be useful for reducing the number of accidents, and thus the goal can be achieved.
Moreover, it is also questionable if the crowd caused by the huge number of mopeds is one of the main reasons for accidents. There might be some other reasons, such as incomplete transport facilities. Lack of transportation signal on the crossroad or the too many narrow roads can both increase the possibility of accidents. If the main reason for a high incidence of accidents is the lack of transport facilities, only limiting the number of rental mopeds will help a little in controlling the accident rate and thus the predicted 50 percent reduction is just an unreachable goal.
In conclusion, the limitation might be helpful in reduction in moped accidents. However, it is still unclear if the predicted result can be reached without answering the questions above.
October 12, 2021 at 4:13 amPartial Revision (please fix similar errors, revise whole essay, and resubmit)
October 12, 2021 at 7:30 amIn this argument, the author suggests that the number of mopeds rented by rental companies must be limited to reduce the accidents involving mopeds and indicates the neighboring island as an example to espouse his idea. However, to evaluate whether the predicted result can be achieved or not by implementing this recommendation on Balmer Island, some necessary questions need to be answered first.
The limitation on rental mopeds during the summer season might help reduce the number of mopeds driving on the road and thus control the accident rate during this period. However, to reduce the annual accident rate, the council still needs to know whether most of the accidents in a year occur in the summer season or not. If much fewer accidents happen in the other seasons than in summer, implement this recommendation will help attain the predicted annual reduction. Otherwise, the number of accidents in the whole year may only change a little.
Besides, the council needs to know if there are potential sources of rental mopeds except for the rental companies. Although the limitation can efficiently decrease the number of mopeds rented by companies, if more rental mopeds are available from other sources such as some individuals who own mopeds, the number of mopeds during the summer season will still retain to a high level. On the contrary, if only rental companies are allowed to offer rental mopeds on Balmer Island, limiting the number of mopeds rented by them can efficiently decrease the whole number of mopeds driving on the way. Thus, the council can reach its predicted goal of accidents reduction.
Moreover, it is also questionable if the huge number of mopeds is one of the main reasons for accidents. Some other reasons, such as lack of transportation signal or too many narrow roads on the island, can also increase the possibility of accidents. If the main reason for a high incidence of accidents is the other reason like incomplete transport facilities, only by limiting the number of rental mopeds, the predicted 50 percent reduction of accidents will be unreachable.
In conclusion, it is still unclear if the predicted reduction of accidents can be reached without answering the questions above.
October 12, 2021 at 12:53 pmIn this argument, the author suggests that the number of mopeds rented by rental companies must be limited to reduce the (delete) accidents involving mopeds and indicates (uses) the neighboring island as an example to espouse his idea (delete). However, to evaluate whether the predicted result can be achieved or not (delete) by implementing this recommendation on Balmer Island, some necessary questions need to be answered first.
The limitation on rental mopeds during the summer season might help reduce the number of mopeds driving on the road and thus control the accident rate during this period. However, to reduce the annual accident rate, the council still needs to know whether most of the accidents in a year (delete) occur in the summer season or not (delete). If much (delete) fewer accidents happen in the (delete) other seasons than in summer, implement (delete) this recommendation will help attain the predicted annual reduction (will do little to reduce moped accidents). Otherwise, the number of accidents in the whole year may only change a little. (delete)
Besides (Additionally), the council needs to know if there are potential sources of rental mopeds except for (outside of) the rental companies. Although the limitation can efficiently decrease the number of mopeds rented by companies, (delete) if more rental mopeds are available from other sources such as some (delete) individuals who own mopeds, the number of mopeds during the summer season will still retain to a high level (remain high). On the contrary, if only rental companies are allowed to offer rental mopeds on Balmer Island, limiting the number of mopeds rented by them can efficiently decrease the whole (delete) number of mopeds driving on the way (delete). Thus, the council can reach its predicted goal of accidents reduction. (delete)
Moreover, it is also questionable if the huge number of mopeds is one of the main reasons for accidents. Some other reasons, such as lack of transportation signal (signs) or too many (delete) narrow roads on the island, can also increase the possibility of accidents. If the main reason for a high incidence of (delete) accidents is the other (another) reason like incomplete transport facilities, only by limiting the number of rental mopeds, (delete) the predicted 50 percent reduction of accidents will be unreachable (if you only reduce the number of mopeds on the road).
In conclusion, it is still unclear if the predicted reduction of accidents can be reached without answering the questions above.
October 12, 2021 at 2:26 pmFinal Revision
