The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station.

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  • howardlei
    University: National University of Singapore
    Nationality: Chinese
    July 4, 2022 at 2:59 pm

    The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station. “To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area.”

    Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

    In this article, the author argues that it would be better if they change from their current rock-music format to a news and talk format in favor of attracting more potential listeners. To further support his arguments, he contended that there has been a decline in the number of listeners given a recent increase in the population, which they inculpate to listeners indifferent to the rock-music format. Although the decline in the number of listeners may indeed suggest that they should replace the music format, more evidence is needed to help us evaluate the author’s conclusion because under close scrutiny, several of his key conclusions lack critical support.

    To begin with, evidence regarding whether the population really grows should be addressed to better support the author’s assumption that there has been a decline despite an increase in population. So far, this assumption does not receive any support and could be wrong given that immigrants and emigrants may be coy about their private information without disclosing the message whether they still live in the listener areas. For example, young people may tend to be mobilized in choosing an area to reside in and possess a rather eroded identity of “home.” If that indeed shows people reporting their information accurately and there is indeed an absolute decrease in the population, then the author’s argument will be undoubtedly strengthened. However, if it turns out that the population remained at the same level as before or even decreased, we must reject the assertion of the existence of a decline in view of that the percentage of listeners might increase even if the absolute number of listeners decreases.

    Even if we acknowledge for now that there is indeed a decline in the number of listeners, more evidence is required to show that continued decline in local sales of recorded music is the reason for the deduction of people’s limited interest in music. Since author only mentioned that there was reduction in sales of recorded music but the sales of music in other forms such as music applications or live music. If new evidence indicates a general decline in music sales across all formats, the author’s conclusion that people were becoming less interested in music can be strengthened.On the contrary, if statistics on the sales and situation of other formats of music, such as live or recorded concerts, revealed an increasing trend, the author’s conclusion that people are becoming less interested in music can be supported further.

    Finally, granted that people really have declined interest in music, we still need to consider whether there is evidence help show changing to news and talk shows can improve the number of listeners. Based on the currently available information provided by the author, it is impossible to know whether people, especially the elderly, are really interested in the news and talk shows. For example, it may be the case that people are becoming more fascinated by visual stimuli such as movies and soap operas than radios  which can only provide acoustic stimulation no matter the music or news and talk shows. When additional evidence emerges suggesting that new immigrants to the listening area have greater and enduring interests in the genre of news talk shows, the author’s conclusion can be further supported. On the other hand, if new social discovery or poll shows that people spend less time on the news or show little interest, the author’s conclusion would be weakened.

    To summarize, the evidence which author provided does not provide solid and tenable information about the population and listener’s particulars. As a consequence, we need additional information to better evaluate of author’s claim.

     

     

     

    July 5, 2022 at 2:24 pm

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    To begin with, evidence regarding whether the population really grows should be addressed to better support the author’s assumption that there has been a decline despite an increase in population. So far, this assumption does not receive any support and could be wrong given that immigrants and emigrants may be coy about their private information without disclosing the message whether they still live in the listener areas. For example, young people may tend to be mobilized in choosing an area to reside in and possess a rather eroded identity of “home.” If that indeed shows people reporting their information accurately and there is indeed an absolute decrease in the population, then the author’s argument will be undoubtedly strengthened. However, if it turns out that the population remained at the same level as before or even decreased, we must reject the assertion of the existence of a decline in view of that the percentage of listeners might increase even if the absolute number of listeners decreases.

    Even if we acknowledge for now that there is indeed a decline in the number of listeners, more evidence is required to show that continued decline in local sales of recorded music is the reason for the deduction of people’s limited interest in music. Since author only mentioned that there was reduction in sales of recorded music but the sales of music in other forms such as music applications or live music. If new evidence indicates a general decline in music sales across all formats, the author’s conclusion that people were becoming less interested in music can be strengthened.On the contrary, if statistics on the sales and situation of other formats of music, such as live or recorded concerts, revealed an increasing trend, the author’s conclusion that people are becoming less interested in music can be supported further.

    Finally, granted that people really have declined interest in music, we still need to consider whether there is evidence help show changing to news and talk shows can improve the number of listeners. Based on the currently available information provided by the author, it is impossible to know whether people, especially the elderly, are really interested in the news and talk shows. For example, it may be the case that people are becoming more fascinated by visual stimuli such as movies and soap operas than radios  which can only provide acoustic stimulation no matter the music or news and talk shows. When additional evidence emerges suggesting that new immigrants to the listening area have greater and enduring interests in the genre of news talk shows, the author’s conclusion can be further supported. On the other hand, if new social discovery or poll shows that people spend less time on the news or show little interest, the author’s conclusion would be weakened.

    To summarize, the evidence which author provided does not provide solid and tenable information about the population and listener’s particulars. As a consequence, we need additional information to better evaluate of author’s claim.

    July 5, 2022 at 2:32 pm

    Partial revision. Please improve clarity.