The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the art department at the college. “In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 per cent agree that participating in an internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40 per cent.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. GRE Writing The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the art department at the college. “In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 per cent agree that participating in an internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40 per cent.

  • Ryan Chen
    University: BUCT
    Nationality: China
    March 5, 2022 at 8:33 am

    The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the art department at the college. “In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 per cent agree that participating in an internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40 per cent.

    In today’s world, an internship experience might be beneficial for graduates to find a job. In the letter above , the author claimed that all the students in the art department of Linford College should complete an internship with Skyway Designs before they graduate. Though the author listed some advantages of this recommendation, we still need to insure this advice is useful for the students by figuring our some questions.

    To start with, the author claimed in the letter that the SkyDesigns Company offer internships in all of their departments so that every student can find his or her ideal job. It is surely that with the SkyDesigns open all of its departments to students, they will have a bigger chance to find work that they are interested in. But we still need to find out that how many departments the company has. Or would rather say, is it true that the number of the departments the company has is much enough for all the students to find an ideal job. If the company is rather small and it only covers a small range of business, so the number of its departments won’t be big enough. Then it’s not appealing to Linford College students to find an internship there and the author’s opinion will be weakened.

    Secondly, the author said the Skyway Designs is known and it’s one of the best in its field of business, and the author’s reason is that over 80 percent of business in Linford City use the services of SkyDesign. As we first looked at this we may believe that the SkyDesign is a large corporation and has a great reputation in its field. But as we think further, we need to figure out that does containing 80 percent of design business in Linford City represents its high status and achievements in designing field? Firstly, we don’t know the size of Lincoln city, if the city has only a small amount of people, we can’t claim that containing 80 percent business of such city is a big business. Moreover, even if the Lincoln City is big enough, but to be recognize as one of the best in its field needs more voice. Success only in Lincoln City can’t prove this point. It’s success in Lincoln City may comes from its well-known of the local people’s tastes or some other things. Only after solve these questions, we can judge the author’s opinion in further steps.

    Additionally, whether the college should require all art students to complete an internship needs more consideration. We need to figure out is there any students among the graduates wants a promotion academically, likewise to attain a master degree? If so ,then it’s no need to require such students to complete an internship, college should save time for those students to finish their study.

    To sum up, the author’s opinion will be more convincing only after solved some vital questions, if not, the author’s recommendation may not be convincing.

    March 6, 2022 at 2:21 am

    Fix errors suggested on screenshot reviews and then resubmit your essay.

    Ryan Chen
    University: BUCT
    Nationality: China
    March 6, 2022 at 2:21 am

    I downloaded it from the GRE official website, and  sorry I have just find the title of my essay wasn’t complete, and here is the complete one:

    The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the art department at the college.

    “In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 percent agree that participating in an internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40 percent of Linfords graduating art students had completed an internship. SkyDesigns, located in nearby Linford City, is the perfect company for students to intern with for a number of reasons: They offer internships in all of their departments, so every student is sure to find work that they are interested in. Additionally, their internships offer flexible working hours. Finally, Skyway Designs is known for being one of the best in the design business, as over 80 percent of businesses in Linford City have used the services of Skyway Designs for their design needs. Given the vital role that work experience plays in a students success after graduation, we recommend that our art department require all art students to complete an internship with Skyway Designs before graduation.”

    Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.