The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.

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  • Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    June 18, 2020 at 7:36 am

    The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.

    The line chart gives data on the Chinese and American birth rates from 1920 to 2000. It is evident that both nations saw an overall drop in natality, with highs during the 1950s.

    Increasing from 10% in 1920 to 15% in 1935, China’s birth rate then plummeted to 5% in the 1940s. This was followed by an exponential climb, hitting a high of 20% in 1950. However, the rate of babies born in China was in decline from the highest point, reaching a low point of well under 5%.

    In the same period, the US birth rate stayed in the vicinity of 12% from 1920 to 1940, before dipping sharply to a low of just under 5% in 1945. The next five years saw sharp growth to 15% , followed by a consistent fall to the end point at 7% in 2000.

    In conclusion, it is notable that the natalities in the two countries were quite similar throughout the whole period ,yet the gap between the two countries widened after 1950.

    June 18, 2020 at 12:46 pm

    Score: 75

    The line chart gives data on the Chinese and American birth rates [ in China and the United States ]from 1920 to 2000. It is evident that [ Schematically,  ]both nations saw an overall drop in natality, with highs during the 1950s.

    Increasing from 10% in 1920 to 15% in 1935, China’s birth rate then plummeted to 5% in the 1940s. This was followed by an exponential climb, hitting a high of 20% in 1950. {However, the rate of babies born in China was in decline from the highest point, reaching a low point of well under 5%.}[ unclear; need to specify time period ]

    In/During the same period, the US birth rate stayed in the vicinity of 12% from 1920 to 1940, before dipping sharply to a low of just under 5% in 1945. The next five years saw [ a ]sharp growth to 15% ,[ 15%, ] followed by a consistent fall to the end point[ endpoint ] at 7% in 2000.

    In conclusion, it is notable that the natalities in the two countries were quite similar throughout the (whole period)[study period  ] ,yet the gap[of xxx  ] between the two countries widened after 1950.