The illustrations below show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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  • Jacky
    University: Sun-Yat-Sen University
    Nationality: china
    August 2, 2021 at 2:52 am

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    The illustrations below show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

    The pictures shown below show us the procedures that the production of chocolate must go through. From a cocoa tree cultivated to the liquid chocolate, there are ten essential steps for the manufacturer to perform consecutively. These small steps, however, all include a specific standard.

    First part of the process would be harvesting the ripe red pods from the cocoa trees which is grown in S. America, Africa, Indonesia, etc. Then we will get white cocoa beans inside the pods and ferment these beans. Then we spread them in sun to dry after which we can put them in large sacks.

    So now we have a plenty of cocoa beans which have not been manipulated. These jobs will be done by the factory after transported by train or lorry. And after being roasted in 350 degree and crush till the outer shell removed, we can use the inner part of the beans to produce liquid chocolate.

    August 2, 2021 at 2:55 am

    Fix errors that are shown on my screenshot.

    Jacky
    University: Sun-Yat-Sen University
    Nationality: china
    August 3, 2021 at 10:37 am

    The pictures shown below show us the procedures that the production of chocolate must go through. From a cocoa tree cultivated to liquid chocolate, there are ten essential steps for the manufacturer to perform consecutively. These small steps, however, all include a specific standard.

    The first part of the process would be harvesting the ripe red pods from the cocoa trees grown in S. America, Africa, Indonesia, etc. Then we will get white cocoa beans inside the pods and ferment these beans. Then we spread them in sun to dry before putting them in large sacks.

    So now we have plenty of cocoa beans that have not been processed. These jobs will be done by the factory after being transported by train or lorry. And after being roasted at 350 degrees and crush till the outer shell is removed, we can use the inner part of the beans to produce liquid chocolate.

    August 4, 2021 at 2:47 am

    The pictures shown below show us [ illustrate ]the [ chocolate production ]procedures that the production of chocolate must go through. From [cultivating  ]a cocoa tree cultivated to liquid chocolate, there are ten essential steps for the manufacturer to perform consecutively [misplaced adverb  ]. These small steps, however, all include [wrong word  ]a specific standard.

    The first part of the process would be harvesting the ripe red pods from the cocoa trees grown in S. America, Africa, Indonesia, etc. Then we will get white cocoa beans inside the pods and ferment these beans. Then we spread them in sun to dry before putting them in large sacks.

    So now we have plenty of cocoa beans that have not been processed. These jobs will be done by the factory after being transported by train or lorry. And after being roasted at 350 degrees and crush till the outer shell is removed, we can use the inner part of the beans to produce liquid chocolate.

    August 4, 2021 at 2:50 am

    Partial revision [Excessive errors.]

    Jacky
    University: Sun-Yat-Sen University
    Nationality: china
    August 4, 2021 at 5:08 am

    The pictures shown below illustrate the chocolate production procedures. From cultivating a cocoa tree to liquid chocolate, there are ten essential steps for the manufacturer to perform consecutively. These small steps, however, all of which are required to meet a specific standard.
    The first step of the procession would be harvesting the ripe red pods from the cocoa trees grown in S. America, Africa, Indonesia, etc. After that, we will obtain white cocoa beans inside the pods and ferment these beans. Then we spread them under sunlight to dry before putting them in large sacks.
    Before delivering these raw cocoa beans for further processing, we need to transport them to the factory by train or lorry. The factory will take over the rest of the processing by setting a specific temperature or speed of machines. And after being roasted at 350 degrees and crush till the outer shell is removed, we can use the inner part of the beans to produce liquid chocolate.

    August 9, 2021 at 3:09 am

    The pictures shown below illustrate the chocolate production procedures[  establish the context]. From (cultivating a cocoa tree to liquid )[structural issue  ]chocolate, there are ten essential[, consecutive  ] steps for the manufacturer to perform consecutively. These small steps, however, all of which are[all  ] required to meet a specific standard.

    The first step of the procession would be[ relates to ] harvesting the [ article error ]ripe red pods from the [ article error ]cocoa trees grown in S. America, Africa, Indonesia, etc. After that, we[  change in person] will obtain white cocoa beans inside the pods and ferment these beans. Then we spread them[ unclear pronoun ] under sunlight to dry before[ /prior to ] putting them in large sacks.

    Before delivering these raw cocoa beans for further processing, we need to transport them to the factory by train or lorry. The factory will take over the rest of the processing by setting a specific temperature or [the  ]speed of machines. [ punctuation error concerning conjunction word ]And after being roasted at 350 degrees and crush till the outer shell is removed, we can use the inner part of the beans to produce liquid chocolate.

    August 27, 2021 at 6:36 pm

    Final revision.