The international community must act immediately to ensure that all countries reduce their consumption of fossil fuels, such as gas and oil. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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March 20, 2020 at 1:38 am
The international community must act immediately to ensure that all countries reduce their consumption of fossil fuels, such as gas and oil. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people support that the international community should takes measures to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels all of the world immediately. I agree with the opinion that we should decrease the consumption, but I hold the opposite perspective of the urgent action.
It is necessary to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels. If we don’t take measure to this, the issue of environment pollution will get worse. Because many countries consume huge of fossil fuels every year, it produces a lot of harmful gas. It will cause the pollution an environment issue. For instance, the cars which are driven on the road every day are the one reason for Global Warming. In that case, reducing the consumption of fossil fuels must be put on the agenda.
However, in my perspective it is impossible to reduce it immediately. There are many things requires fossil fuels to operate, like transportation system and some industry. If we reduce the consumption immediately, it will lead of troubles and has a huge impact on our society, even our life and work will be affected. Thus, we should reduce it gradually by encourage the development of electricity cars or seek other fossil like H2, In this way we can reduce the requirement thereby reducing the consumption.
In conclusion, reducing the consumption is a good idea, but I strongly recommend to reduce it gradually not immediately It can solve the problem from the root.
March 20, 2020 at 2:14 amScore: ungraded
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March 20, 2020 at 8:39 amSome people support that the international community should take measures to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels worldwide immediately. I agree with the opinion that we should decrease consumption, but I hold the opposite perspective on immediate action.
It is necessary to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels. If we don’t find solution to it, the environmental issue will get worse. Because many countries consume a mass of fossil fuels every year. It produces a lot of harmful gas and will cause the problem of pollution. For instance, the cars which are driven on the road every day are the one reason for Global Warming. In that case, it is about time to control the abuse before it too late.
However, it is impossible to reduce it immediately. Many equipment requires fossil fuels to ran, like many kinds of vehicle. We can’t live without it as the increase in demand. If we reduce the consumption immediately, it will lead to troubles and has a huge impact on our society, even our life and work will be affected. Thus, we should reduce our needs of fuels gradually and find ways to replace the consumptions such as encouraging the development of electric cars or seeking another fossil like H2. In this way we can reduce the demand for fuels and thus the demand for them.
In conclusion, cutting back on fossil fuel use is a good idea, but I suggest tackling the problem bit by bit, not immediately.
March 20, 2020 at 3:26 pmScore: 68.1
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