Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 

  • Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    May 1, 2020 at 1:21 pm

    Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 

    Some rich people believe that entertaining themselves in order to get a relax is paramount, while some may think donate their money to do charitable activities to help other people is more vital. However the most important thing is defined, I reckon that giving a person the opportunity to help other people is not the most essential thing about being rich.

    Undeniably, the rich have a multitude of money to do what they like. Compared with these people, general public only have sufficient money to afford the daily necessities such as food and clothes. Therefore, people in the base are willing to receive the monetary supports from those people since they may believe that everyone should be equal and use the term ‘equality’ to illuminate the way of ‘evenly distribution of assets’ .

    Nevertheless, it is extremely wrong to oblige other people to do unwanted things. What can be said is that ‘equality’ is a term for ensuring everyone gets the same treatment from a person or organisation, including the term ‘freedom’ which is inclusive of choosing whether to do or not. The money earned by the rich is also same as us that is by effort. As the proverb goes,’no pain, no gain.’ , if people really pay their heart, they must be paid pack which depends on how much they pay. That is equality indeed.

    Therefore, how to use the money earned by people is totally by person. Some rich people may use part of their money to help people in need. For instance, Jack Ma, the founder of Alibaba, has donated so many medical equipment like masks to the countries around the world during the epidemic period. As a result, he is profoundly deserved our respect. How about those have never helped others? Should they be victims of cyberbullying? Why?

    To sum up, everyone has their freedom to make decisions by themselves. Undeniably, it is true that helping others are important. Nonetheless, the right for people to choose what is the most important thing for them is the number-one concern in the civilized society.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    May 1, 2020 at 10:30 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    3. Many grammatical errors.
    4. A lot of words/sentences don’t make sense. You need to choose different words or rewrite the sentences.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    May 2, 2020 at 2:28 am

    Some rich people believe that entertaining themselves to get a relax is paramount. Some may think donate their money to do charitable activities to help other people is more vital. No matter how the most significant thing is defined, I reckon that giving a person the opportunity to help other people is not the top list about being rich.

    As we know, the rich have a multitude of money to do what they like. Compared with these people, the general public only have sufficient capital to afford daily necessities such as food and clothes. Therefore, people in the base are willing to receive monetary supports from those people since they may believe that everyone should be equal and use the term ‘equality’ to illuminate the way of ‘evenly distribution of assets’.

    Nevertheless, it is definitely wrong to oblige other people to do unwanted things. What can I say is that ‘equality’ is a term for ensuring everyone gets the same treatment from a person or organisation, including the term ‘freedom’ which is inclusive of choosing whether to do or not. The money earned by the rich is also identical as us that is by effort. As the proverb goes, ‘no pain, no gain.’ If people pay their heart, they must be paid back, which depends on how much they pay. That is equality indeed.

    Therefore, how to use the money earned by people is by person. Some rich people may use part of their moeny to help people in need. For instance, Jack Ma, the founder of Alibaba, has donated so much medical stuff like masks to the countries around the world amid the epidemic period. As a result, he is profoundly deserved our respect. How about those never helped others? Should they be victims of cyberbullying? Why?

    To sum up, everyone has their freedom to make own decisions by themselves. There is no doubt that it is true that helping others is important. Nonetheless, the right for people to choose the important thing for them is the number-one concern in civilized society.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    May 5, 2020 at 8:10 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Recommendations:

    1. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts;
    2. Consecutive sentences start with the same word. I.E. Some…. Some…;
    3. Many grammatical errors;
    4. Use concrete words to replace vague adjectives such as paramount, significant and important;
    5. Remove redundant words like As We Know or IT is…(IT is unclear);
    6. Learn when to use a plural noun and when a singular noun.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    May 6, 2020 at 12:11 am

    <span>Some rich people believe that entertaining themselves to get a relax is paramount. Some may think that donate their money to do charitable activities to help other people is more vital. No matter how the most significant thing is defined, I reckon that allowing a person to help other people is not the top list about being rich.

    As we know, the rich have a multitude of money to do what they like. Compared with these people, the general public only have sufficient capital to afford daily necessities such as food and clothes. Therefore, people in the base are willing to receive monetary supports from those people since they may believe that everyone should be equal and use the term ‘equality’ to illuminate the way of ‘evenly distribution of assets’.

    Nevertheless, it is wrong to oblige other people to do unwanted things. What can I say is that ‘equality’ is a term for ensuring everyone gets the same treatment from a person or organisation, including the term ‘freedom’ which is inclusive of choosing whether to do or not. The money earned by the rich is also identical to us which is by effort. As the proverb goes, ‘no pain, no gain.’ If people pay their hearts, they must be paid back, which depends on how much they pay. That is equality indeed.

    Therefore, how to use the money earned by people is by person. Some rich people may use part of their money to help people in need. For instance, Jack Ma, the founder of Alibaba, has donated so much medical stuff like masks to the countries around the world amid the epidemic period. As a result, he is profoundly deserved our respect. How about those who never helped others? Should they be victims of cyberbullying? Why?

    To sum up, everyone has the freedom to make their own decisions by themselves. There is no doubt that helping others is indeed important. Nonetheless, the right for people to choose the important thing for them is the number-one concern in the civilized society.</span>

    Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    May 19, 2020 at 11:56 pm

    Some rich people believe that entertaining themselves to get a relax is paramount. Some may think that donate their money to do charitable activities to help other people is more vital. No matter how the most significant thing is defined, I reckon that allowing a person to help other people is not the top list about being rich.

    As we know, the rich have a multitude of money to do what they like. Compared with these people, the general public only have sufficient capital to afford daily necessities such as food and clothes. Therefore, people in the base are willing to receive monetary supports from those people since they may believe that everyone should be equal and use the term ‘equality’ to illuminate the way of ‘evenly distribution of assets’.

    Nevertheless, it is wrong to oblige other people to do unwanted things. What can I say is that ‘equality’ is a term for ensuring everyone gets the same treatment from a person or organisation, including the term ‘freedom’ which is inclusive of choosing whether to do or not. The money earned by the rich is also identical to us which is by effort. As the proverb goes, ‘no pain, no gain.’ If people pay their hearts, they must be paid back, which depends on how much they pay. That is equality indeed.

    Therefore, how to use the money earned by people is by person. Some rich people may use part of their money to help people in need. For instance, Jack Ma, the founder of Alibaba, has donated so much medical stuff like masks to the countries around the world amid the epidemic period. As a result, he is profoundly deserved our respect. How about those who never helped others? Should they be victims of cyberbullying? Why?

    To sum up, everyone has the freedom to make their own decisions by themselves. There is no doubt that helping others is indeed important. Nonetheless, the right for people to choose the important thing for them is the number-one concern in the civilized society.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    May 23, 2020 at 12:49 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    2. Numerous grammatical errors.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    May 23, 2020 at 1:20 am

    Some rich people believe that entertaining themselves to get a relax is paramount. Some may think that donate their money to help other people is more vital. No matter how the most significant thing defines, I reckon that helping other people is not the top list about being rich.

    As we know, the rich have a multitude of money to do what they like. Compared with these people, the general public only has enough capital to afford daily necessities such as food and clothes. Therefore, people in the base are willing to receive monetary supports from those people to boost their purchasing power.

    However, it is wrong to oblige other people to do unwanted things.  The money earned by the rich is also by their arduous effort. As the proverb goes, ‘no pain, no gain.’ If people pay their hearts, effort must pay them back, which depends on how much they pay.

    Therefore, how to use the money earned by millionaires is by person.  Helping is not rich people’s responsibility. Some of them may use part of their money to help people in need. Jack Ma, the founder of Alibaba, has donated untold medical stuff like masks to the countries around the world amid the epidemic period. As a result, he is worth our respect. How about those who never helped others? Should they be victims of cyberbullying due to no help?

    To sum up, everyone has the freedom to make their own decisions by themselves. No doubt that helping others is important. Nonetheless, capitalists choosing whether to help others is the number-one concern in the civilized society.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    May 23, 2020 at 1:57 am

    Most grammatical problems remain. Please spend more time correcting them.

    Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    May 23, 2020 at 2:48 am

    When asked whether helping others is the most important thing if we are rich, people are always at odds with each other. In my opinion, it is not appropriate to link being rich directly with being helpful.

    The rich have a multitude of money to do what they like. Compared with these people, the general public only has enough capital to afford daily necessities such as food and clothes. Therefore, ordinary people do not have spare money to subsidize the poor, so they think rich people should bear the liability for helping people in need.

    However, it is wrong to oblige other people to do uncomfortable things. The money amassed by the rich is also by their arduous effort. As the proverb goes, ‘no pain, no gain.’ If people pay their hearts, effort must pay them back, which varies on how much they pay.

    Therefore, how to use the money earned by millionaires is by the person. Helping others is not the rich’s responsibility. Some of them may use part of their money to help people in need. Jack Ma, the founder of Alibaba, has donated untold medical stuff like masks to countries around the world amid the epidemic period. As a result, he is worth our respect. How about those who have never helped others? Should they be victims of cyberbullying due to no help?

    To sum up, everyone has the freedom to make their own decisions by themselves. No doubt that helping others is important. Nonetheless, capitalists choosing whether to help others is the number-one concern in a civilized society.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    May 27, 2020 at 7:05 pm

    Score: 72.3

    When asked whether helping others is the most important thing if we are rich, people [ shift of person ] are always at odds with each other. In my opinion, it is not appropriate to link being rich directly with being helpful.

    The rich have a multitude of money to do what they like. Compared with these people, the general public only has enough capital to afford daily necessities such as food and clothes. Therefore, most ordinary people (do not have spare) lack money to subsidize the poor, so they think rich people should bear the liability for helping people in need.

    However Additionally, it is wrong to oblige other people to do uncomfortable things. The money amassed by the rich is also by results from their arduous efforts. As the proverb goes, ‘no pain, no gain.’ If people (pay their hearts)[ unclear ] , effort must pay them back, which varies on how much they pay.[unclear  ]

    Therefore, how to use the money earned by millionaires is by the person. Helping others is not the rich’s responsibility. Some of them may use part of their money to help people in need. Jack Ma, the founder of Alibaba, has donated untold medical stuff gear like masks to countries around the world amid the epidemic period. As a result, he is worth our respect. How about those who have never helped others? Should they be the victims of cyberbullying due to (no help)[unclear  ] ?

    To sum up, everyone has the freedom to make their own decisions by themselves. No doubt that helping others is important. Nonetheless, capitalists choosing whether to help others is (the number-one concern)[unclear  ] in a civilized society.