In recent years, the pressure of students in university is increasing and they are pushed to work hard from a young age. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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  • wintandy
    University: no
    Nationality: China
    May 23, 2020 at 1:29 pm

    In recent years, the pressure of students in university is increasing and they are pushed to work hard from a young age. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

    At the moment, students have been exhausted themselves studying under some situation. Albeit the press of study produces some issues, I consider that appropriate tension improve their capabilities to some extents.

    As the growth of development, people have more opportunities to accept education, but need to face more competitions after graduations than in the past. And increasing moderate pressure prepares students well for their future life. Firstly, there is no doubt that tension likely come from the high academic performance which they have to achieve. Secondly, if students have the press of study, which means that they want to get progress or solve study problems, it is likely to force them to gain good academic performance. For example, students spark their academic potential as calculate a difficult math question, as well as bringing tension of that. Finally, students can adapt better in the future if they have similar experience during growth period.

    However, I don’t think that it is advantage for students to receive too much pressure. None of students could do well in the same extent, it is not a real. Some schools pursuit high rate of graduation, and parents hope that their children can be at the top of classes. Both of situations push students tight and even frustrated. It is risky that students miss the original intention of study and produce mental problems. Students who are disappointed with their grades are stuck in unconfident mentality, and cannot find potential of themselves.

    In a conclusion, it is clear that I think the overloaded pressure of study cause some problems, while it is not a victim for students to endure appropriate tension.

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    May 27, 2020 at 4:19 pm

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    wintandy
    University: no
    Nationality: China
    May 29, 2020 at 7:39 am

    At the moment, students have been exhausted themselves studying under some situations. Albeit the press of study produces some issues, I consider that appropriate tension improves their capabilities to some extent.

    With the growth of development, people have more opportunities to accept education but need to face more competitions after graduation than in the past. And increasing moderate pressure prepares students well for their future life. Firstly, there is no doubt that tension likely comes from the high academic performance which they have to achieve. Secondly, if students have the press of study, which means that they want to get progress or solve study problems, it is likely to force them to gain excellent academic performance. For example, students spark their academic potential as calculate a complex math question, as well as bringing tension on that. Finally, students can adapt better in the future if they have similar experiences as mentioned above while growing up.

    However, I don’t think that it is an advantage for students to receive too much pressure. Not every student can achieve excellence. Some schools pursuit the passing and excellence rate of student and parents have high expectations for their children. Both situations push students tight and even frustrated. If some students fails to exam, they are possible to be fall into low inferiority and be bored with learning.

    In conclusion, I think it is beneficial for students to endure appropriate tension, namely, everything do not excessively.

    June 2, 2020 at 11:47 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    2. Many sentences don’t make sense.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.