When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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  • Junjay
    University: Yangtze University
    Nationality: Chinese
    September 17, 2020 at 5:20 am

    When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

    When people work alone, he may feel that he is working more efficiently than he does in a team. However, this is not always the case. When it comes to toiling together, the scenes are observed anywhere that people do their assignment together and it is finished with high quality and high effectiveness than those who work alone. I do agree that students who work together will receive a better effectiveness.

    To start with, they would be more likely to learn from each other in the assignment and attain high effectiveness. As not everyone specializes in the same arena, there must be a difference in their expertise that can be used in different part of their task, while those who intentionally choose to do their things alone can only be dependent on himself. The effectiveness will be highly thought of, since mostly, those in a team is considering the whole assignment is a standing for then whole team, with the most combative instincts evoked. The interest will be aroused when they have tasks in common. An evident truth invariably comes about from bringing about the goal and then numerously disputable discussion, with which, one will in some sense, more intrigued with what kind of assignment he is undertaking with him fellow partners. Thirdly, those who are assigned to do their own work will know about positioning more. there has long been a cogent belief amid either in society or enterprises, that positioning is of unmistakable significance, for there are always different departments and different work one cannot do, be even he mighty in seeming every respect of assignments required. There to some extent, is a developing accumulation of knowledge one must never be able to boast of learning about.

    To summarize , those who do their assigned projects together are receiving far more than the utmost they could ever have pictured than those who toil alone seemingly having know everything. Together-working students do work more effectively than those alone.</div>

    September 19, 2020 at 8:30 pm

    Partial revision [many sentences are difficult to read]

    When people work alone, he [ incorrect pronoun ] may feel that he is working more efficiently than he does in a team. However, this is not always the case. (When it comes to toiling together, the scenes are observed anywhere that)[verbose  ] people do their assignment[ word form error ] together and it[ unclear pronoun ] is finished with high quality and high effectiveness than those who work alone[unclear  ] . [ lack of connection from the last sentence ] I do agree that students who work together will receive( a better effectiveness)[ unclear ] .

    To start with, they would be more likely to learn from each other in the assignment and attain high effectiveness. As not everyone specializes in the same arena, there must be a difference in their expertise that can be used in different part of their task, while those who intentionally choose to do their things alone can only be dependent on himself. The effectiveness will be highly thought of, since mostly, those in a team is considering the whole assignment is a standing for then whole team, with the most combative instincts evoked. The interest will be aroused when they have tasks in common. An evident truth invariably comes about from bringing about the goal and then numerously disputable discussion, with which, one will in some sense, more intrigued with what kind of assignment he is undertaking with him fellow partners. Thirdly, those who are assigned to do their own work will know about positioning more. there has long been a cogent belief amid either in society or enterprises, that positioning is of unmistakable significance, for there are always different departments and different work one cannot do, be even he mighty in seeming every respect of assignments required. There to some extent, is a developing accumulation of knowledge one must never be able to boast of learning about.

    To summarize , those who do their assigned projects together are receiving far more than the utmost they could ever have pictured than those who toil alone seemingly having know everything. Together-working students do work more effectively than those alone.

    September 19, 2020 at 8:37 pm

    Score: 55.8

    Issues:

    1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

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