The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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May 13, 2020 at 12:44 pm
The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The table compares the figure for travellers to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after its refurbishment and two charts illustrate the result of surveys about the extent of satisfaction of visitors during the same two durations.
According to the table, there have been 18,000 visitors in the later year more than that in the year before refurbishment. Seeing the charts, people who were satisfied with and very satisfied with the museum before accounted for total 45% while the percentage reached 75% after refurbishment with 40% and 35% respectively.
The percentage of visitors who were dissatisfied with the museum dropped dramatically from 40% to 15%. Also, those who were very dissatisfied with it made up only 5% afterwards compared to 10% before. At the same time, the proportion of visitors who didn’t respond to the surveys was stable at 5% during these periods.
Overall, the refurbishment of Ashdown Museum is a great success because it has attracted the increasing number of visitors and has improved the satisfaction amongst the visitors as well.
May 14, 2020 at 8:21 pmScore: ungraded
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May 15, 2020 at 12:40 pmThe table compares the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year both before and after its refurnishment. The charts, on the other hand, illustrate the survey results of visitors’ satisfaction during the same durations.
The number of visitors increased by 18,000 compared to the year before. Both groups who were satisfied with and very satisfied with the museum before accounted for 45%. On contrary, this figure reached 75% after refurbishment and the group of satisfied travelers peaked in the later year.
The proportion of visitors who were discontented with the museum, which ranked first the year before, experienced a dramatic drop from 40% to 15%. Also, those who were very dissatisfied with it made up only 5% afterward compared to 10% before. What’s more, about 5% visitors didn’t respond to these surveys during the period.
Overall, considering the booming visitors and the growing satisfaction, the refurbishment is a great success.
May 15, 2020 at 9:08 pmScore: 63.1
The table schematically compares the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year both before and after its refurnishment. The charts, on the other hand, illustrate the survey results of visitors’ satisfaction during the same durations.
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