There are two kinds of classes offered in the school: small class with fewer students

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    leeyuqing1
    University: xidian university
    Nationality: china
    June 10, 2019 at 4:50 am

    A few students are taking a class.

    Essay TOPIC: There are two kinds of classes offered in the school: small class with fewer students (professors may remember all students’ name), and big classes with more students. Which one do you prefer?

    Having a glimpse with nowadays education, schools attach greater importance to educating their students in order to make a competitive edge for students when they hunting jobs. +Some people claims that the small class with few students is better, because that processers could remember all students name and can build a positive study atmosphere. +However, my view is that big class with more students is an optimal option.

    To begin with, attending big class with more students is conducive to making friends and expanding student’s social network which is benefit for their future development. Obviously, students in the big class may have a plenty of group discussions and presentations, through this way, students could have a chance to connect with others and get to know someone who has the same hobby or same goal with them. Then after the class, they assist each other in study and life. For one thing when they meet difficulties, they will study together and encourage each other to overcome the obstacle. For another, they will feel less lonely, like go shopping and go traveling together which will make them relieve themselves. As a result, attending big class pace the way for students to expand their social network and get to know more friends.

    In addition, attending big class with more students contributes to the improvement of study efficiency which is beneficial for students to master knowledge and skills better. During the class, students exchange their ideas and share what they have learned from many aspects which enable students to get different sources of knowledge, supposing that in the small class with fewer students, they just discuss in a short time then the professor continuing teaching, which is boring and made some students lose the interest in study. What’s more, in the big class, students do some group corporation, they learn how to communicate with each other and how to express themselves better, through the period, they hone their communicative skills and teamwork. There is every reason to believe that study in big class with more students constitute a stepping stone for bigger achievements

    Form what has been discussed above, I draw a conclusion that it is more advisable for students to attend big class rather than attend small class with few students,

     

     

     
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    linqiu
    June 10, 2019 at 4:23 pm

    Score: 55.1

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    1. Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words;
    2. Shorten your essay to 320 words;
    3. Restrict each paragraph to 85 words.

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    Having a glimpse with nowadays education, schools attach greater importance to educating their students in order to make a competitive edge for students when they[Grammatical Error] hunting jobs. [Verbose]+[Conventions error]Some people claims[Grammatical Error] that the small class with few students is better,[punctuation error] because that processers could remember all students name and can build a positive study atmosphere. [Verbose]+[Conventions error]However, my view is that big class with more students is an optimal option.

    To begin with, attending [article error]big class with more students is conducive to making friends and expanding student’s social network[punctuation error] which is benefit [Grammatical Error]for their future development. [Verbose]Obviously, students in the big class may have a[Articl Error] plenty of group discussions and presentations, through this way, students could have a chance to connect with others and get to know someone who has the same hobby or same goal with them.[Verbose] Then after the class, they assist each other in study and life. For one thing[punctuation error] when they meet difficulties, they will study together and encourage each other to overcome the obstacle. For another, they will feel less lonely, like go shopping and go traveling together[punctuation error] which will make them relieve themselves. As a result, attending big[Repetition] class pace the way for students to expand their social network and get to know more friends.

    In addition, attending big class with more students contributes to the improvement of study efficiency [Punctuation error]which is beneficial for students to master knowledge and skills better. [Verbose]During the class, students exchange their ideas and share what they have learned from many aspects which enable students to get different sources of knowledge, supposing that in the small class with fewer students, they just [Problematic Adverb]discuss in a short time then the professor continuing teaching, which is boring and made some students lose the interest in study. [Verbose]What’s more, in the big class, students do some group corporation, they learn how to communicate with each other and how to express themselves better, through the period, they hone their communicative skills and teamwork. [Verbose]There is every reason to believe that study in big class with more students constitute a stepping stone for bigger achievements

    Form what has been discussed [Passive]above, I draw a conclusion [Redundant] that it is more advisable for students to attend big class rather than attend small class with few students,[Verbose/punctuation]

    Comment: There are more issues than those highlighted. Revise and resubmit your essay.

     
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    leeyuqing1
    University: xidian university
    Nationality: china
    June 11, 2019 at 2:03 pm

    Having a glimpse with nowadays education, schools attach greater importance to educating their student to make them do better in the future. Some people claim that the small class is better, because it can build a positive study atmosphere. However, my view is that big class with more students is an optimal option.

    To begin with, attending big classes with more students is conducive to expanding students’ social networks. Obviously, students in the big class may have plenty of group discussions. Through this way, students could have a chance to get to know someone who has the same hobbies or same goals with them. Then after classes, they assist each other in study and life. For one thing, when they meet difficulties in study, they will encourage each other to overcome obstacles and learn strengths from others to make up for their weakness. For another, they will get rid of loneliness, like going shopping or traveling together, which enables them to cope with daily pressure. As a result, taking big classes benefits students.

    In addition, attending big classes with more students contributes to mastering knowledge and skills. During classes, students exchange their ideas and share what they have learned from many aspects. In this case, students could get different sources of knowledge. But if they have taken small classes, they could have discussed for a short time, then the professor continuing teaching. Thus students will lose the interest of studying, which is detrimental to their study. What’s more, in the big class, students do some group corporation, communicate with each other. Through the period, they hone their communicative skills and teamwork. There is every reason to believe that studying in big classes with more students constitutes a stepping stone for bigger achievements.

    In a word, I think that it is more advisable for students to attend big class rather than do another.

     
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    linqiu
    June 11, 2019 at 2:26 pm

    Score: 69.2

    Suggestions for Improvement

    • Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words.

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    Having a glimpse with[wrong preposition] nowadays[wrong word] education, schools[Logical error] attach greater importance to educating their student to make them do better in the future. [Verbose] Some people claim that the small class is better, [Punctuation error]because it can build[wrong word] a positive study atmosphere. However, my view is that big class with more students is an optimal option.

    To begin with, attending big classes with more students is conducive to expanding students’ social networks. Obviously, students in the big class may have plenty of group discussions. Through this way, students could have a chance to get to know someone who has the same hobbies or[article error] same goals with[wrong preposition] them[Word form error]. Then after classes,[Word form error] they assist each other in study and life. For one thing, when they meet difficulties in study, they will encourage each other to overcome obstacles and learn strengths from others to make up for their weakness.[Verbose] For another, they will get rid of loneliness, like going shopping or traveling together, which enables them to cope with daily pressure. As a result, taking big classes benefits students.

    In addition, attending big classes with more students contributes to mastering knowledge and skills.[Verbose] During classes, students exchange their ideas and share what they have learned from many aspects. In this case, students could get different sources of knowledge. But if they have taken small classes, [Grammatical error/check grammar for subjunctive voice]they could have discussed for a short time, then the professor continuing teaching[Grammatical error]. Thus students will lose the interest of [wrong preposition]studying, which is detrimental to their study. What’s more, in the big class, students do some group corporation, [Coordinating word issue]communicate with each other. Through the period, they hone their communicative skills and teamwork. There is every reason to believe that studying in big classes with more students constitutes a stepping stone for bigger achievements.[Verbose]

    In a word, I think that it is more advisable for students to attend [article error]big[Repetition] class rather than do another.

    Comment: There are more problems than those highlighted. Please revise and resubmit your essay.

     
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    leeyuqing1
    University: xidian university
    Nationality: china
    June 11, 2019 at 3:12 pm

    Having a glimpse of current society, more and more people attach greater importance to education. Some people claim that the small class is better, because it can create a positive study atmosphere. However, my view is that big class with more students is an optimal option.

    To begin with, attending big classes with more students is conducive to expanding students’ social networks. Obviously, students in the big class may have plenty of group discussions. Through this way, students could have a chance to acquaint someone who has similar hobbies or goals. Therefore, it is possible that they keep touching and assist each other in study and life. For one thing, when they meet difficulties in study, they will encourage each other to overcome obstacles and learn strengths from others. For another, they will get rid of loneliness, like going shopping or traveling together, which enables them to cope with daily pressure. As a result, taking big classes benefits students.

    In addition, attending big classes contributes to mastering knowledge and skills. During classes, students exchange their ideas and share what they have learned from many aspects. In this case, students could get different sources of knowledge. But if they should take small classes, they would discuss for a short time, then the professor continuing talking. Thus students will lose interest in studying, which is detrimental to solidify knowledge. What’s more, in the big class, students do some group activities, communicate with each other. Through the period, they hone their communicative skills and teamwork, which constitutes a stepping stone to their future development.

    In a word, I think that it is more advisable for students to take large classes rather than do another.

     
    linqiu
    June 12, 2019 at 9:27 pm

    Score: 66.7

    Much better! I will get back to you with the final revision shortly.

    Lin Qiu

     
    linqiu
    June 13, 2019 at 12:59 am

    Having a glimpse of current society, more and more people attach greater importance to education. Some people claim that the small class is better, because it can create a positive study atmosphere. However, my view is that a big class with more students is an optimal option.

    To begin with, attending big classes with more students is conducive to expanding students’ social networks. Obviously, students in the big class may have plenty of group discussions. Through this way/method, students could have a chance to become acquainted with someone who has similar hobbies or goals. Therefore, it is possible that they will keep in touching and assist each other in study and life. For one thing, when they meet difficulties in study, they will encourage each other to overcome obstacles and learn about the strengths of from others/gain strength from others. For another, they will get rid of loneliness, when they go like going shopping or traveling together, which enables them to cope with daily pressure. As a result, taking big classes benefits students.

    In addition, attending big classes contributes to mastering knowledge and skills. During classes, students exchange their ideas and share what they have learned from many aspects. In this case, students could get different sources of knowledge. But if they should take took small classes, they would discuss topics/subjects for a short time, and then the professor would continue continuing talking. Thus students will lose interest in studying, which is detrimental to solidifying/assimilating knowledge. What’s more, in the big class, students do/are involved in some group activities, to communicate with each other. During this Through the period, they hone their communicative skills and teamwork, which constitutes a stepping stone to their future development.

    In a word, I think that it is more advisable for students to take large classes rather than small ones do another.

     
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