To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. 

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. GRE Writing Topics To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. 

  • dycc
    University: Xidian university
    Nationality: China
    January 23, 2020 at 3:27 am

    To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. 

    The speaker claims that major cities represent the cardinal characteristics of a society, I concede that the study of major cities would reveal numerous important features of a society, however, the author fails to consider the influence of territory area of a country and the different fields of characteristics that are concerned with most. It should be based on a case by case analysis.

    In the fields of economy, science and technology, the ideal places to learn about the important features of a society should be located to its major cities, either countries with quite large or small territory. Since major cities are usually blessed with complete fundamental infrastructure like convenient traffic and communication facilities, more and more people swarm here to get better opportunities, whether individually or collectively: students come for well-known universities to get better education and better chances of employment; companies and organizations come for recruiting outstanding employees or members and also major cities are more likely to be blessed with political and financial advantages. In New York, economical prosperity could be seen from a series of skyscrapers and businessman or businesswomen and vehicles crossing the streets with non-stop; in Silicon Valley one will be amazed by the science and technology advancement of the giant Internet companies. Therefore to study the characteristics of the hard power of a society, there is a must to research its major cities.

    When it comes to the fields of cultures and living, there is a sharp difference between countries with large territory and small territory. Since big countries lie across wide range of latitude and longitude, customs and ideology vary from places to places. The example of the Jiangsu province in China aptly illustrates it. Even within the same province and only separated by a river, people living in two small towns on the either side of the river do not understand the dialect that other uses; people live in the east of the province enjoy seafood while people live in the west seldom have fish on their dinning table. In such cases major cities no longer serve as a typical to the study of important characteristics of a society. In order to have a complete understanding of the cultural features and lifestyles, it is necessary to visit each places separately.

    Small countries, however, usually have cities and towns lying closely to each other geographically and are very likely to share analogous customs and cultures. Small countries in European, one of many examples, can sufficiently support my claim. Buildings with similar structures and decorations distribute uniformly from London the Paris; even the people in different countries understand each other’s languages. Thus major cities are proper places to visit to learn about a small countries’ features.

    In conclusion, decision should be made by a case-by-case analysis, and all the relevant factors must be taken into account.

     

    January 23, 2020 at 3:02 pm

    Score: 45.6

    Issues:

    1. More than 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Reduce the percentage to 20%-;
    2. Several paragraphs are lengthy. Restrict each to 90 words;
    3. More than 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    dycc
    University: Xidian university
    Nationality: China
    January 24, 2020 at 2:31 am

    The speaker claims that major cities represent the cardinal characteristics of a society. I concede that the study of major cities would reveal numerous important features of a society. However, the author fails to consider the influence of territory area of a country and the different fields of characteristics that are concerned with most. It should be based on a case-by-case analysis.

    In the fields of economy, science, and technology, the ideal places to learn about the important features of a society should be located to its major cities, either country with quite large or small territory. Since major cities are usually blessed with complete infrastructure like convenient traffic and communication facilities, more and more people swarm here to get better opportunities, whether individually or collectively: students come for well-known universities to get better education and better chances of employment; companies and organizations come for recruiting outstanding employees or members, and also major cities are more likely to have political and financial advantages over others. In New York, economic prosperity could be seen from rows of skyscrapers erecting, and businessmen or businesswomen and vehicles crossing the streets with non-stop; in Silicon Valley one will be amazed by the science and technology advancement of the giant Internet companies. Therefore, to study the characteristics of the hard power of a society, there is a must to do research on its major cities.

    When it comes to the fields of cultures and living, there is a sharp difference between countries with a large territory and countries with a small territory. Since big countries lie across a wide range of latitude and longitude, customs and ideology vary from places to places. The example of Jiangsu province in China aptly illustrates it. Even within the same province and only separated by a river, people living in two small towns on either side of the river do not understand the dialect that other uses; people live in the east of the province enjoy seafood while people live in the west seldom have fish on their dining table. In such cases, major cities no longer serve as a paragon to the study of essential characteristics of a society. To have a complete understanding of the cultural features and lifestyles, it is necessary to visit each place separately.

    Small countries, however, usually have cities and towns lying close to each other geographically and are very likely to share analogous customs and cultures. Small European countries, one of many examples, can sufficiently support my claim. Buildings with similar structures and decorations distribute uniformly from London to Paris; even the people in different countries understand each other’s languages. Thus major cities are proper places to visit to learn about small countries’ features.

    In conclusion, a case-by-case analysis is needed, and all the relevant factors must be taken into account.

    January 25, 2020 at 11:12 pm

    Score: 47.1

    Issues:

    1. Nearly 45% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Reduce the percentage to 15%-;
    2. Nearly 20% of the sentences are passive. Reduce it to 10%-;
    3. Several paragraphs are lengthy. Restrict each to 90 words.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    dycc
    University: Xidian university
    Nationality: China
    January 29, 2020 at 9:00 am

    The speaker claims that major cities represent the cardinal characteristics of a society.I concede that the study of major cities would reveal numerous important features of a society. However, the author fails to put two main factors into considerations. Firstly, the influence of territory is not to be neglected. Secondly, characteristics of certain fields to concern with.Thus, it should be based on a case-by-case analysis.

    In the field of economy, science, and technology, major city is an ideal place. Whether for countries with large or small territory, major cities are usually blessed with complete infrastructure, like convenient traffic and communication facilities. Therefore, more and more people swarm here to get better opportunities, whether individually or collectively. Students come for well-known universities to get better education and chances of employment. companies and organizations come for recruiting outstanding employees or members. Major cities are also more likely to have political and financial advantages over other cities, which people seek for. Take the major cities of USA as an example. Economic prosperity could be seen from the business in New York. What’s more, In Silicon Valley, one could find science and technology advancement by visiting giant companies there. Therefore, there is a must to study its major cities to learn about the characteristics of the hard power of a society.

    When it comes to the fields of cultures and living, there is a sharp difference. Since big countries lie across a wide range of latitude and longitude, customs and ideology vary greatly. The example of Jiangsu province in China aptly illustrates it. Merely separated by a river, people living on different sides of the river do not understand the dialect that other uses. People living in the east enjoy seafood, while people living in the west seldom have fish as dishes. In such cases, major cities no longer serve as a paragon to the study of essential characteristics of a society. Therefore, it is necessary to visit each place separately.

    On the other hand, small countries usually have cities and towns lying close to each other. Thus, they are very likely to share analogous customs and cultures. Small European countries, one of many examples, can sufficiently support my claim. Buildings with similar structures and decorations distribute from London to Paris. In addition, although with heterogeneous official languages, people from different countries understand each other’s speech. In this case, major cities are proper places to visit to learn about small countries’features.

    In conclusion, a case-by-case analysis is needed, and we should take all relevant factors into account.

    February 13, 2020 at 7:41 pm

    Score: 49.5

    Issues:

    1. Convert passive sentences into their active counterparts;
    2. Consecutive sentences start with the same word;
    3. Lengthy paragraphs. Keep each paragraph within 90 words.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.