Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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November 20, 2019 at 11:09 am
IELTS Task 2: Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, people earn more money than ever before with the development of economy, which allows them buy more than they need. Whether this phenomenon is attributed to advertisements has become controversial issue.My view is thot while advertising does play a central role in this result, other factors are not able to be overlooked
It is true that we can see variety of advertisements wherever we go in the consumer society, which may lead to overconsumption of citizens.This means that excessive exposure to these advertisements is likely to enable consumers to buy some goods which are recommended for some characteristics such as highly- affordable or strict standards. For example, people purchase new refrigerator known for its low-emission as well as cost-effective.As a consequence,they have to dispose of the former one which actually can be used.
On the other hand, it is vital for individuals to gain some information from advertising when they have no idea about this kind of goods.Once Consumers want to purchase some goods which they did not understand relevant details especially some cutting-edge devices, they will be in a dilemma .Conversely,by surfing advertisements,consumers are able compare the price, quality and even weight. As a result,they are more likely to gain admirable goods that satisfy their needs.
In addition, other factors are also responsible for overconsumption. First of all, citizens can earn higher salary in the prosperous world. The means that they have more disposable money to buy everything they want. Secondly,the rapid development of technology has led to the lower cost of production so that the goods are more affordable than before. Finally,individuals are not of environmentally conscious so that they are not willing to go green by lessening some unnecessary commodities.
In conclusion, while advertisements are certainly affect consumers, other considerations should be give more attention.
November 20, 2019 at 10:49 pmScore: 35.8
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- About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. You need to split/shorten them.
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November 21, 2019 at 12:40 amNowadays, people earn more money than ever before with the development of the economy, which allows them buy products more than they need. Whether advertisements are the primary cause of this phenomenon has become a controversial issue. While advertising does play a central role in this result, I believe that other factors are not able to be overlooked.
On the one hand, we can see a variety of advertisements wherever we go in the consumer society, which may lead to over-consumption of citizens. Excessive exposure to these advertisements is likely to enable consumers to buy some goods which they do not really need. For example, people purchase a new refrigerator known for its low-emission as well as cost-effective. As a consequence, they have to dispose of the former one which actually can be used.
On the other hand, it is vital for individuals to gain some information from advertising when they have no idea about this kind of goods. Once consumers want to buy some products which they did not understand relevant details, especially some cutting-edge devices, they will be in a dilemma. By comparison, consumers surfing advertisements are able to compare the thing’s price, quality, and even weight. As a result, they are more likely to gain admirable goods that meet their needs.
I believe that other factors are also responsible for excessive consumption. Firstly, citizens can earn higher salary than ever before, and therefore they have more disposable money to buy everything they want. In addition, the rapid development of technology has led to the lower cost of production so that the goods are more affordable than before. Hence, the higher salary of citizens and products’ lower price also result in over-consumption.
In conclusion, while advertisements can affect consumers, other considerations should be given more attention.
November 21, 2019 at 5:43 pmScore: 51.2
Problems:
- More than 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. You need to cut it down to 20%-.
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November 22, 2019 at 12:29 amPeople have different ideas about whether advertisements are the primary cause of the phenomenon that people buy more than they need. While advertising plays a central role in this result, I believe that other factors cannot be overlooked.
We can see varieties of advertisements wherever we go in the consumer society, which may lead to citizens’ over-consumption. Excessive exposure to these advertisements is likely to enable consumers to buy some goods which they do not need. For example, people buy a new refrigerator known for its low-emission and cost-effective. As a consequence, they have to deal with the former one although it is still useful.
However, individuals can gain some information from advertising when they have no idea about this kind of goods. Once consumers want to buy some cutting-edge devices which they do not know details, they will be in a dilemma. By comparison, consumers surfing advertisements can compare the thing’s price, quality, and even weight. Therefore, they are more likely to gain goods that meet their needs.
Other factors are also responsible for excessive consumption. First of all, citizens can earn a higher salary than ever before, and then they have more disposable money to buy goods they want. Furthermore, the rapid development of technology has led to a lower cost of production so goods are more affordable. As a result, the higher salary of citizens and products’ lower costs also result in over-consumption.
In conclusion, while advertisements can affect consumers, we should give more attention to other considerations.
January 3, 2020 at 2:27 amScore: 53.6
People have different ideas about whether advertisements are the primary cause of the phenomenon that people buy more than they need. [ wordy ]While advertising (plays a central role) [ wordy] in this result [incorrect word ], I believe that other factors cannot be overlooked.
We can see varieties of advertisements wherever we go in the [ article error ] consumer society, which may lead to citizens’ over-consumption [ unclear ]. [lack of a transitory word ]Excessive exposure to these advertisements is likely to enable consumers to buy some goods which/that they do not need. For example, people buy a new refrigerator known for its low-emission and cost-effective [ word form error ]. As a consequence, they have to deal with the former one [ unclear pronoun ] although it [ unclear pronoun ]is still useful.
However, individuals can gain some information from advertising when they have no idea about this kind of goods [wordy ]. Once consumers want to buy some cutting-edge devices which they do not know details, they will be in a dilemma. By comparison, consumers surfing advertisements can compare the thing’s [ form error ] price, quality, and even weight. Therefore, they are more likely to gain [incorrect word ] goods that meet their needs.
Other factors are also responsible for excessive consumption. First of all, citizens can earn a higher salary than ever before, and then they have more disposable money to buy [article error ]goods they want. Furthermore, the rapid development of technology has led to a lower cost of production [ punctuation error in relation to coordinating word ]so goods are more affordable. As a result, the higher salary of citizens and products’ lower costs [ use a conditional word here/would ]also result in over-consumption.
In conclusion, while advertisements can affect consumers, we should give more attention to other considerations.
