TOEFL TPO54 Integrated Writing
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October 17, 2019 at 2:16 pm
TOEFL TPO54 Integrated Writing
The author lists three possible solutions which can stop the increase of the salt level in the Salton Sea. But the professor believes that none of them can work.
Firstly, the author states that using desalination devices can remove the salt from the lake directly. However, the professor asserts that although these devices can evaporate the water and remind the salt, it has a health problem. Some of the salt can be toxic when being heat they can produce some harmful air. So these devices cannot be used.
Secondly, the author holds the view that adding ocean water by using pipelines and canals into the lake will dilute the salt level. But the professor disagrees with this method because of the pipelines and canals. The local government cannot build pipelines and canals in this place because they lack enough resources. And the nearest pipelines and canals are one hundred kilometers away. Therefore, this is not an effective method.
Finally, the author also thinks that building some walls to divide the lake into several sections and control the main section can solve this problem. But the professor says that the wall can only work for a short time. This area has many geological activities such as earthquakes which can destroy the wall. And if the wall is destroyed by the earthquake, the sections will be mixed up together and back up to before.
October 18, 2019 at 1:40 amScore: 73.1
The author lists three possible solutions which [incorrect pronoun ] can stop the increase of the salt level in the Salton Sea. But [coordinating word error/punctuation ] the professor believes that none of them can[ inappropriate conditional word ] work.
Firstly, the author states that using desalination devices can remove the salt from the lake directly. However, the professor asserts that although these devices can evaporate the water and remind[ ? ] the salt, it [ unclear pronoun ] has a health problem. Some of the salt can be toxic when being heat[grammatical error ] they[ incorrect prounoun] can produce some harmful air. So[ incorrect coordinating word] these devices cannot be used.
Secondly, the author holds the view [ redundant/holds ] that adding ocean water by using pipelines and canals into the lake will dilute the salt level[unclear sentence ] . But[ incorrect coordinating word/You made many mistakes using the coordinating word, so search how to use coordinating words that connect sentences/clauses ] the professor disagrees with this method because of the pipelines and canals[ unclear ] . [ lack of connecting word ] The local government cannot build pipelines and canals in this place because they[ incorrect pronoun ] lack enough resources. And [ coordinating word error ] the nearest pipelines and canals are one hundred kilometers away. Therefore, this[ unclear pronoun ] is not an effective method.
Finally, the author also thinks that building some walls to divide the lake into several sections and control[grammatical error ] the main section can solve this problem. But[ coordinating word error ] he professor says that the wall can only work for a short time.[ lack of connecting word ] This area has many geological activities such as earthquakes which[ wrong pronoun ] can destroy the wall. And[ coordinating word error ] if the wall is destroyed by the earthquake, the sections will be mixed up together and back up to before[ grammatical error ] .
