TPO1 Integrated Writing
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February 22, 2022 at 6:00 am
TPO1 Integrated Writing
With the prevalence of quality-oriented education, sports and social activities seem increasingly indispensable to equip undergraduates with adept interpersonal skills and preparations for integrating into the society. While some may assert that students should merely concentrate on their academic studies, I convince that sports and social activities are of equal significance as classes and libraries and should receive equal finical support.
Even though Grade Point Average becomes primary criteria for some job hunting, sports and social activities can play important roles in internship applications. In America, students possessing social contributions and leadership, which are emphasized even in college entrance examinations, tend to be favored by interviewers. In addition, perfect performance in marathon competitions can enrich resumes when seeking jobs in Japan. Thus, sports and social activities are worth equal appropriations due to their essentiality in interviews.
Aside from being the possible stepping stone to well-paid jobs, regular sports and social activities boost academic studies to a great extend. Because sports activities serve as an effective method to manage time, combat overwhelming academic stress and induce better sleep, students are impelled to schedule personal study time, concentrate on lectures, memorize knowledge actively and achieve higher productivity. Besides, college students rich in social experiences, for instance provided with United Nation Volunteers certification, are generally recognized for it verifies student’s comprehensive capabilities, from which can deduce academic excellence. Therefore, I would argue sports and social activities deserve equal financial supports considering their promotion in study.
Furthermore, sports and social activities guarantee physical and metal health and help expand the circle of friends. Whenever you participate in sports or social activities, hormones are released accelerated and circulate freely, which will spirit students up and ensure healthy state in both physical conditions and social life. I cannot foresee how can the students’ health be maintained if sports and social activities fail to receive ample funds.
Consequently, the merits for job interviewing, strong supports for academic study and great adjustments to the personal health are all compelling justifications for the equal financial supports sports and social activities should receive.
February 22, 2022 at 3:52 pmFix issues suggested on screenshot reviews.
February 23, 2022 at 2:57 pmAs comprehensive qualities are increasingly taken seriously, sports and social activities become indispensable to equip undergraduates with adept soft skills and preparations for integration into society. I am firmly convinced they should receive equal finical support with academic studies.
Even though Grade Point Average becomes primary criteria for job hunting, sports and social activities can play vital roles in internship applications. In America, great social contributions and leadership are even emphasized in college entrance examinations. Students with these qualities tend to impress interviewers. In addition, perfect performance in marathon competitions can enrich resumes when seeking jobs in Japan. Thus, sports and social activities are worth equal appropriations due to their essentiality in interviews.
Aside from being the possible stepping stone to well-paid jobs, regular sports and social activities boost academic studies to a great extent. Because sports activities serve as an effective method to manage time, combat overwhelming academic stress and induce better sleep, students strive to schedule personal study time, concentrate on lectures, memorize knowledge actively and achieve higher productivity. Besides, college students rich in social experiences, for example, possessing the United Nation Volunteers certification, are generally recognized for it verifies student’s comprehensive capabilities, from which can deduce academic excellence. Therefore, sports and social activities deserve equal financial support considering academic promotion.
Furthermore, sports and social activities guarantee physical and mental health and help expand the circle of friends. Hormones are released accelerated and a sense of achievement and belonging are harvested in sports or social activities participation. Stimulus will spirit students up and ensure state in both physical conditions and social life. For this reason sufficient funds for sports and social enable to maintain students average health.
Consequently, the merits for job interviewing, strong support for academic study and great adjustments to health are all compelling justifications for the equal financial support for sports and social activities.
(The ending is suggested to revise, but some books recommend it and I fail to simplify it…)
February 24, 2022 at 3:42 pmAs[ Since ] (comprehensive qualities)[ unclear ] are increasingly taken seriously[who took them seriously? ] , (sports and social activities become indispensable to equip undergraduates)[ Are you sure? factual error ] with[ unclear preposition ] adept soft skills and preparations for integration into society[ unclear ] . I am firmly convinced they[ unclear pronoun? Can be either activities or undergraduates ] should receive equal finical support with[ wrong preposition ] academic studies.Even though Grade Point Average becomes primary criteria for job hunting, sports and social activities can play vital roles in internship applications. In America, great social contributions and leadership are even emphasized in college entrance examinations. Students with these qualities tend to impress interviewers. In addition, perfect performance in marathon competitions can enrich resumes when seeking jobs in Japan. Thus, sports and social activities are worth equal appropriations due to their essentiality in interviews.
Aside from being the possible stepping stone to well-paid jobs, regular sports and social activities boost academic studies to a great extent. Because sports activities serve as an effective method to manage time, combat overwhelming academic stress and induce better sleep, students strive to schedule personal study time, concentrate on lectures, memorize knowledge actively and achieve higher productivity. Besides, college students rich in social experiences, for example, possessing the United Nation Volunteers certification, are generally recognized for it verifies student’s comprehensive capabilities, from which can deduce academic excellence. Therefore, sports and social activities deserve equal financial support considering academic promotion.
Furthermore, sports and social activities guarantee physical and mental health and help expand the circle of friends. Hormones are released accelerated and a sense of achievement and belonging are harvested in sports or social activities participation. Stimulus will spirit students up and ensure state in both physical conditions and social life. For this reason sufficient funds for sports and social enable to maintain students average health.
Consequently, the merits for job interviewing, strong support for academic study and great adjustments to health are all compelling justifications for the equal financial support for sports and social activities.
February 24, 2022 at 3:46 pmPartial revision.
