Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
-
December 30, 2019 at 3:46 pm
IELTS Task 2: Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Recently,with the development of democrafic increasing,More and more students tend to choose different majors.In my opinion,Universities ought to accept more male students in science as well as accept more female students in arts.
As far as I know,a majority od male students would show a remarkable talent at a young age. for example,they count numbers quickly and also express a intense interest in chemical compounds and space. in childhood.Therefore,Accepting more male students in science class cam enable them to get a desirable score in the field which they are familiar with.At the same time,As female students frequently show a interest in art, they are more likely to read history ,poems and paint pictures.so the school ought to accept more male students in science and female students in art as my opinion.Consequently,By developing their interest in different and suitable class,They can achieve a higher score and gain a better understanding.
In conclusion,The campus are supposed to accept more male students in science in order to its future development as well as the Females.
December 30, 2019 at 4:31 pmScore: Ungraded
Issues:
- More than 30% of the sentences contain passive voice; use their active counterparts.
- 100% of the sentences exceed 20 words; reduce it to 20% or less.
I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.
December 31, 2019 at 4:27 amRecently, the school are expected to accept quivalent male and female students in every subject. In my opinion, campus should pay attention to accept more male students in science class as well as accepting more female students in art class.
As far as know, a majority of male students would show a remarkable talent at a young age rather than female students. For example, they can have a good command of using math skills and asking questions to their parents about universe . Furthermore, requiring a large amount of knowledge from the science books as additional resource can enable them to get a desirable score in science. As a result, Achieving a high score can build up their confidence. At the same time, After female students obviously show a interest in art, they are more likely to read history books, poems and recite them. The assignment to gain a better understanding and recite is pretty hard for male students to accomplish. Consequently, In order to develop their interest in different and suitable class, More male students are expected in science class, which is the same as female students.
In conclusion, the campus should not accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. More male students in science class and more female students in art class would be the gorgeous option for its future development.
January 2, 2020 at 2:18 amScore: Ungraded
Issues:
- About 20% of the sentences are passive. You need to convert them into their active counterparts;
- More than 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. You need to reduce the percentage to 15% or less.
I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.
Sentence length: 54.5% of the sentences contain more than 20 words, which is more than the recommended maximum of 25%. Try to shorten the sentences.
January 16, 2020 at 10:14 amRecently, the school is expected to accept equivalent male and female students in every subject. In my opinion, the campus should pay attention to acquire more male students in science class as well as needing more female students in the art class.
As far as know, a majority of male students would show a remarkable talent at a young age rather than female students. For example, they can have a good command of using math skills and asking questions to their parents about the universe. Furthermore, requiring a large amount of knowledge from science books as an additional way can enable them to get a desirable score in science. As a result, Achieving a high score can build up their confidence. At the same time, After female students show some interests in art, they are more likely to read history books, poems and recite them. The assignment to gain a better understanding and remembering is pretty hard for male students to accomplish. Consequently, In order to develop their interest in the different and suitable class, More male students are expected in science class, which is the same as female students.
In conclusion, the campus should not accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. More male students in science class and more female students in the art class would be the best option for its future development.
January 16, 2020 at 4:14 pmScore: 66.1
Issues:
- More than 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. You must shorten/split them.
- About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.
I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.
January 16, 2020 at 8:26 pmFinal Revision
Recently, the[ article error ] school[ noun form error] is [ tense error ] expected to accept equivalent male and female students in every subject. In my opinion, the campus should pay [spacing problem ] attention to {acquire} [word choice] [tense] more male students in science class as well as needing [remove word] more female students in the [article] art class.
As far as [insert pronoun] know, a majority of male students would [remove word] show a remarkable talent at a young age rather than female students. For example, they can [remove word] have a good command of using math skills and asking {questions to their parents} [rephrase] about the universe. Furthermore, requiring a large amount of knowledge from [spacing] science books as an additional way can enable them to get a desirable score in science. As a result, Achieving [capitalization] a high score can build up their confidence. At the same time, After [capitalization and word choice] female students [spacing] show some interests in art, they are more likely to read [and recite] history books, [punctuation error] poems {and recite them } [remove]. The assignment to gain a better understanding {and remembering} [remove] is pretty hard for male students to accomplish. Consequently, In [capitalization problem] order to develop their interest in the different and suitable class [noun form], More male students are expected in science class, which is the same as female students [rephrase for clarity].
In conclusion, the campus should not accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. More male students in science class and more female students in the art class would be the best option for its future development.
