Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female study in every subject. Do you agree or disagree?

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  • Hilbert123
    University: Remin University of China
    Nationality: CHINA
    April 11, 2021 at 2:16 pm

    Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female study in every subject. Do you agree or disagree?

    Some people argue that colleges should enroll the same number of man and woman students in every major. I partly disagree with this opinion because it sounds unrealistic to perform. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

    Recruiting equal number of different genders students has some benefits. First of all, it can make male and female students have the same opportunities to accept high-level education, which will benefit women to get a degree and find a good-salary job after they graduate. moreover, this action can let man and woman students compete on the same level ground and give a chance to female students who have good grades, also ease the prejudice about females who go to the university. To some extent, accepting equal number of boys and girls help promote females’ status in the long term.

    However, this regulation may limit the chance of woman students to have education in some subjects. For example, the art, a large part of high-grades students are women. That means if universities enroll students by grades rather than by equal number, maybe more girls will be accepted. Furthermore, this action cannot help females who are really in need. This is because many females are struggling with the gender bias that it is not necessary to educate women. Besides, the economic situation and heavy household burdens prevent them from receiving better knowledge training. If schools are willing to assist these women, they should make change in many aspects instead of enrolling the same amount of male and female freshmen simply.

    From my point of view, it is reasonable that universities make efforts to promote gender equality, but this measure makes no sense actually. Every student should be treated fairly and the education problem of female should be tackled in other effective ways.

    April 17, 2021 at 2:18 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 15% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
    2. Lots of grammatical errors and unclear sentences.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Hilbert123
    University: Remin University of China
    Nationality: CHINA
    April 17, 2021 at 1:10 pm

    Some people argue that colleges should enroll the same number of man and woman students in every major. I partly disagree with this opinion because it sounds unrealistic to perform. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

    Recruiting the same figure for different genders students has some benefits. First of all, it can allow male and female students have the same opportunities to accept high-level education, which will benefit women to get a degree and find a good-salary job after they graduate. Moreover, this action can give a chance to female students who have good grades and enable man and woman students compete on the same level ground for admission. To some extent, accepting the same number of boys and girls help promote females’ status in the long term.

    However, this regulation may limit the chance of woman students to have education in some subjects. For example, the art, a large part of high-score students are women. That means if universities enroll students by grades rather than by equal number, maybe more girls will be accepted. Furthermore, this action cannot help females who are really in need. In some areas and countries, many females still struggle with the gender bias that it is not necessary to educate women. Besides, the economic situation and heavy household burdens prevent them from receiving better knowledge training. If schools are willing to assist these women, they should make a difference in many aspects instead of enrolling the same amount of male and female freshmen simply.

    From my point of view, although it is reasonable for universities to make efforts to recruit more woman students, this measure may be counterproductive. Every student should be treated fairly while the problem of female education should be solved in other valid ways.

    April 17, 2021 at 1:15 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
    2. About 15% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
    3. Lots of grammatical errors.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Hilbert123
    University: Remin University of China
    Nationality: CHINA
    April 17, 2021 at 4:07 pm

    Some people argue that colleges should enroll the same number of man and woman students in every major. I partly disagree with this opinion because it sounds unrealistic to perform. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

    Recruiting the exact figure for different genders students has some benefits. First of all, it can allow male and female students to have the same opportunities to accept high-level education, which will benefit women to get a degree and find a good-salary job after they graduate. Moreover, this action can give a chance to female students who have good grades but cannot get the chance to go to universities for the limitation of numbers of students enrolled. To some extent, accepting the same number of boys and girls helps promote females’ status in the long term.

    On the other hand, this regulation may limit the chance of woman students to have an education in some subjects. For example, for art, a large part of high-score students are women. That means if universities enroll students by grades rather than by equal number, more girls will major in their favorite subjects. Furthermore, this action cannot help females who are in need. In some areas and countries. Some women even cannot get the chance to apply for a admission because of gender bias. Besides, the economic situation and heavy household burdens prevent them from receiving better knowledge training. If schools are willing to assist these women, institutes and universities should make a difference in many aspects instead of enrolling the same amount of male and female freshmen.

    From my point of view, although it is reasonable for universities to make efforts to recruit more woman students, this measure may be counterproductive. Every student should be treated equally, while society and colleges can provide female with better education in other valid ways.

    April 19, 2021 at 1:23 pm

    Some people argue that colleges should enroll the same number of man and woman students in every major. I partly disagree with this opinion because it sounds unrealistic to perform. My arguments for this point are listed as follows. [ cliches  ]

    Recruiting the exact figure [ number  ] for [  wrong preposition ] (different genders students) [rephrase   ] has some benefits. First of all, it [unclear pronoun   ] can allow [ allows  ]male and female students to have the same opportunities to [avoid using 2 ‘to’ in a sentence   ] accept high-level education, which will benefit women [word choice issue   ]to get a degree and find a good-salary [wrong word   ] job after they graduate. Moreover, this action [ wrong word  ] can give a chance to female students (who have good grades but cannot get the chance) [ grammatical error  ] to go to universities for the limitation of numbers of students enrolled [unclear/wordy   ]. To some extent, accepting the same number of boys and girls helps promote females’ status in the long term.

    On the other hand, this regulation may limit the chance of woman students to have an education in some subjects. For example, for art [ majors  ], a large part of high-score students are women. That means if universities enroll [ grammatical error  ] students by grades rather than by [ article error  ]equal number, more girls will [grammatical error   ]major in their favorite subjects. Furthermore, this action [ wrong word  ]cannot help females who are in need. In some areas and countries. [grammatical error   ] Some women even cannot get the chance to apply for a [ article error/wrong phrase  ]admission because of gender bias. Besides, the economic situation and heavy household burdens prevent them from receiving better (knowledge training) [unclear   ]. If schools are [ grammatical error  ] willing to assist these women, institutes and universities should [ grammatical error  ] make a difference in many aspects instead of enrolling the same amount of male and female freshmen [gender bias   ].

    From my point of view, although it is reasonable for universities to make efforts to recruit more woman students, this measure may be counterproductive. Every student should be treated equally, while society and colleges can provide female [wrong word   ] with [ article error  ]better education in other valid ways.

    Hilbert123
    University: Remin University of China
    Nationality: CHINA
    May 1, 2021 at 11:37 am

    Recruiting the exact number for girls has some benefits. First of all, this measure allows male and female students to have the same opportunities for high-level education, which will benefit woman students to get a degree and find a decent job after graduating. Moreover, giving a chance to female students to go to universities emphasize the importance of female education, which can rise the attention of the whole society. To some extent, accepting the same number of boys and girls helps promote females’ status in the long term.

    On the other hand, this regulation may limit the chance of woman students to have an education in some subjects. For example, for art majors, a large part of high-score students are women. That means if universities enrolled students by grades rather than their genders, more girls would major in their favorite subjects. Furthermore, this measure cannot help females who are in need. In some areas and countries, some women even cannot get the chance to apply for an admission because of gender bias. Besides, the economic situation and heavy household burdens prevent them from receiving better education. If schools were willing to assist these women, institutes and universities would make a difference in many aspects instead of enrolling the same amount of male and female freshmen.

    From my point of view, although it is reasonable for universities to make efforts to recruit more woman students, this measure may be counterproductive. Every student should be treated equally, while society and colleges can provide females with a better education in other valid ways.

    May 3, 2021 at 5:23 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
    2. Lots of grammatical errors and unclear sentences.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Hilbert123
    University: Remin University of China
    Nationality: CHINA
    May 4, 2021 at 3:09 pm

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    <span lang=”zh-CN”>Recruiting the exact number for girls has some benefits. First of all, this measure allows male and female students to have the same opportunities for high-level education</span><span lang=”en-US”>. It</span><span lang=”zh-CN”> will benefit woman </span><span lang=”en-US”>in getting a degree and finding</span><span lang=”zh-CN”> a decent job after graduating. Moreover, giving a chance to female students to go to universities emphasize the importance of female education, which can </span><span lang=”en-US”>attract</span><span lang=”zh-CN”> the attention of the whole society. To some extent, accepting the same number of boys and girls helps promote females’ status in the long term.</span>

    <span lang=”zh-CN”>On the other hand, this regulation may limit the chance of woman students to have an education in some subjects. For example, for art majors, a large part of high-score students are women. That means</span><span lang=”en-US”>,</span><span lang=”zh-CN”> if universities enrolled students by grades rather than their genders, more girls would major in their favorite subjects. Furthermore, this measure cannot help females who are in need. In some areas and countries, some women cannot get the chance to apply for  admission because of gender bias. Besides, the economic situation and heavy household burdens prevent them from receiving </span><span lang=”en-US”>a </span><span lang=”zh-CN”>better education. If schools were willing</span><span lang=”en-US”> to</span><span lang=”zh-CN”>  assist these women, institutes and universities would make a difference in many aspects instead of enrolling the same amount of male and female freshmen.</span>

    From my point of view, although it is reasonable for universities to make efforts to recruit more woman students, this measure may be counterproductive. Every student should be treated equally, while society and colleges can provide females with a better education in other valid ways.

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