We have developed a “throw-away” society and are filling the environment with many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. What measures should be taken to combat the problem?

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  • Zhang nb
    University: Tianjin university
    Nationality: China
    May 20, 2020 at 1:33 pm

    We have developed a “throw-away” society and are filling the environment with many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. What measures should be taken to combat the problem?

    With the thriving industries as well as the reducing expenditure of commodities, many of us are becoming aware less about the recycling of products but choose to throw away the garbage randomly without proper decomposition.

    Facing this seriously environmental problem which makes numerous waste and rubbish coming out in the planet, we have to adapt some effective measures to resolve the annoying problem. Though it’s not an easy job to be done, many experts in this area have given several proposals to fix the danger, of whose proposal I am going to recommend at here. Initially, the government should enact several regulations to compensate those citizens who are likely to make their products reuse or separate their daily wastage carefully. In which way, more people would be encouraged by this award to mimic those citizens’ actions which will virtually reduce the garbage population together with cultivating a fabulous personality in most civils.

    In addition, some plants ought to be constructed without functioning as a public good to decompose the garbage any more. What’s more, this proportion of expenditure is undoubtedly spent by the public via either tax or compulsory charge for each time. In this case, actions without recycling the commodity are gradually reduced because of the rigorous ordinance from the government. This provision is commonly taken by plenty Asiatic countries following some European countries. Under which regulation, effective outcome has been shown in those countries’ databases.

    In general, by taking both the prohibition on wastage and the encouragement on recycling, the amount of rubbish and mishandled wastage on our planet would be reduced.

    May 22, 2020 at 2:37 am

    Score: 41.5

    Issues:

    1. About 65% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 65% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Zhang nb
    University: Tianjin university
    Nationality: China
    May 22, 2020 at 3:56 am

    With the thriving industries as well as the reducing price of commodities, many of us are becoming aware less about the recycling of products. Still, many of us turn to throw away the garbage randomly without proper decomposition.

    Facing this environmental problem which makes countless waste and rubbish coming out on the planet, we have to adapt some effective measures to resolve the annoying issue. Though it’s not easy to accomplish the task, many experts in this area have given several suggestions to fix the crisis. This passage is going to recommend some of them in here. In the first place, the government should enact several regulations to compensate those citizens who are likely to make their products reuse. In which way, more people would be encouraged by this award to mimic those citizens’ actions. And it will lead to reduce the garbage population together with cultivating a fabulous personality in most civils.

    In addition, plants ought to be constructed without functioning as a public good to decompose the garbage any more. Further more, the public should offer this part expenditure via paying tax or compulsory charge. In this case, actions without recycling the commodity are gradually reduced because of the rigorous ordinance from the government. This provision is commonly taken by plenty Asian countries following some European countries. Under which regulation, striking outcome has been shown in those countries’ databases.

    In general, after taking actions on prohibiting waste and recycling goods, the amount of trash on our planet would be fewer.

    May 22, 2020 at 11:57 pm

    Score: 53.9

    Issues:

    1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Zhang nb
    University: Tianjin university
    Nationality: China
    May 24, 2020 at 12:02 pm

    With the thriving industries and the reducing price of commodities, many of us are becoming aware less about the recycling of products. Still, many of us turn to throw away the garbage without proper decomposition.

    Facing this environmental problem, which makes countless waste and rubbish coming out on the planet. We have to adapt some effective measures to resolve the annoying issue. Though it’s not easy to finish the task, many experts in this area have given several suggestions to fix the crisis. This passage is going to recommend some of them at here. In the beginning, the government should enact several regulations to compensate citizens who prefer to reuse their products. In which way, more people would be encouraged by this award to mimic those citizens’ actions. And it will lead to reducing the garbage population together with cultivating a fabulous personality in most civils.

    What’s more, do not construct plants to make it function as a public good to decompose the garbage any more. Besides, the public should offer this part expenditure via paying tax or compulsory charge. In this case, the number of commodity recycling increases due to the rigorous ordinance from the government. This provision is commonly taken by plenty of Asian countries following some European countries. Under which regulation, striking outcome has been shown in those countries’ databases. As I know, there is fewer garbage lying on the street in my hometown too.

    In general, after making policy of reward and punishment, trash quantity on our planet would be fewer. Beyond that, it’s more possible for citizens to develop this good personality and let their offspring inherit it.

    • This reply was modified 1 week, 6 days ago by AvatarZhang nb.
    May 26, 2020 at 2:31 pm

    Score: 58

    Issues:

    1. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    With the thriving industries and the reducing price of commodities, [ two clauses lack logical connection ]many of us are becoming aware less [word misplaced  ] about the recycling of products. Still, many of us [ repetition ] turn [ wrong word ]to throw away the [ article error ] garbage without proper decomposition.

    Facing this environmental problem, which makes countless waste and rubbish coming out on the planet [grammatical error  ]. We have to adapt [ wrong word ] some effective measures to resolve the annoying issue. Though it’s not easy to finish the task, many experts in this area have given several suggestions to fix [wrong word/how can you FIX a crisis?  ]the crisis. This passage [ shift of subject ] is going to recommend some of them [ unclear pronoun ] at here. In the beginning, the [ article error ]government should enact several regulations to compensate [  preposition error] citizens who prefer to reuse their products. In which way, more people would be encouraged by this award to mimic those citizens’ actions. And [punctuation error with coordinating words  ]it [ unclear pronoun ]will lead to reducing [word form error  ] the garbage population together with cultivating (a fabulous personality in most civils) [ unclear ].

    What’s more, do not construct plants to make it [unclear pronoun  ] function as a public good to decompose the garbage any more [spelling  ]. Besides, the public should offer (this part expenditure) [unclear  ] via paying tax or compulsory charge. In this case, the number of commodity recycling increases due to the rigorous ordinance from the government. This provision [wrong word  ]is commonly taken by plenty of Asian countries following some European countries. Under which regulation, striking outcome has been shown in those countries’ databases. As I know, there is fewer [ wrong word ] garbage lying on the street in my hometown too.

    In general, after (making policy of reward and punishment) [ unclear ], trash quantity on our planet would be fewer. Beyond that, it’s more possible for citizens to develop this good personality and let their offsprings inherit it [unclear pronoun  ].