Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. 

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[ Missing introduction/preparation  ]Children should spend their time playing games or sports if their parents (can not )[grammatical error   ]be[ use an active verb to replace BE verb  ] with them. [ choppy sentence  ]Children just need to study at school and[punctuation error   ] do sports or have fun at other times[ word form error  ].

Nowadays, children are under great[ /considerable  ] pressure[ sweeping statement  ]. [ missing transition  ]They need time to relax,[ punctuation error  ] to do something they are interested in, especially something unrelated to studying[ /studies/academics  ]. [ choppy sentence  ]Children will[ grammatical error  ] feel overwhelmed if they have[ grammatical error  ] to study most time in the day. [ coherence issue  ]Learning is significant[vague word   ][ punctuation error  ] but physical and mental health is more important[ vague word  ]. Hence, by spending time having fun, children can have[ vague verb  ] chances to exchange their minds and learn better.

Besides, playing games or sports are[  grammatical error ] also good ways for children to learn how to make friends or develop the ability to the organizational skills. For example, kids who are five years old are often kind of selfish[ sweeping statement  ]. [  coherence issue ]Parents are willing to offer everything to them[unclear pronoun   ] when they[ unclear pronou  ] are at home. However, when they[unclear pronoun   ] spend time with peers [ punctuation error  ]they need to share toys with others consciously or ask friends to teach them how to play sports. In this way, children can gain a lot of [ many  ]skills and [ improve them  ] make themselves better. More importantly, at the time when children grow up, it is the (organization, communication, and consideration)[ unclear  ] that prompt them to have a better life. [ punctuation error with coordinating conjunction  ]And such skills must be mastered[ unnecessary passive  ] at one’s young age.

Therefore, playing games or sports can help children not only[  to ] relax better but also help children to be[become   ] better people in the future.