why supply chain management? How the program help you achieve career goals

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  • muevida
    University: bryn mawr college
    Nationality: Chinese
    March 19, 2019 at 3:10 pm

    why have you chosen to study supply chain management? how does your participation in the Future Leader Program support you career goals?

    Throughout my experiences in R&D and product development in the cosmetic industry, I have gradually been exposed to manufacturers and suppliers and witnessed how SCM help the corporations in achieving competitive business advantages. After experiencing a couple of hockey-stick dilemmas with the warehouse and kitting failures with manufactories, I could tell that SCM plays across all flows of materials, information, and finance. I have developed my interest and wish to explore knowledge of the importance of SCM to a company. Besides, I am always seeking an appropriate balance between theoretical concepts and practical applications, and I believe SCM can provide a real platform to test out the strategy efficacy which leading to the success of a business.

    The Future Leader Program is organized by CSCMP including professionals who are experts in supply chain management. If I could participate in the program, I would be able to be exposed to the most updated trend and most accessible community of supply chain. As supply chain plays a crucial role in making the business success, I wish to study the real case and to see how these respected professionals make the prudent decision to make the corporation function, so I may apply to mine while experiencing the similar situations. Moreover, since CSCMP offer a platform for people from the same field, I wish to find potential internship opportunities since my degree is work compatible so that I may join the filed as fast as possible.

    March 19, 2019 at 3:37 pm

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    April 1, 2019 at 10:32 pm

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