With the increasing demand for energy such as oil and gas, people start to look for their resources in remote and untouched places.

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  • enya.
    University: Sias University
    Nationality: Chinese
    May 14, 2024 at 2:56 pm

    With the increasing demand for energy such as oil and gas, people start to look for their resources in remote and untouched places.
    Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

    As technology advances and the population grows exponentially, the demand for energy is also on the rise. Though exploiting the resources from remote and untouched places can cope with the demand to some extent, I think that the disadvantages of such practice far outweigh its advantages.

    Admittedly, entering the pristine places in search of resources helps to address the demand for energy. The earth is so vast and extensive that there are still a multitude of untapped areas, where abundant valuable materials may exist to meet people’s increasing demand. For instance, the environment undersea has been poorly understood by far and there may be countless resources and undiscovered species awaiting people’s exploitation. From a long-term perspective, however, it is unfeasible to seek resources solely by tapping into new areas, because everyone knows that fossil fuels on the earth are finite and we cannot rely on these non-renewable energies endlessly.

    Moreover, I think that extracting the untouched areas will give rise to more serious problems. For those remote and untapped places, people’s intrusion will disturb their fragile balance of ecosystem, which would lead to prolonged damage to the areas. The use of machinery may destroy the habitats of the indigenous species, causing ecological imbalance. Furthermore, during the process of exploitation, any accident will fatally damage the local environment despite the preventative measures. For example, oil drilling in the oceanic regions may carry the risk of oil spilling, which can have devastating effects on marine life, resulting in the loss of thousands of fish. Unfortunately, the damage to the affected area is irreversible.

    In conclusion, invading these untouched areas is never a viable approach to resolving the pressing problem of energy although it may make more resources available to mankind.

    May 14, 2024 at 9:27 pm

    As technology advances and the population grows exponentially, the demand for energy is also on the rise. Though exploiting the resources from remote and untouched places can cope with the demand to some extent, I think that the disadvantages of such practice[s  ] far outweigh its[ their ] advantages.

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    Moreover, I think that extracting the untouched areas will[conditional writing: can also  ] give rise to more serious problems. For [ /In ] those remote and untapped places, people’s intrusion will disturb their[ the ] fragile balance of[ the ] ecosystem, which would lead to prolonged damage[s  ] to the areas. The use of machinery may destroy the habitats of the indigenous species, causing ecological imbalance. Furthermore, during the process of exploitation, any accident will[ could ] fatally damage the local environment despite the preventative measures. For example, oil drilling in the oceanic regions may carry the risk of oil spilling[spills  ] , which can have devastating effects on marine life, resulting in the loss of thousands of fish. Unfortunately, the damage to the affected area is irreversible.

    In conclusion, invading these untouched areas is never a viable approach to resolving the pressing problem of energy[ , ] although it may make more resources available to mankind.

    May 14, 2024 at 9:42 pm

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