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  • September 23, 2021 at 2:42 pm

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    September 23, 2021 at 2:42 pm

    The speaker argue (verb form error) that the (article error) dispelling the illusion that people living now are notably different from the previous generation is the main benefit of the study of (studying) history, which I cannot agree with completely. In my view, there are many other benefits which (pronoun errorr) can be more useful than merely dispelling the illusion.

    Admittedly, there are many similarities between people living nowadays and people living in earlier times. The very nature of human would never change. For example, people used to consider food and safety as the most important factor in life and at present the basic need for both food and safety do not significantly change. Many poor people in Africa still struggle to feed themselves and protect their families from the danger. Thus studying history can help people know more about the previous generation and by contrast we can understand the similarity between different generations.

    However, by studying history people can not only know the basic information of the past life, but also can learn experience form various historic events, as many historic events are well recorded and provide excellent evidence for people to study. For example, after the Second World War, many people attribute the fascism to the cause of the terrible war which cause extreme damage on residents almost all over the world. While also some historians blame the economic crisis in many capitalist countries for the reason starting the war. Though there may be many different explanation for the war, people can learn many lessons from it and thus prevent it in the future.

    In sum, the speaker’s assertion that the main benefit of studying history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times cannot be convincing to me, because I think the lessons that we learn from studying history is more important and benefit us more.

    September 23, 2021 at 1:58 pm

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    September 23, 2021 at 1:58 pm

    It is not uncommon to see students playing on varied (word choice error) electronic consumables (word choice error) rather than applying (using) them to study, although sometimes these devices are intended to facilitate learning initially. Despite this, I strongly believe that instead of technology per se, inappropriate application ways (simplify) and some students’ less (lack of) self-discipline are the real factors distracting students from learning.

    Innovations are always powerful tools beneficial for people to learn and think in intellectual history: the adventure of papers largely helps people write, think, and record knowledge. Therefore, it is more convenient to learn by books instead of by records on stones current technology. The internet helps teachers collect information, prepare curriculum and make powerpoints, which can highly improve the breadth and vividness of a course. Likely, students can search for information and discuss with others online by using electronics like smartphones and tablets. All these characteristics of current high-tech products can equip students with irreplaceable tools and therefore help them focus on real learning, except for some potential pitfalls of technology: inappropriate use and lack of self-discipline of users.

    Improper ways of using technology can more or less harm learning. A vivid example is that some teachers overly rely on the boring use of powerpoints by, for instance, reading content monotonously regardless of interactions with students within the classroom, which is indeed detrimental to the process of knowledge incorporation and comprehension of students. Another cause of bad use of technology is that some students lack enough self-discipline to adhere to study, especially when some intelligent devices like smartphones are in their hands, resulting in these devices becoming entertainment tools and thus having an adverse bearing on learning.

    However, from the analysis above, we by no means can attribute some distractions to technology per se, because, after all, we are masters of these new technological gadgets, and condemnations of technology are buck-passing and ultimately useless. Instead, the crux of the matter lies in how to improve our self-discipline and optimize ways that technology is used to make it contribute to learning.

    September 23, 2021 at 1:54 pm

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    September 23, 2021 at 1:53 pm

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    September 23, 2021 at 1:52 pm

    To enjoy the (article error) art or to enjoy (delete) a workout, this is a question (rephrase). With limited budgets, governments have to choose between sponsoring the arts and funding extraordinary athletes. From my perspective, despite the potential positive influence of the arts, much more public spending is in desperate need (simplify) when it comes to the digital era (funding for the arts or sports? unclear).

     

    As it is known to all, No one can deny that the arts could never be replaced by any other kind of human invention.  All across the history, artists such as Pablo Picasso and Galileo make great contributions to the education of enriching people’s souls by their paintings and so on. However, we have to admit, more public money donated to art museums and artists don’t necessarily help to make masterpieces. On the contrary, through investing more money in supporting athletics, we can achieve much greater success.

     

    First, more money spent on athletics can boost the participation of sports events among the public. Compared to investment on arts, regardless of the precious works and splendid museums, young people are more likely to be attracted by exciting sports events and excellent players. Every time after watching a football match in the local sport studio, I will organize a match with my friends and classmates imagining to perform just like the players I love. While after visiting the local art museum, despite being admirable to the masterpieces by ancient artists, I do not want to be pick up my brush or sit in front of a piano. Therefore the money spend on athletics is much more efficient.

     

    Moreover, bodybuilding is actually a part of art in a broad sense. In the time of Roman and Athens, great artists and philosophers are both talented in art and sport. We can learn this obvious fact from their works. The great sculptures at that time are mostly about muscling generals, which shows that the beauty of mankind, by exercising and doing sports, is enjoyed from an artistic perspective.

     

    For those reasons, we can conclude that supporting athletics is more important compared to supporting art.

    September 23, 2021 at 3:17 am

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    September 23, 2021 at 3:14 am

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    September 23, 2021 at 3:02 am

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    September 22, 2021 at 2:06 pm

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    September 22, 2021 at 2:06 pm

    The existence of public libraries occurs be queried to under the modern technology shocks. (unclear what this means)

    Personally speaking, I would support to retain (verb form error) the (delete) public libraries and the reasons would be given in the following content (delete). There are several key reasons to expound (support) the indispensable role of public libraries.

     

    First, the public libraries undertake the educational function. The wide range and types of materials could provide various ways and experience for different kinds of people, especially people without professional skills, broad horizon and high adaptability, such as the children, the elders and the disabled. Due to age or era limitation and living pressure, these persons might lack the chance and consciousness to gain knowledge as leisure. In this sense, the public libraries could save their preparatory work and low down their threshold. Then, these people living without computer technology would obtain proportionable chance in the society. Eventually, knowledge could be expanded to most people.

     

    Second, the public libraries also provide the archived function. Under the electronic storage and the threat of power failure, the paper and other kinds of physical carriers remain irreplaceable nowadays. The old versions of publications and past periodicals within several years could be stored and borrowed before moved to the archives and other institutions.

     

    Third, public libraries could offer the social function for community. Irregularly, public events would be hold in public libraries. For example, the art exhibitions, reading clubs and professional seminars could be registered beforehand or open to public. Through these activities, the public libraries could allow residents’ communication and furthermore facilitate the community interaction.

     

    Therefore, the necessity of public libraries could be indicated through three functional aspects. Even though the computer technology continuously progresses, the public libraries persist their existence based on its unique social role and contribution.

    September 22, 2021 at 2:03 pm

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    September 22, 2021 at 2:03 pm

    One interesting phenomenon nowadays is that differences between nations are diminishing since people from different countries can buy products manufactured in any parts (part) of the world. In my opinion, this is a positive trend.

     

    To begin with, what makes communication with a variety of (delete) people from different countries easier is similarities among them, like eaten (delete) food, preferred (delete) clothing, and daily equipment (routine). For example, a man from Italy (an Italian) can use a computer easily and conveniently in China as laptops have the same constructions and functions (design in the two countries). Additionally, there will be less misunderstanding between governments and individuals from different countries when their citizens share the same shopping habits and consume similar goods. Therefore, the whole world is sure to (will) be more peaceful.

     

    However, a country with a distinguished and stylish culture cannot (will not) lose its unique and independent features as people use the same products, because cultural habits and lifestyles cannot be simply changed. For example, a Japanese woman will change back to a traditional outfit after an international meeting in which she has to put on formal western suits (dress). Furthermore, a Chinese student is not willing to (will not) forget one’s (their) mother language despite consuming American fast food, because the (delete) language is deeply instilled in his mind (delete), and it is the (delete) language that (delete) makes a country’s culture and political status independent.

     

    In conclusion, people of different nationalities could communicate with each other easily and reduce misunderstandings when more similarities are shared. Moreover, a nation will not lose its own culture even though its citizens may purchase and use the same products.

    September 22, 2021 at 1:57 pm

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