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theenergy consumption in Australianhousehold[ households ]in[on ] average,and[ as well as ] the amount of greenhouse gas emissionsrelieved[released ] due to thedifferent [ energy ] usage[s ]of the energy.In the first chart, which represents
thehousehold energy use in Australia, it [ unclear pronoun ] is heating (42%) that [unclear pronoun ] ranks first,following[followed ] by water heating, which accounts for 30% of the whole use. [ missing transitory word ] Energy wasted on other appliances makes up 15% of the total supply, (which is almost one second of that in heating water, though the figure is still twofold as much as it of refrigeration.) [unclear ] Finally, cooling and lighting, 2% and 4% [ , ] respectively, can be regarded asconsumingthe least amount of energy [ consumption ] .In the second chart that shows
thegreenhouse gas emissions coming fromtheenergy use [ unclear sentence ] , (water heating and other appliances) [ not parallelled ] present a similar pattern of makeup, accounting for 32% and 28%, while heating and refrigeration are almost identical in the volume of the greenhouse gas as well, with a respective proportion of 15% and 14%. [split the sentence into two sentences ] Because oftheless energy they consume, cooling (3%) and lightning (8%) also boast much less greenhouse gas emissions.Overall,
it can be concluded fromthe comparison between the two charts [ concludes ] that through [spelling ] heating consume [ grammatical error ] a large amount of energy, it contributes less to the emissions of greenhouse gas. Meanwhile, most usage [ word choice error ] witness that emissions aregreatly[ closely] associated with the quantity of energy consumption.Please fix the problems shown in the screenshots.
The first line chart depicts the number of families having three kinds of machines[ UNCLEAR ] measured by percentages across
the 9-year span[ the nine years ] from 1820 to 2019,[ . The ]theotherline graph compares 99-year data (in families of how much time housework took measured by hours in a family each week in a country.)[ confusing ]Looking from an overall perspective,[Overall, ] it isreadilyclear that the ownership of three electrical appliances had an increasing trend over the[ a ] period of 1 century,[ ; ] whereas (the data of refrigerators)[ unclear ] experienced the most considerable jump. In addition, [ the ] time spent on housework (of a family nose-dived)[ unclear ]in[ during ] the same period.Out of the (possess of three kinds of machines)[ unclear ] , the figure of refrigerators was the lowest with 0% in 1920, where [ a ] dramatic increase of 100% occurred
in ituntil 1980, before the ownership had levelled out by 2019 with 100%. On the one hand, there was an (ascending of 70%)[ unclear ] in the figureof[ for ] vacuum cleaners from 30% to 100%, [punctuation error ] after which it stayed unchanged in [ /during ] the rest of the time; on the other hand, that of washing machines witnessed a comparably stable rise in general of nearly 25% except a slight drop for 10 years since 1960 from 70% to 65%.For the hours spent on housework per family, which plummeted to 20 hours from 50 hours smoothly until 1960, since which time it kept hover between 20 hours and 10 hours and finally hit the bottom of 10 hours in 2019.[ lengthy/grammatical errors ]
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