Advice from grandparents has no use to their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 50 years

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  • Joyce990718
    University: Shenzhen University
    Nationality: China
    September 1, 2020 at 3:00 pm

    Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advice from grandparents has no use to their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 50 years.

    My grandparents often surprised with rapid change of this world, so do I. It is plausible to take our grandparents’ advice as outdated in some extent. Looking back to my memory, however, my grandmother is the one who influenced me most. In my mind, her advice is valuable forever.

    To be honest, my grandmother cannot understanding all things I am doing now. She have no idea with what obstacles in these English test making me frustrating and she also cannot imagine nowadays I can use ipad to take notes instead of notebooks. However, these so-calling generation gap just represent something external. The internal value of her advice is always precious.

    Though we have developed technology and convenient living ways, our attitudes and value toward working and living not change along with technology. My grandmother told me to concentrate on my goals and don’t be distracted by others easily. How useful this advice be for me as a senior student. I feel lost these days since coronavirus happened. My friends who want to apply for a foreign university for further studying like me changed their original plans. Some prepare for school recruitment or decide to gap. I was struggling with what I should do. At this time, she told me to calm down and focus on what I want most. A man cannot server two masters, she said. Her advice and encouragement gave me so much strength. You see, the old principle is still useful.

    Moreover, unlike the assumption of this statement that grandparents’ advice become no use since they don’t change with time, my grandmother’s advice is changing too.  She didn’t go to her dreaming university in another city, placing her family first. Nevertheless, today she is so delighted that I have chance to go abroad. She think that will be an impressive experience for me.

    In my perspective, this statement is too absolute. If we feel lost or disappointed, just have a chat with your grandparents. That will be a good way to release your pressure and pick up our morale again.

    September 2, 2020 at 9:03 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. Always write complete sentences (some sentences are missing a subject or verb)
    2. Article errors
    3. Preposition errors
    4. Verb form errors

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    Joyce990718
    University: Shenzhen University
    Nationality: China
    September 3, 2020 at 1:41 am

    The past few years have seen the topic of old people advice rush into the forefront of news and other media. This phenomena can attributed to ascent of technology which change our way to live. What especially concerns us in this issue is whether we should give our grandparents suggestion a important position. To the extent of my observation, having weighed up both sides, I am inclined to believe that grandparents advice is valuable.

    In the first place, our grandparents accumulate much knowledge and experience in past years. Other people’s experience can be of help. Old people has wealth experience since they undergo many positive or negative events like depression or war. When we listen to an advice of some people with rich experience, we can learn a lot from them and their experiences can be enlightenment brightening our life. I remember in movie <<Spider Man>>, Peter Parker once lost his mind and do not know what to do with his special ability. He keep helping others but his own life become worse. At this time, his grandmother Jane told him that people need hero, especially need spider man. She said that spider man build a good example for teenagers. Peter Parker weeped and finally do his responsibility.

    In addition,another indispensable part of my consideration is that right values and attitudes toward life do not change along with world. Our grandparents usually communicate healthy values toward us. Therefore, that’s still useful and valuable. The old experienced poor ages advice their generations not to squander money. Also, some old teachers advice their grandchildren to study hard. All above can help us to avoid unnecessary detour.

    And of course, I do not intend to create the impression here that the old can always keep following social steps. Admittedly, our grandparents cannot understand burgeoning of many advanced theory or products. However, there is no escaping the fact that grandparents are making progress too. This statement assume that the old cannot change with the world, but a host of them love to go to the elderly university and try to use online shopping. Therefore, their viewpoints can change too.

    In the final analysis, I am still of the firm opinion that grandparents advice is useful. To sum up the given reasons above, we can safely reach the conclusion that listening to our grandparents is rather a wise decision since they have rich experience and enlighten us with a right core value.

     

    September 3, 2020 at 1:59 am

     

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 25% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. Almost all sentences are problematic; lots of grammatical errors. 

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    Joyce990718
    University: Shenzhen University
    Nationality: China
    September 3, 2020 at 2:37 am

    The past few years have seen the topic of old people’s advice rush into the forefront of news and other media. This phenomenon can be attributed to the ascent of technology, which changes our way to live. What especially concerns us in this issue is whether we should give our grandparents suggestion an important position. To the extent of my observation, having weighed both sides, I am inclined to believe that grandparents’ advice is valuable.

    In the first place, our grandparents accumulate much knowledge and experience in the past. Other people’s experiences can be of help. The old man usually have a wealth experience because they undergo many events. Listening to their advice, we can learn a lot. Their experiences can also be enlightenment brightening our life. I remember in the movie <<Spider Man>>, Peter Parker once lost his mind and did not know what to do with his special ability. He kept helping others but his own life became worse. At this time, his grandmother Jane told him that people need a hero, especially need spider man. She said that spider man is a symbol of justice. Hearing this, Peter finally decided to be a spider man again.

    Additionally,another indispensable part of my consideration is that right values toward life do not change along with the world. Our grandparents usually communicate healthy values toward us. Therefore, their advice still be useful and valuable. For example, the old experienced poverty often advice their generations not to squander money. Also, some old teachers advice their grandchildren to study hard. All these advice can help us to avoid unnecessary detour.

    And of course, I do not intend to create the impression here that the old can always keep following social changes. Admittedly, our grandparents cannot understand many advanced theories nowadays. However, we cannot denying that grandparents are making some progress. This statement assumes that the old cannot change with the world. In fact, a host of the old love to go to elderly universities and try to use online shopping platform. They are changing with the world too.

     In the final analysis, I am still of the firm opinion that grandparents’ advice is useful. To sum up the given reasons above, it is wise to listen to our grandparents’ advice. Because they have rich experiences and proper values.

    September 3, 2020 at 5:48 pm

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    Joyce990718
    University: Shenzhen University
    Nationality: China
    September 4, 2020 at 4:07 am

    Nowadays, the value of old people’s advice is a hot topic in social platform. This phenomena can attribute to the world without constancy. To the extent of my observation, I am inclined to believe that grandparents’ advice is valuable.

    At first place, old people have accumulated a wealth of knowledge and experience. Usually, people with rich experience are well qualified to offer suggestion. Just like we would like to read <<Poor Charlie’s Almanack>> before buying stocks and ask our experienced leaders for help at work. Our grandparents experienced many events that we only saw in books. Some of them had lived through the war, others had grown up in poverty. These rich life experiences give them wisdom, conservation and manner the young do not have. Hence, their warning or advice can enlighten our life. I still remember that in the movie “Spider-Man”, Peter was confused and lost by his superpowers. He spared no effort to help others, but his life got worse and worse. He didn’t know the meaning of Spider-Man, maybe he should just live his own life well. At this time his grandmother told him that people need a hero, especially Spider-Man. In her mind, Spider-Man is the incarnation of justice and the symbol of the city’s light. Peter was deeply moved, and then began to put on his Spider-Man uniform again.

     

    In addition, although the world is changing, the correct values and the morals we advocate have not changed. The advice that the elderly give us usually conveys the correct values. The elderly tell us to be honest and to be kind to others. These are all valuable in life. Maybe these suggestions sound too simple and empty, but great wisdom and useful principles are often the simplest. If you can’t even be honest and be polite, you won’t get the respect of others in your life, let alone make some big achievements.

    In my final analysis, I am still of the firm opinion that grandparents’ advice is useful. They have experienced what we haven’t, and face the unknown of the world with us. Their suggestions condensed time. That will be of great benefit to us.

    September 9, 2020 at 1:36 am

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    At first place, old people have accumulated a wealth of knowledge and experience. Usually, people with rich experience are well qualified to offer suggestion. Just like we would like to read <<Poor Charlie’s Almanack>> before buying stocks and ask our experienced leaders for help at work. Our grandparents experienced many events that we only saw in books. Some of them had lived through the war, others had grown up in poverty. These rich life experiences give them wisdom, conservation and manner the young do not have. Hence, their warning or advice can enlighten our life. I still remember that in the movie “Spider-Man”, Peter was confused and lost by his superpowers. He spared no effort to help others, but his life got worse and worse. He didn’t know the meaning of Spider-Man, maybe he should just live his own life well. At this time his grandmother told him that people need a hero, especially Spider-Man. In her mind, Spider-Man is the incarnation of justice and the symbol of the city’s light. Peter was deeply moved, and then began to put on his Spider-Man uniform again.

     

    In addition, although the world is changing, the correct values and the morals we advocate have not changed. The advice that the elderly give us usually conveys the correct values. The elderly tell us to be honest and to be kind to others. These are all valuable in life. Maybe these suggestions sound too simple and empty, but great wisdom and useful principles are often the simplest. If you can’t even be honest and be polite, you won’t get the respect of others in your life, let alone make some big achievements.

    In my final analysis, I am still of the firm opinion that grandparents’ advice is useful. They have experienced what we haven’t, and face the unknown of the world with us. Their suggestions condensed time. That will be of great benefit to us.

    September 9, 2020 at 1:39 am

    Partial revision.