After making a presentation in class, you want to evaluate it

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  • Christopher
    University: NK
    Nationality: China
    August 21, 2020 at 1:50 pm

    After making a presentation in class, you want to evaluate it. Which of the following do you think would be better for you?

    1. Watch the recording by yourself.

    2. Invite other attendees to discuss and give opinions.

     

    Everyone has experience of wanting a evaluation after a presentation, and there are two ways to evaluate one’s presentation: Watching the recording by himself or inviting othere attenders to discuss and give opinions. As far as I’m concerned, I’d like to invite other attenders to discuss and give opinion.

     

    Firstly, students could get a lot of suggestion. If others attenders come to discuss ones’ presentation, they could discuss with each other and come up with abundant suggestion which could benefit presenters a lot. However, if a students just evaluate by himself, it’s impossible to get so much suggestion. Take my brother as an example, after my brother made a presentation about America Civil War, he asked other attenders to evaluate the presentation. Those attenders came togother and began to discussed incessantly. They pointed out that the presentation lack details to describe the lost in war and missed improtant event like situation of an important war. What they said made my brother realize his deficiencies, and he really get an improvement in his latter presentation. However, if my brother choosed to watch recording by himself, never could he get so mcuh suggestion.

     

    Secondly, students could gain comprehensive opinions. Every attenders has different thought of a presentation, so attenders could provide advice from different angle. In this case, students could get overall suggestion. However, students would undoubtedly fail if he find his total problems by themsevles. For instance, I made an presentation in my art class and invited all of other attenders to advise me last semester. In that discussion, one attender said that my presentation lacked my own thought of modern art while another stated how loose my presentation was in logic, and I knew that I should improved my prensentation in both content and logical chain. Nonetheless, if I checked my presentation by myself, I’d never realize all problems in my presentation.

    Generally, it’s evident that inviting other attenders to discuss and give opinions definitely benefits students more. Firmly do I support the way to evaluate presentation by inviting other attenders to evaluate.

    August 24, 2020 at 11:55 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. Article errors
    2. Spelling errors
    3. Verb form errors
    4. Make your argument clear in the introduction – explain why you prefer one over the other.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Christopher
    University: NK
    Nationality: China
    August 24, 2020 at 3:09 pm

    Many people have experiences of making an evaluation for their presentation. Watching the recording by oneself is a choice for someone while others choose to invite other attenders to discuss and give opinions. As for me, inviting other attenders is a better choice.

     

    Firstly, others offer a lot of suggestion for the presentation. If other attenders come to discuss ones’ presentation, they would discuss with each other and come up with abundant suggestion which could benefit presenters a lot. However, if a students just evaluate by himself, he would check his presentation alone and get little suggestion. Take my brother as an example, after my brother made a presentation about America Civil War, he asked other attenders to evaluate the presentation. With exchanging opinions with each other, other attenders presented a mass of advice. They pointed out that the presentation lack details to describe the lost in war and missed improtant event like situation of an important war and so on. What they said made my brother realize his deficiencies, and really did he get an improvement in his latter presentation. However, if my brother choosed to watch recording by himself, never would he get so mcuh suggestion.

     

    Secondly, students could gain comprehensive opinions by this way. Every attenders has different thought of a presentation, thereby they always provide advice from different angle. In this case, students could get overall suggestion. However, one’s brain is limited and there are some areas that one’s thought could never reach by himself. For instance, last semester, I invited all of other attenders to advise me for a finished presentation about art. In that discussion, I was amazed by their opinions. Someone focused on lack of thought depth, someone stated how loose my presentation was in logic and others remainded me some details problem existing in my presentation. By their opinions, I cognized my presentation consist flaws in many aspects and found ways to solve it. Nonetheless, if I had checked my presentation by myself, I’d just focus on problems of details while ignoring other flaws.

    August 24, 2020 at 11:38 pm

    Score: 56

    Issues:

    1. In the first paragraph. Stay focused on you rather than others. Remove ‘ Many people have experiences of making an evaluation for their presentation. Watching the recording by oneself is a choice for someone while others choose to invite other attenders to discuss and give opinions.’
    2. Lots of grammatical/spelling errors. 
    3. Lengthy paragraph. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Christopher
    University: NK
    Nationality: China
    August 25, 2020 at 3:35 pm

    Evaluate a finished presentation is a good habit. For evaluaion, one way is to do it alone, which means watching the recording by oneself. In contrast, another way is to do it in group, which means inviting other attendees to discuss. As for me, inviting others to evaluate the presentation process more advantages.

     

    To begin with, others offer a lot of suggestions for the presentation. While other attendees discussing ones’ presentation, so many opinions are provided through the effort of each attendee. Whereas, if one evaluate his presentation alone, he would find few problems. Take my brother as an example. After my brother’s presentation about Americam Civil War, he asked other attendees to review it. By exchanging their opinions, those attendees indicated a mass of problems involving the presentation’s content, background and illustrations. That their opinions made my brother realize his deficiencies improved his latter presentations. But if my brother had choosen to watch the recording by himself, never would he get so many suggestions.

     

    Besides, students could gain comprehensive opinions by this way. Every attendee has his own thought, and they always provide advice from different angles. In this case, students could get all-sided suggestions. Nonetheless, one’s brain is limited. there are some areas that one’s thought could never reach by himself. For instance, I invited all of other attendees to advise me for a finished presentation about art last semester. In that discussion, I was amazed by their opinions. Their advice range from my logic chain to examples I used. Thanks for them, I cognized my presentation contained all kinds of flaws and eventually solved those problems. Nevertheless, if I had checked my presentation by myself, I’d only focus on problems of details while ignoring other flaws.

    August 25, 2020 at 3:43 pm

    After making a presentation in class, you want to evaluate it. Which of the following do you think would be better for you?

    1. Watch the recording by yourself.

    2. Invite other attendees to discuss and give opinions.

     

    Evaluate[ grammatical error ] a finished presentation is a good habit. For evaluaion[ spelling error/unclear ] , one way is to (do it)[unclear  ] alone, which means watching the recording by oneself. (In contrast, another way)[repetition  ] is to (do it )[ repetition/unclear ] in group, which means inviting other attendees to discuss[ incomplete ] . As for me, inviting others to evaluate the presentation process more advantages[ grammatical error ] .

    To begin with, others offer a lot of suggestions for the presentation. While other attendees discussing ones’ presentation, so many opinions are provided through the effort of each attendee. Whereas, if one evaluate his presentation alone, he would find few problems. Take my brother as an example. After my brother’s presentation about Americam Civil War, he asked other attendees to review it. By exchanging their opinions, those attendees indicated a mass of problems involving the presentation’s content, background and illustrations. That their opinions made my brother realize his deficiencies improved his latter presentations. But if my brother had choosen to watch the recording by himself, never would he get so many suggestions.

    Besides, students could gain comprehensive opinions by this way. Every attendee has his own thought, and they always provide advice from different angles. In this case, students could get all-sided suggestions. Nonetheless, one’s brain is limited. there are some areas that one’s thought could never reach by himself. For instance, I invited all of other attendees to advise me for a finished presentation about art last semester. In that discussion, I was amazed by their opinions. Their advice range from my logic chain to examples I used. Thanks for them, I cognized my presentation contained all kinds of flaws and eventually solved those problems. Nevertheless, if I had checked my presentation by myself, I’d only focus on problems of details while ignoring other flaws.

    August 25, 2020 at 3:46 pm

    I couldn’t complete the revision since all sentences are problematic.

    Christopher
    University: NK
    Nationality: China
    August 27, 2020 at 2:30 am

     

    Evaluating a finished presentation is a good habit. About the method of how to evaluate a presentation, one way is to make an evaluation alone, which means watching the recording by oneself. Another way is to evaluate a presentation in group, which means inviting other attendees to discuss the presentation. As for me, I’d like to invite others to evaluate my presentation.

     

    To begin with, students could gain comprehensive opinions by this way. Every attendee has his own thought, and they would provide advice from different angles. In this case, students could get all-sided suggestions. Nonetheless, one’s brain is limited. there are some areas that one’s thought could never reach by himself. For instance, I invited all of other attendees to advise me for a finished presentation about art last semester. In that discussion, that they gave me abundant advice, range from my logic chain to examples I used, benefited me a lot. Thanks for them, I cognized my presentation contained all kinds of flaws and eventually solved those problems. Nevertheless, if I had checked my presentation by myself, I’d only focus on problems of details while ignoring other flaws.

     

    Besides, students could evaluate their presentation efficiently through group discussion. Group disscusion combines everyones’ effort, and it will reduce the time spend on evaluation. In this situation, students could finish their presentation efficiently. However, evaculating a presentation by oneself would cost longer time. For example, my cousin was asked to make a evaluation for his computer science presentation, and he invited other attendees to help him. All attendees were divided into several groups, which took responsibility of different parts of the evaluation. By this way, they completed the evaluation in 2 hours, half of the time my brother spent on evaluation when he evaluate his presentation alone. He called the group working “a strong timesaver” since then. So, invtiting others to evaluate a presentation is indeed efficient.

     

    Generally, it’s evident that inviting other attenders to discuss a presentation could definitely benefit presenter more. Firmly do I support the way to evaluate a presentation by inviting other attenders to make a discussion.

    August 28, 2020 at 2:09 am

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