All college students should take history classes

Nowadays, some people suppose that all college students should receive history education. While there is a risk to increase the workloads of college students, I take leave to support the idea that history classes should be regarded as a necessity.

In the first place, many students have already fed up with a cramming way of study, and they expect more than limited professional skills in their college lives. Tons of students would not focus on what they are studying now if not for the great expectations from both themselves and their parents. Admittedly, many of the students have a splendid future before and behind them, but they are not content with the narrow way ahead. Good qualifications are proofs of their intelligence and perseverance, but never hold the key to be an interesting and chill person. By learning history in a college, students can become more wise and reflective. At the meantime, they are saved from a boring manner of life.

Secondly, history is such an appealing subject that it offers us with immense joy and wisdom. It not only helps us to know ourselves better but also guides us in the course of our life journey. Although I have never participated in any historical course, I benefitted a lot when I was reading history. It entitled me standing on the shoulders of giants, to witness the genius ideas and avoid any pitfalls which may occur later in my life. Moreover, history gives me a wider view of the world, which enabled me to see through things more objectively. Exploring history is a fantastic and rewarding voyage, none of the college students should miss it.

In a nutshell, I advocate this policy not only because college students feel obliged to learn history in order to expand the curriculum, but also history itself is a kind of wisdom with great charm.

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To Superdanny:

Score: 63.5.

Problem: Many sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten them and then re-upload your essay.

Nowadays, certain people claim that all college students should take history classes. Even though in most departments, history is not students’ compulsory course, I still firmly go along with this statement.

To begin with, history courses can offer more wisdom than simple employee skill. In China, it is common for most college students to master various technologies to prepare for a nice job. Several causes lead to this situation, including high expectations from parents, employment pressure from society and cost of living expenses. Admittedly, hardcore courses like math and code can help students raise their competitiveness. Nevertheless, in the long run, history course is more important due to its characteristics. History is like a mirror to reflect people’s advantages and disadvantages faithfully. Students can adopt good points and simultaneously avoid the shortcomings, which is conducive for their entire lives. As a result, students can become more reflective and wise.

Furthermore, history classes can offer students immense joyfulness. When reading history stories, they have access to different lives that they never experienced before. As for me, I am a mediocre one among enormous amounts of college students. However, when I read history stories in the class, I can imagine that I were the hero who was a real figure in ancient times. Maybe he saved many ordinary people’s lives during the war. When conjuring up those images, I always felt excited and glorious. Thus, history classes do not only provide students with knowledge but also bring about great joy from imagination.

In a nutshell, I stoutly agree that the university should urge all students to take history classes. Students could feel joyful at present, and even become wiser in the future.

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Score: 57.2

Suggestions for improvement: Improve clarity.

• Several causes lead to this situation, including high expectations from parents, employment pressure from society and costs of living expenses.
• Several causes lead to this situation, including high expectations from parents, employment pressure from society, as well as living costs. (2nd sentence is clearer and simple, which helps to increase 0.6 points).
• Admittedly, hardcore courses like math and code can help students raise their competitiveness.
• Admittedly, core courses (+0.4) such as (+0.2) mathematics (+0.1) and coding (+0.1) can help students raise their competitiveness.

Nowadays, some people argue that all college students should take history classes. As history could help students to realize our world better and step further in the future, I firmly stand behind this statement.

Learning history could make life more meaningful. It’s not strange that some people who are thought to be successful secularly feel vacuous about the world they are living since they rarely have a chance to learn it. Children in China are born with the expectations from their parents to grow up as excellent people. Thus they are required to spend their time learning the useful classes and getting excellent scores to enter the famous universities, which leads to these kids being full of knowledge but without the awareness of why they need these knowledge or what they can do to the world with their knowledge. However, rather than focused on secular problem, history classes tell the interactions between the people and their worlds, this would help students in the university to start to realize themselves as well as the world: who they are, where they come from and where they are going. Equipped with history knowledge, they will get a deeper understanding of the world, which will help them to live a fulfilling life instead of doing the repetitive work.

Moreover, history can serve as the reference when problems come out. By learning history classes, you get to know the experience and wisdom of the people in ancient time and with which you could deal with many difficult issues. For example, from the books I read about China history, I know lots of great generals like Zedong Mao, Xin Han and Geliang Zhu, who are adept in employing people and managing countries. After familiar with their theories, I became more skilled in cooperating with others and make our team perform better. Besides, learning history could also help us know how the world evolve from past to present and predict how it will evolve from present to the future. With rational prediction, we could equip ourselves with what we are still lacking and get prepared before true future arrives.

To sum up, learning history not only help us know our world better but also could help us perform better in the future. Therefore, it is highly recommended that everyone should take history classes.

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This essay scores 64.1.

Problems:

1. Extensive use of passive voice sentences;
2. More than half of the sentences exceed 20 words;
3. Paragraphs exceed 85 words.
4. Lengthy essay (reduce to 320 words).

Should all college students take history classes? Definitely, it gets my fully backing.

To start with some facts, firstly, even with master degrees and satisfying offers, we found ourselves not as happy as we imagined after graduating. Secondly, we are born to be highly expected by parents in China. For instance, top schools, training courses, famous universities and peers comparation. Consequently, we need to study day and night, nearly twelve hours a day, which results in meaningless repetition of knowledge practice. At length, even if you were lucky enough to be admitted by a key university, you have no chance to relax. Because a better university or good job opportunities are pushing you to learn more.

Considering all above, have you felt heart broking? These facts are a really headache. Well, taking a history class now, meeting the chance to liberalize your mind temporarily. Instead of thinking those facts to tired, you will relax you heart, empty your brain and rethink your life.

In reality, there are many advantages to learning history. It enables to bolster our understanding of the world and give us guidance in life journey. The philosophical questions, such as where we are from, who we are, and where we are going, will make us wise and reflective. Besides, we can even predict the future by learning from the past. For me, I believe it can help to build a better life plan. Although haven’t participated in any professional college history class before, I benefit a lot through reading history books. Without history learning, I would never know why I should be proud of my homeland and national heroes. These great historical personages, like chairman Mao, Geliang Zhu and Xin Han, showed deep insights in humanness and leadership. And I learned a lot from them. Apart from that, I come to know that all of us will have our show time in history, especially when we reach middle ages. History is changing, leaving us chances to define the world. Time make it inevitable that in every profession, young men replace the old.

In a word, learning history can make students wiser, understand themselves better, develop deeper sense of culture and have more positive space for relaxtion. There is no doubt that every college student should study history.

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Score: 67.8

Suggestions:

• Shorten your essay to 320 words (that may reduce your score);
• Shorten lengthy paragraphs to 90 words.

Nowadays, some people proposed that all college students should take history courses. Although history may seem unrelated to some majors such as science and engineering, I firmly believe that students from all majors can benefit from history courses.

To begin with, the main goal of university education should not be preparing the society with students mastering a certain professional skill; it should be more about guiding students to find out what kind of person they want to be, and how can they achieve their goals. However, there are still universities creating working machines. As physics majored students at XXX University, our schedules are filled with all kinds of physics courses and experiments. I know that many of my classmates are tired of this life, but they do not know what they could do to pursue a happier life. This situation is very common among students at many universities in China. By taking history courses, students can learn the life stories of all kinds of people, which may help them to find their own answers to what they want, and how to achieve that.

Furthermore, learning history can offer us a better perspective for our own field of specialization. Upon absorbing the wisdom of previous people, we could make further innovations based on their study. For example, by studying the history of economic policies in China, an economist can give better advice to the government about maintaining the thriving of China’s economy. By learning the history of aircraft, an engineer can know the challenges in making an aircraft and may have ideas to overcome these challenges. When students start their professional careers in a certain field, the history courses they have taken in that field can significantly aid their career development.

In short, taking history courses can not only benefit students in finding the meaning of life but also in their professional careers. Therefore, I suggest that all university students should take history courses.

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Score: 56.2

Problems:

1. Excessive use of passive-voice sentences;
2. More than half of the sentences exceed 20 words;
3. Large number of conventions issues (need spacing between sentences).

Currently, people raise the warm discussion on whether all college students should take history classes. In my perspective, it is necessary to let all students in college learn history courses.

In the first step, learning history courses is a crucial factor to form better critical thought for college students. History, as a mirror, reflects the wisdom from the antecedents. In one hand, the experience of history enables college students to improve the judgement in the process of participating in history disciplines. In another hand, the historical events give alarm to everyone and constrain the bad behaviors in daily life. Also, critical thought is essential for the understanding in physical and social discipline. Thus, to satisfy the need of study and high exceptions on occupations, taking history classes does benefits to further develop on critical thought. According to these regards, it is necessary to participate in history courses.

Plus, the acquirement of history classes is favor for the inheritance of culture between generations. History is a vital part of the nation and country because culture is included in history. If people gradually begin to forget history of some ancient countries, their culture will be out of sight in the end. Thus, the good inheritance of history conserve the civilization of a nation. From this view, the liveness of national culture need the guard all college students. Additionally, learning history courses help the communication between different cultures. If we have little common sense of history about other nation, ignoring the difference between cultures may lead to troublesome communication, even the failure of business negotiations. Therefore, the learning of history classes is quite important for the preservation of national culture, but only for the intercultural communication, trade and so on.

In a word, the learning of history courses is urge and necessary for college students. In the view of development for the individual, the acquirement of history disciplines is beneficial to the improvement of critical thought and long-standing developing of the career life for college students. In the view of the cultural preservation and intercultural communications, college students’ learning history classes plays a positive role on cultural inheritance and international communication.

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Score: 40.6

Suggestions for improvement:

• Minimize passive-voice sentences;
• Reduce the number of sentences exceeding 20 words;
• Improve connections by using different words to start a sentence. (Check how many sentences in your essay starting with the word “In”);
• Huge number of grammar and conventions issues;
• Improve variety using different words for the same meaning.